Pinkie Pie is Ponyville's resident party planner. That's what her cutie mark is for. But what if the three balloons on her flank really meant something else? But what could three party balloons mean, if not dubbing Pinkie as a party pony?
Delve into Pinkie's deepest, darkest memories, and discover the truth behind her cutie mark. And the true purpose that Pinkamena Diane Pie serves in the world.
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Cool story
5122851 Thank you. And thanks for the favourite
I'm.
Repetition of Such.
The word party gets used an awful lot, too, especially in repetitive bits such as calling Pinkie Pie the "party pony", or referring to guests as "party guests", so I'd try and trim a couple of those, too.
Overall, though, it's interesting and I enjoyed it. And I'd like to know who this evil stallion is that's upsetting Pinkie for (seemingly) no good reason.
5122860 All will be revealed
5122851
Tell it again.
5122867
Or, you know, you could just tell me.
5122894 Hmmm..... nah
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You're evil.
5122927
I. Love. This. Story.
MOOOOOOAAAAAAAARRRRRRR
5122870 Cool story
And this, fillies and gentlecolts, is what we refer to as "a douchebag".
Three chapters in and I am impressed with what has been written. This is indeed an interesting story idea and your pacing of this story is steady. Your interpretations of Pinkie an Twilight are on par and I honestly can't wait to read more from this whenever you update this next.
-Frost
5165220 Thank you very much for your feedback
I'm loving this to death.
5182529 Glad to hear it
In my own opinion, I like this story and would definitely like to see more about this.
And now, as the main judge for the contest, I shall give my verdict.
You have done an excellent job of displaying fright, terror, anger, fear, and discomfort, which is exactly what I'd like to see in a horror thing. Pinkie is obviously scared of something, but that is never made clear what in the chapters that are out. It brings in the mood for later chapters to see what it could possibly be.
The stallion who has reawakened Pinkie's fear of... whatever it is, is certainly a way to bring back some horror from one's past. I've never actually seen anything like that, so I'm finding this very original, to be haunted by something in your own past by one hater.
This story isn't the greatest, I know, but it is still very amazing what you have done in only three chapters. You gave Pinkie remembrance of something she wished she'd forgotten, fear, a little glimmer of hope, and some real part of herself to be scared of. Though this story is incomplete, I hope you the best in continuing it.
I hereby rate this story with a 72/100
5292767 Thank you for your feedback. And, for an incomplete submission, your rating for my story is exceedingly heart warming to read
I'd even venture to wonder aloud whether you may be being a little too generous with such a rating 
5292802 To be honest, there are only four fics listed in the contest and this is actually the first one that I actually consider a horror fic. To be honest, this is only the second one I've read, so I still have a bit to go.
This a good story, so is there going to be another chapter, if this story still alive that is?
5334471 The story is, indeed, still alive and well. It's just taking a long time, because of stuff. And things.
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Ah, that's good to hear. I'll look forward to reading the next chapter, whenever it comes out then.
So are we going to hear what Pinkie Pie's cutie mark really means?
5335435 Eventually
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Alright then. I look forward to reading the next chapter then. Keep up the good work.
Then the evil stallion was chased down and lynched by a frothing mad mob of Ponyville citizens.
K.I.R.A Review
1. Story Line - It seems to be running smoothly, though I think the pace is a little slow. 8/10
2. Spelling/Grammar - the proofreading is in pretty good shape. 9/10
3. Completion Status - Not even close. That's a shame, because there's a lot of promise here. We have hooks we need resolved (who is this mysterious stallion heckling Pinkie, damn it?!!!) The story is only just getting started, please finish it! 2/10
4. Proper Length - There is no way, at this pace, the story can be finished in under 10,000 words. Outside of the contest this is not an issue, I'd read more. But that is a contest penalty. 5/10
5. Horror Story - Creepy, yes, but it's not scary. Yet. There are the seeds of a horror story here. But I have to judge just what's completed. 6/10
6. Original - I have to extrapolate from an incomplete story, but it looks like a new take on the old chestnut of Pinkie's mental problems. 6/10
7. The Gore Tag - Gore isn't used, yet suspense has been nicely established without it. 10/10
8. Overall Impression - I like what I've read, I want to read more. 25/10
Total Score - 71
5449790 Thank you for your criticisms and judgement. I take the penalties with full humility; I just wish I had more time to actually write this damn piece, I was really looking forward to getting stuck into this story. I SHALL be completing it, however. It is, more than likely, going to be a VERY slow process, but I'll get it done in the end
This is great writing and I am very excited to read more
So is this story dead?
Would you people please stop cutting onions in front of me?