The sun was setting in Ponyville. Its cool autumn air blew past Sweetie Belle as she ran for the Carousel Boutique. Out of the corner of her eye, she saw what looked like... Scootaloo?! Sweetie skidded to a halt, unintentionally stepping on her dress in the process. The rip was torn even bigger. Irothrust was supposed to fix this, Sweetie Belle thought to herself, slightly annoyed.
"Hey, Sweetie Belle." Scootaloo skipped over. Her tone could only be described as whimsical.
"Uhh, Scootaloo? Are you alright?" Sweetie asked back. Concerned for her friend.
"I'm better than alright! Ryon said he loved me,” Scootaloo look at the grounds, nervously kicking the dirt, then back to her friend. “and I... I kissed him!"
"What?!" Sweetie Belle'e eyes shot open.
"It's amazing! It's like we're meant to be together."
"Don't you think that's a bit mature for us, for you?"
"Naw. It's just young love. Besides, what about that little rumor about you and that certain Button Mash colt?" Scootaloo smirked at her friend.
"Shh! Ok.. please keep it down." Sweetie Belle looked around in case anyone could hear them.
"Haha, fine." Scootaloo said as she sat down. Sweetie Belle looked at the dirt road below her. Her mind was racing. Scootaloo has a crush on Ryon? But Ryon, he's a... oh, Irothrust never told me what the three of them together were called. But he does rule the ice. And with his sister Loviatar on the loose- wait, will Scootaloo be in danger?!
"Why are you so quiet, Sweetie Belle?"
"Oh, no reason." Sweetie knew to keep her promise, although she had a feeling she should tell her friend about the Sunset Gates, and everything inside of it.
"Oh, okay." Scootaloo shrugged. Then another orange pony came from in the distance.
"Apple Bloom! Where are ya'?" A familiar voice yelled.
"Applejack? Is that you?" Sweetie lifted her head.
"Scootaloo? Sweetie Belle? Da ya two fillehs know where in tarnation mah sister is? She was supposed ta be home hours ago, but she nevah came back!"
"She was hanging out with Diamond Tiara, Silver Spoon, and- Loviatar!" Sweetie Belle gasped, realizing Apple Bloom could be in danger as well.
"Why is she with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon?" Scootaloo asked, surprised at her friend's odd choice.
"I guess she wanted to be cool. They were at the gazebo earlier, and that's when I last saw 'em." Sweetie said.
"Well, what are we waiting fah? Let's giddy on over there!" Applejack began to run to the gazebo, the two fillies following behind.
"Anypony want milkshakes?" Diamond Tiara asked, trotting into her bedroom, followed by her butler who had a silver tray balancing on his hoof, with different flavored milkshakes on offer.
"I'll take a vanilla!" Loviatar said.
"Dibs on the cookie one!" Silver Spoon added.
"Can I have the strawberry one?" Apple Bloom shyly asked.
"Sure, Apple Bloom! Anything for a friend of mine." Diamond Tiara said, watching her butler give out the shakes.
"Ah'm your friend?" Apple Bloom asked, feeling confused. Who knew Diamond Tiara would ever say that?
"Why of course! Anypony that is a friend of Loviatar's is a friend of mine." The pink pony replied, slurping her chocolate treat.
"I never knew how much fun ya'll could be!" Apple Bloom said, now laying on a sleeping bag in Diamond Tiara's bedroom.
"When are we going to do the makeovers?" Silver Spoon asked.
"Loviatar! Can I see your cutie-mark again? It was absolutely gorgeous earlier, and I am a little envious of such a thing." Diamond Tiara ignored her friend Silver Spoon, and focused more on the white pegasus.
"Oh, uh... well, if you really insist..." Loviatar began.
"Come on! Show me your cutie-mark."
"Here." Loviatar lifted her dress, and underneath was the purple sparkles. Now that the fillies were inside, they could see it a lot better than they could have earlier. It was five purple sparkles- a big one in the middle, and four smaller around. Two on top, and two on the bottom.
"The makeovers, Diamo-"
"Not now, Silver Spoon. Now, what did you say your cutie-mark meant again?"
"Ugh. They won't listen to me.” Silver Spoon sighed “Do you want to talk, Apple Bloom?" Silver Spoon looked towards the yellow filly.
"Uh, sure." Apple Bloom quietly replied.
"Well, I'm going to be taking an extra class after school on nursing. I find medical aid very appealing." The silver pony said.
"Oh, that's uh, cool. Ah'm more into farmin' an' such. Ya' know, those kind'a things."
"Yeah." Silver Spoon sighed.
"What's wrong?"
"Oh, nothing. I just wish Diamond Tiara would pay me some attention."
"Oh, well I think-" Suddenly, there was a knock at the front door. Diamond Tiara ran to see who it was. The others watched expectantly.
"A- Applejack? What brings you here?" The small pink filly asked.
"Have you seen Apple Bloom? She hasn't been home yet." The work horse questioned the pink filly.
"Ah'm right here, Applejack." Apple Bloom said, walking up next to Diamond Tiara.
"Come on lil' filly. I neva said ya could be wanderin' round at night, goin' ta parties an' such. Let's go home."
"But-"
"No buts 'bout it! Now come on."
