It really had been a long time since Sunset had written to a princess, and a long time since she had been a student. But can she put her past behind her, or will her inner demons consume her? With her new teacher being none other than the Princess of Friendship, Sunset's future looks promising.
This will be a SunLight story (SunsetxTwilight shipping). Also EQG (although that's kind of a given).
Cover art by RuinedOmega.
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I like it, seams nice, can't wait for more.
Yeah! Update soon! This seems super sweet!
Wow, i'm so excited!!! i cannot wait for something tragical and emotional to happen.
Huh, interesting beginning. Looking forward to seeing where you'll take this!
Interesting so far. And I don't need to see Rainbow Rocks to know what's going on (I just haven't seen it yet, forgot to record)
Ooh, interesting. Sunset's got something to hide, and Twi may soon be doing some looking into the past. As always, looking forward to more!
This is gonna be good.
By the way, this is completely unrelated to this fic, but who here can see Vinyl Scratch corrupting Octavia into becoming a DJ?
Just a minor detail, i think this pun is not suitable in this human world.
5142960 Crap, totally missed that. Thanks for picking up on it
I hope Sunset didn't do some bad things to her human counterpart...
Or maybe the Element of Magic showed her a vision of the monster she would've become?
Interesting story so far. I look forward to the next chapter and future chapters. I wonder about Sunset's past. Interesting idea about her being banished to the human world instead of choosing to go to it.
I look forward to more of this story and I hope that Sunset and Twilight do also sometimes find time to actually be together every so often in person or maybe pony. Whichever. I do like this whole correspondence idea a lot
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This story is getting really good. I love it!!!
Huh, interesting. I'm honestly not quite sure how I feel about this, given that murder strikes me as a bit of a Moral Event Horizon, but I guess given that she also attempted it while in demon form and was forgiven for that, it sorta works here. *shrug* Looking forward to more!
Interesting... more! XD
hmmmm. I'm not sure what I think about this. I mean the whole murder thing and the fact that Fluttershy doesn't seems to care at all... Is rather hard for me to fully grasp. I mean it wasn't even something done unintentionally. Sunset planned it and didn't even think twice.
Hell she didn't even seem to have a reason for it, not even a power hungry reason for it. To me it seems like she did it because it was a Tuesday and she murders on Tuesdays. It might have been a bit better if you at least had her rationalizing it in some way to herself instead of just doing the deed and leaving us to come up with her reasons alone, even if they seem obvious to you.
I'm very unsure about this fic currently...
I will at least read the next chapter, but that will probably be a make it or break it chapter for me.
FINALLY!!! I thank you for not making Rainbow a book-dumb jock! I like to think she has to be smart to stay on the sports teams and to know what kind of injuries she can possibly sustain. That said, I'm enjoying the story. Keep it up.
5196627 Thanks, I'm glad you like the idea
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Her reasoning was probably that she didn't want the world to see 2 Sunset Shimmers. It didn't seem like she planned on leaving the human world at all after everything that happened.
Just like the book is drawing Twilight's attention this fic is drawing me in
5196895 I know what her reasoning is. I was trying to point out it makes what she did a little easier to possibly forgive what the character did if we were told this reasoning instead of it just being left up to us to figure out, even if it is obvious. If you don't bother to fill in the gap yourself, it does come off as Sunset killing the other Sunset just because she could.
I was meaning for the comment to help. If a writer goes down the route of letting the readers fill in blanks. They could easily fill in the blanks wrong and that causes problems for the story as a whole.
Also the main thing was how Fluttershy didn't react at all to it. Even if she distanced herself from the situation I don't really think it sounds like Fluttershy to just gloss over the fact a friend of her's killed someone intentionally in cold blood. She should react in some way not just be like "meh". I am not saying Fluttershy should hate Sunset or let this cause too much strain on their friendship, but she shouldn't forgive it just like that either.
I know the author tried to lampshade this with Sunset's response, but it just didn't seem to work in that moment for me. I still like the idea of this fic a lot. I am just going to be a bit wary for a couple of chapters possibly.
After reading this chapter, I will admit I feel a little less wary of the story. It was good to see that Twilight at least didn't just respond "meh" to what Sunset did. I do wonder why Luna forcefully removed Twilight from her room, even if it was with a gentle touch, though.
It was a short quick chapter, but in my opinion needed. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Huh, interesting. I wonder what Twi will find in the book, and if she can resist its influence...
5197008 that was just her way of saying "Go to bed Twi"
5199792 Thanks for answering that. Knowing how Twilight gets that was probably the best way to get her to actually sleep.
Oh, wow...Sunset... *hugs her* She can do it. I know she can!
.... You have me HOOKED
Go on
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Sunset shimmer at her worst until forcibly transformed by dark magic clearly stated she wouldn't kill. She lets spike go immediately stating she isn't a monster, and this is after seeing someone get everything she wanted from what is to her perspective two and half years.
5320594 She only killed once, after that she never did again. It's harder to hide bodies when you don't have a big, enchanted forest conveniently located nearby or monsters you could throw the blame on
Dotted with a heart? Ooooooh~
well, things just got fascinating, image Flash seeing HTwilght(Human born Twilight)! or PTwilight(Pony born Twilight) returning and seeing HTwilight
I love this story so far, and I think you do a really good job at diving into the mind of Sunset. I could only find one issue with this chapter.
She said he was her big brother.
Being in a love triangle with your alternative self seems about par for the course with Pony Fanfiction. I honestly look forward to seeing it.
Also Twilight says "big brother" so it is actually easy for Fluttershy to assume an older brother. (that, and unless Princess Twilight and Fluttershy have been talking quite a lot off screen about siblings she should have no knowledge of Shining Armor.)
And finally a person named "Twilight Princess" could reasonably expect "Princess Twilight" to be a nickname if you want/need an excuse for them to call her that. Hell if that was my name I would just get used to it seeing as how the people I know in particular would not pass up that opportunity.
5389257 Whoops, I read over this chapter twice and still missed that fact. I'll go fix it up
thanks for pointing it out. I'm not going for a love triangle, other Twi's there just to make things a bit harder and more awkward, although she'll play her part soon
Sunset gets hit with dark magic and she starts crying before the nightmare transformation, the idea she dabbled with it beforehand is pretty no.
Human twilight is supposed to be twilight sans friends and celestia, also human. (Shit humans aren't ponies was a plot point.)
Lesson zero 24/7.
That, fillies and gentlecolts, was what I think we were all expecting Sunset to write at the end of her message to Twilight at the end of that last scene.
5325871 exactly how i reacted
For some twisted reason, when Fluttershy mentioned Puppy, my brain went, in its best Bender voice: "Hey, guess what you're accessory to."
Love it! It's the best written SunLight fic I've found so far :D
Nice story so far.
Also, man you love torturing Trixie don't you?
good start to the story, but I don't think sunset was banished, celestia may have said she was no longer welcome in the castle or was still her student, but that's not quite banishment, sunset went through the portal on her own.
Why do I feel that the journal will fall into the wrong hands now? Good chapter,
5759928 It's easier for Sunset to say that than for her to admit that she's too afraid to go back and face up to what she's done
Hurray! I'm glad to see that this has updated. I hope there will be more soon, I may need to reread the past few chapters to fully remember what's been going on. I'm a little confused, are the mane six all going to get thier own journal, or just share with Twilight and Sunset's?
5760445 They're all getting their own
Sunset killing her double really clashes with the tone of the rest of the story. You'd think murder wouldn't be so casually shrugged off.
Too long but it's worth the wait. 9/10
Lots of feels here.