I'M GOING TO TRY THE BEST OF MY ABILITIES, TO MAKE THIS STORY AS LONG AND EPIC AS I HUMANLY CAN. All though the Miltiverse Theory is quite popular among the Brony faction, I for one had made it that much more interesting for you to accommodate your selves with. (Hope you enjoy seriously I do, sorry for any grammar errors you might encounter. For the most part, I fixed it. and it makes sense.) Constructive Criticism is widely accepted whether it be aggressive or not, just spill the beans! okay.
(Its a bit sloppy and unprofessional I'm very knowledgeable of that just......inexperianced is all) its gets better though.......
*clears throat numerous times*
Now let Me introduce My self....
Hello, My Name is Hank but my Friends call me Henry. I would like to tell you a story of my experience, as it happens. It was During one of my Nightly Runs, I had happen to notice a glimmer of Light just around a Street Corner. due to my curiosity, I decided to check it out. Next thing i knew, i was sucked into some kind of Wormhole, or what had seem to been at least. Any ways last thing I remember was a tainted pinpoint of purple light in an Alley not even five Feet in front of Me. And all a sudden I felt a jolt of Energy coursed through Me, I blacked out. Upon waking I found my self in the world of Equestria, well now...
not to bad for a first story
not bad... it is quite good btw..
One tip; The colorful letters do not help. I messed up the lines more frequently when reading the parts with purple and red letters.
498032 the plot is decent.. i am thinkin that i hope that it will become epic since i am also gatherin idea for my life story fic.. there is one currently at my account but i am jus the co author..
A few pointers,
1: put about two spaces between conversations, see how I'm talking now?
[And now I am? You need to do this so everypony knows a new pony is talking!]
2: Like another said don't use the colored text, use it if somepony's voice is very VERY deep and/or evil.
3: You get a like and fave! Nice work.
500071 This shall be done, good luck.
496811i may be novice. And sloppy in comparison to other authors, but one thing is most certain and obvious. I pertain a level of awareness. The next chapter is going to be better and more prastiged. I still hope there are others who will scold me for any errors I retain in the next chapters. After all I'm an ammetuer such wording can not go un dedected!
To you my friend I need to message you about some hints that could make this a bit more readable.
514734 go for it bro, i apprecate!
Hey, now we can talk here too! Awesome!
Thank you guys, for your thoughts, i always like to live and learn. :)