Apple Bloom packed her bags. "Sorry gals, maybe another night." She sighed. As the yellow filly stepped out of the door, she noticed her sister wasn't alone. "Sweetie Belle? Scootaloo? Why are you two here?" She asked, sounding like Diamond Tiara.
"We helped Applejack find you. She was really worried and-" Sweetie began.
"Sweetie Belle!" Apple Bloom yelled, realizing that her friend was the one that had caused her to leave the sleepover.
"Sorry Apple Bloom, but your sister was worried abo-" Sweetie Belle was interupted.
"Ah was havin' the most fun!"
"It's not my fault."
"Yes it is!"
"Girls! Stop this bickerin'!" Applejack snapped.
The three fillies became quiet. Scootaloo didn't understand, why Sweetie and Apple Bloom were arguing so much? All three of them were such good friends; it didn't seem right.
"I'll see you tomorrow at school." Scootaloo said, turning down a different road to her house.
"You too!" Sweetie Belle said.
"She was talking to me." Apple Bloom hissed.
"Girls!" Applejack yelled again.
Oh no, I started another argument. Is that why Sweetie Belle wasn't talking a lot earlier? Is that why Apple Bloom was with Loviatar, Diamond Tiara, and Silver Spoon? Do they not like me? Have I been the root of the disagreements? Is it all my fault? We were united, and now we are divided. Scootaloo looked at her friends as they left, a look of worry crossing over her face. ...and it's my fault.
Love this chapter. Just curious, where did you get the names from? Someone probably already asked this but still...
5328102 Thank you! And it's ok. If you're talking about FoolRegnant, meh. I don't think he really cares how I got them; he just didn't like any of my story in general. Anyway, here is how I came up with the names:
For Loviatar I had to do a lot of research to find a name that would fit her personality. At first I tried using the thesaurus so that she could have a name like discord did; being named after what they do. But then I had a better idea: why not give her a deceiving name? (I guess that if some people haven't noticed, Loviatar isn't the nicest
personpony.) After searching the internet for I have no idea how long I came upon a Wikipedia entry. It was about a fictional evil goddess of pain and agony. Her name was also Loviatar.Irothrust- now she was hard. I wanted to give her a 'nickname' from Loviatar at the beginning of the story. Not exactly a nickname though, but rather an alias. At first I wanted to show Loviatar's 'bully' side of her personality, but then I felt like if I kept it hidden for a little while it would lead up to more suspicion. Anyway, for the first idea I had 'Iron Rust' (and that is a spoiler for later! Shh...) But then I decided to put them together and call her Irothrust. Plus, once she comes out of the shadows and such it'll (once again a spoiler) show her personality.
Ryon's name... like Irothrust's name, I had to tweak and pick at it. At first I wanted something like a real name (Ryon was my first character that I created out of these three.) I was thinking Ryan or something, but then I began thinking about my story and the plot, and a supernatural pony with a regular human name just doesn't work for me. So, I fixed the first time and got Rion, but that reminded me of Orion Solstice from the Rainbow Factory creepy-pasta. (he is also associated with Scootaloo in that story.) So after fixing it and changing some letters the second time, I came up with Ryon.
I hope these helped you!
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I have no longer dear who regnant is but nice to know their history.
5328980 If you are asking about foolregnant, he was attacker towards my story. He had a problem with everything. But, at least he's not attacking now (I think he couldn't handle my story any longer.) He also asked about their names, but not the same way you did. He said I was using names from other places. But, people, or ponies, can have the same names.
If you're not, then sorry about the misunderstanding.
5341472 Thank you!
First off, I've only read the description. I don't know if it's the wording, but something about it is confusing me. I'll put this on read it later, for now. (word of advise, I know you want there to be mystery, but try giving a little more detail on what happens)
5353551 Alright I'll check into that.
5354666 Well, the description makes sense now, but now it a little too strait forward. Try something like this,
Something like that. I can't really write what the best option is, because it's not my story, but I tried to give you something to work with based on what you had given, that gives enough description, to explain the basic plot without giving away important details.
Hope this helps, and that I'm not just being difficult.
5354714 I understand that you're trying to help, and I thank you for that. I will use your description; I see that I am the author I can't reword it to where my readers like it best. (Which is true.) Also, I have already gotten to that part of the story. I hope that helps clear things up.
I'm not trying to give away my whole story (because, really, I'm not. There's actually a lot more that I'm keeping secret until we get there.) I just felt like since I've already gotten to that part of the story I could put it in my description, but after reading yours and then thinking about the people that haven't read my story- well, I just thought that mine would capture more people's attention. But, like I said earlier, I think it is better to take one of my reader's opinions. Thank you.
BTW- I reworded/added a little bit of your description, but besides that it's the same.
5354800 I'm glad you found a combination that works. I have roughly 900 stories labeled as some form of read it later, and this would normally be near the bottom of the pile, but since you actually listened to someone's advice and diligently responded to them you've gained my respect. You get a follow, and I'll add this to my "high priority read it later" folder. That folder still has 55 stories including yours, but I'll get to it a lot faster.
5355199 Thank you very much!
This story is awesome
first I felt bad for sweetie belle and now I feel bad for scootsy, WHY MUST YOU TOY WITH ME EMOTIONS!