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Although it left it, it knew that it was right, it made it down, because it didn't know what's up.

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Celestia wakes up from a fitful sleep.

Something had awoken her unnaturally, just when she was having fun. As she tries to get back to sleep, a creature suddenly appears. It doesn't say much, holding a terrified princess captive and placing a cold, thin appendage on her lips.

"Shh", it says. "No tears, just dreams."

Rated Teen for weirdness. And scaring ponies. Unjustly, I might add. A fic that laughs at horror tropes, but sometimes just likes to use them.

AN: This the very definition of what happens when I go full retard. You never go full retard. Expect very poor writing and nonsensical nonsense. This has probably been done before in some fashion. I just find that statement, 'no tears, just dreams', hilarious... for some reason.

Finally got myself an editor for this, thank you, Midge!

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 82 )

Next chapter idea
We then find out the unknown being is Seananners who proceeds to discuss his love for necks

The human should have a power that only allowed ponies to see him while they are half awake.

in the next chapter

hmm suggest it's a nightmare revenge cake :pinkiecrazy:

hahaha celiestia will feel terror with a hint of sweet icing:pinkiecrazy:

She wakes up to find him brushing her tail... while using her flank as a pillow.

Why stop with celestia, why not make the human seek the mane six, I would love to see Rariry's reaction.

Hmm. Maybe this human be visitin' both princesses, but one at a time.

Holy fuck this human is creepy.

Made more so by the oddly sensual descriptions of their lips when he puts his finger on them and dem notes.

you could do one with rarity and have a fake...or real spider hanging from her hair by webbing holding the note that the human placed...somehow

5134691 I don't know whether to think him creepy or caring. I don't particularly care about the others at this point, as I've not been convinced to CARE.

I always thought Twilight tasted like hair. Good to know I was wrong.

At first this was kind weird, but then the second chapter hit, and it got serious and not bad. The suspense factor is amazing.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

5138688 It only gets better. Unless it doesn't. Sorry, I presume the mind of the reader too much. Hope you enjoy it though.

5138693 It feels like a psychological horror fic, and psychological is the only horror I like. And this does a good job on the psychological aspects in the last two chapters especially, and if you wanted to, you could re-write the entire thing without the comedy tag (as in go serious with it), and make this absolutely amazing.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

5138697 I've been meaning to do that, actually. This started as more of an experiment but then I got a bit more serious as it moved forward, as you can probably tell in the writing. The third chapter is a masterpiece in my own opinion and completely encapsulates what I wanted from this if it were serious. Then again, the comedy gives the fic a little padding as we ease into more and more disturbing aspects of this story.

So, I may amend this to be amazingly creepy in time for Halloween (even though we don't have that here), or I could keep it as is and concentrate on darkening it with each chapter.

Thanks for your comments, by the way, I like good opinion on the story and the direction.

5138712 I say just re-write the first two chapters, but have that as a kind of back burner thing, while still working on new chapters in a serious tone.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

“Shh”, it lulled softly, locking hellish eyes with her own. It took it’s finger back and gave her a long, slow lick on her right cheek. Twilight whimpered softly.

BAD TOUCH. BAD TOUCH.

I'm liking this story more than I should. Keep it up! :moustache:


...That's what she said! :rainbowkiss:

If I was only on my own... Luna, I would stay up every night, so that you wouldn't be alone, but saldy, my education must come first...
Who else has felt... complete.. during the night? When the moon gently shines, softening the harsh colours of day, and bringing everything's true nature? When the wind whispers secrets, and the stars smile down on our dear Earth?
(Wow, that was poetic)

5149845 I carry liberal amounts of both in case a strange bipedal creature walks into my room and gives me a lick... just in case.

5145516 I've always loved the day and night equally. In fact, the best time of day/night for me is twilight, because that is the gentle transition from beautiful rendition of the day into the cool, starkness of the shimmering night.

Ok, you have me hooked.

So, who is the big sister now?


Just brilliant....

Kimonoskunk

Prepare for trouble!
Make it double!
To protect the world from devastation!
To unite all peoples within our nation!
To denounce the evils of truth and love!
To extend our reach to the stars above!
Jessie!
James!
Team Rocket, blast off at the speed of light!
Surrender now, or prepare to fight!
Meowth!
That's right!

5138712

You know, if you wanted to re-write the first two chapters, but keep the comedy tag...

You could have the "nightmare creature" be a dream-creation Luna's using to troll Twilight with.

Heck, whether or not that's what you intended, that's now my headcanon when it comes to this fic.

5149855

Well now, I have to track you down then.

There is very little I wouldn't do for some delicious, delicious Holy Water. It's like a Klondike bar.

Nooooooooo, I wanted him to lick Fluttershyyyyy!! :rainbowwild: Glad to see this updated though!

What is this creature's agenda?

Uhhm... finding a mate for life? A comforter for cold nights? Something like that.

5347152 Will you reveal it? Near the end or in the middle?

I love a good pretentious mind-screw. And I have been following this since chapter two, so I am a tad surprised that I don't yet have a grasp on the plotline of this fic, which really goes to show how creative this really is.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

5347432 I take it where the writing goes. If the character feels like it, it will be revealed, as the progression of things go.
5347475 The motivations and actions have been exceptionally murky to keep the suspense going.

5347490 Well I suppose that's a decent mentality to start with.

Oh my god, I'm enjoying this more than I should be!:rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by kotor511 deleted Dec 7th, 2014
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