A regular brony get his wish to go to Equestria as a earth pony, but he noticed a problem off the bat.
There was no one there.
A reviewer still wanting to learn more.
A regular brony get his wish to go to Equestria as a earth pony, but he noticed a problem off the bat.
There was no one there.
Well now...
That happened, I suppose.
I like this. It's a good "twist" on the standard HiE formula, and a creative one at that. On thing I noticed though, is that not once is silence mentioned. A world devoid of all life would be VERY quiet.
Maddeningly so...
Unfortunately I'm on my my phone so I can't point out the typos, but I will say despite the intriguing concept, the story is blindingly fast and resolves oddly and abrupty. Despite this, I'll still drop the like and fave (because I fave every story I like). Maybe you could expand this more as a prequel/sequel? I'd be interested to see where it would go.
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Maybe I could make a sequel with ANOTHER person, perhaps a pegasister, but I'll need to think out that plot line.
It should be in more detail
I think it would be great if you made a sequel with a pegasister or a brony that comes in multiple chapters. Maybe the person in this sequel is going to kill themselves when they find the dead brony-turned-pony and his suicide letter and they decide that they don't want to meet such a terrible fate so they end up traveling all around trying to find answers. Along the way they might find others in the same or similar situation who become their friends. Its just an idea. I would make this sequel myself but I've never written any sort of story so my version would be terrible.
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Have to come up with an exceptional reason as to why they all disappeared though if you haven't...
I digress. While I'm not a pegasister, I'd had loved writing about this with you if I had time...tedious school and all.
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What's really amusing, is how similar this is to one of my fics An Empty Reality
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How funny.....
I actually tried to see if there was any stories like this, but I guess I didn't see yours. Oh well...
Most morbid story ever
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That's not the worst I can do....
PLEASE! NO MORE!
I am doing a review of this on Rage Reviews!
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Thank you...
5174236 I posted it!
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Will you message me a link?
5174293 Oh, come on! For some reason, it isn't showing up...
Here's a rage review I did on your story. There are a lot of stories on FIMFiction that are completely un-fixable and I'm happy to say that this is NOT one of them.
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Thank you.
Start a new line for every new speaker, and since this is the only time he speaks, he's a new speaker. Also, wants should be want.
Nice fic
5364641 Thank you.
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No prob
WOW !!!! What a sad twist.