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In which I, Twilight Sparkle, (the biggest idiot in Equestria), fail miserably, utterly, and conclusively in my valiant endeavor to keep my decidedly-more-than-Friendship feelings hidden from one Rainbow Dash (the sexiest fastest mare in Equestria).

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I'm SEXY and I KNOW IT!

:heart:

I am intrigued and this is a good start. Looking forward to more.

You have quite a way with words. This is the most entertaining thing I've read in a long while.

Good start. Let's see where this goes!

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Agreed entirely, couldn't have said it better myself.

Well, except I wasn't first. :3

The whole time I'm like
i.qkme.me/35k0xx.jpg
but it was interesting

Intriguing start. I'm looking forward to the rest.

(and the next chapter of Ballad, of course) :twilightsheepish:

if you need my thumbs...
they are yours to take
:pinkiesmile:cant:pinkiesmile: wait for more

Oh Twilight, you may be a great writer but What have you done?

I get the feeling I would experience something similar if I were to submit my work to something reputable. Not necessarily the incredible success part. Definitely the crushing nervousness and shame part.

Anyway, you've got a wonderful voice for Twilight here. I'm looking forward to more!

(Also, I can't help but love the irony of someone with a Twixie avatar writing TwiDash.)

This, is interesting.

Looking forward to reading more. :twilightsmile:

(One question though: What happened to The Ballad of Twilight Sparkle?)

Hm... Well, I'm not one for shipping, and I don't see Twilight and Rainbow toghether, but this looks interesting enought. :pinkiesmile:

This story is brilliantly written and I can't wait to read more of it, also I am calling it now, this will get featured.

Okay, let me just say this up front: THIS IS BUCKING HILARIOUS!!! You have captured the inner voice of our favorite obsessive-compulsive, anxiety-prone, wicked-intelligent-but-still-so-dumb unicorn in just the most awesome way. First person narration was DEFINITELY the way to go, and it works WONDERS. The tangents, the general snarkiness, everything is just brilliant.

"I don't know where he got it from. It reminds me of Mother."
Oh, that's hilarious! If that isn't proof that, no matter how hard they try, children become so much like their parents, then I'll eat my hat! Literally, my fedora is sitting on the desk beside me, but I digress.

Twilight as a writer. The girl who reads like its going out of style as a writer. Considering that's a lot like me, that's not a big stretch. Seriously, if this is you, raise your hand.

And then the end, just four little bullet points of perfect deadpan. That's just cool.

The characterization is keen, the vast monologue is great, and the set-up this creates is just BEAUTIFUL!
EPIC THUMBS UP!!!!

F*** your marker!:pinkiecrazy:
...
:rainbowhuh:
...
:facehoof:
I mean cliffhanger.:twilightangry2:

This is going to be amazing. I love the way you write!

Twilight is so... damn... adorkable. As others have stated, laughing all the way through. I do kind of like the Epic format, starting near the end of the story and all.

Huh, interesting.

sees a twidash; liked faved and saved for later: now its time to read

A TwiDash fic. QUICK make more stories and make Twi the new center of the shipping universe! xD

I can't wait to see what the story will be like after this fine teaser intro <3

damn you cliff hanger
Cliff Hanger

Yeppppp, this is gonna be amazing. Already see it coming.

nice art. Twily's joined facebook... :rainbowlaugh:

Writing to an audience with a made up name through a system that sends your story out to the masses.

Can't fathom where I've seen that before.

Seriously, this was hilarious! Twilight is just so...Twilight. There is just no suitable description that would do her justice.

Now I have to wait for TWO of your stories to update!:raritycry:

The writing is really good, and it's full of well done wit and humor; I enjoyed it quite a bit. The bit about 'pony sues' felt slightly... meta, I suppose, but other than that very little felt out of place which is rare for writing of this style.
However... Your tendency to often italicize things that don't need it either due to not needing the degree of emphasis it brings, or italicizing things that are already aptly emphasized on in a sentence, had me gnashing and wailing
Also this sentence made no sense:
To possess the ability to reexamine each and every event that led to my fall from grace—in vivid detail—is an unexpected and rather unwelcome consequence, to say the least.
or paraphrased to more simply see where it goes wrong:
My abilities of keen observation are a rather unwelcome consequence.
consequence of what?

Anywho, seems good, but I'm reserving judgement until another chapter or two.

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I'll get on revising that tomorrow night, soundslikeponies; you're right, I should've made that more clear--I appreciate the heads-up!

So, a TwiDash fic that's NOT a clopfic that's JUST got approved and already has 50 likes. I think I might have to read this.

Im definitely Watching this :twilightsmile:

I have one thing to say to you, mister, about this story of yours.




AWESOME!!!:rainbowkiss:

This story has the magics! :coolphoto:

Excellent start.

Twilight Facebook.

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A-HA! Not-First reply! :moustache:

I shall do my best to try to convert you :D

Darn it Grave. I promised myself I was going to hate this fic with all my hate.

AND THEN I END UP LIKING IT. WHAT SORCERY IS THIS. :twilightangry2:

"While I do agree that I was perhaps somewhat hasty and should have run it by her beforehoof, the fact that Earth weighs just a little bit less now and has a thin new planetary ring should be seen as a serendipitous collateral boon!"
...:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: /)^3^(\

the Twilight Bad Fiction Collider!
me like!

ohhh dear, Twi wrote Daring Do, didnt she?
........
if that is the case, giving dash the book to read in the hospital would be some shameless self promotion indeed :pinkiehappy:

You, you used wherewithal :heart::twilightsmile: My favourite ship written by an articulate and talented writer, I am enthused! More please!

So far, very promising indeed! :pinkiesmile:

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Lovely backstory there, the whole nervous elation from Twilight and her plight as a writer was quite fun to read.

Mind you, I don't know how it's all important for the plot yet, but it'll be fun to find out!

I liked Twilight nuking the heck out of her self insert stories. Funny, too, how your one line about Twilights brother felt more like something a Real sibbling would do, than the entire BBBFF nonsense from the show xD.

:pinkiegasp: this is one of the most well Written story's iv ever read. :pinkiegasp:


I know I should stop reading But I can't

You sir Have Bested me And my efforts to never read these kind of stories(':moustache:');

Twilight using the magical equivelent of a Hadron Colider to destroy her stories?...

You, sir/madam, have earned three things: A favorite, a Thumb's up, and several mustaches.

Enjoy: :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

This story is definitely original... I love it :moustache:
Can't wait to see where this goes! Keep it up! :heart:

Tracking. Will read when time allows.

This is very well written and original idea, I look forward to more.

...wow. NooBs always trying to make Atom colliders in an unprotected area. ALWAYS WEAR PROTECTION

This is without a doubt the best first person FiM fic I have read. Goods to see more of your work. I an already loving it.

Not sure what should I do, fav it or kill it with fire

Yow. I approve comprehensively of your writing style, humor and characterization is spot on... Once you add a few more chapters, I hope you submit it to EqD; it's awesome :twilightsmile:

Oh god, this was hilarious. This is so getting tracked. SO HARD :rainbowlaugh:.

This looks like it's really funny from the comments ahm seein' and that's the only reason ahm readin', don't get any other ideas or yer full o' horseapples.

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