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Pascal

Pascal #1 · Oct 10th, 2014 · · ·

Pretty good! Damn good for a first story. My only gripe is that there's a lot of telling and not a lot of showing. Still, I'm interested, so I'll give it a fave. Keep it up!

TheLoneBunghole

TheLoneBunghole #2 · Oct 10th, 2014 · · ·

5121105 Thanks for the fave! With regards to your concerns, I definitely get where you're coming from, but allow me to defend myself.

When I first decided to try and write this I was worried about 'offending' other people's head-canon by plopping the story down where everything else is going on. Personally, I don't really care, but I'm not trying to drive away any potential readers, so I made a point of isolating myself from the nucleus of Fallout Equestria and elected to try and build my own region to wreak havoc in. Since it wasn't a familiar place, I feel it's my responsibility to lay down the basic history of the area to give context.

I'll tell you this, though. This will be the only bit of straight up exposition if I can help it. The rest of the story will be told intimately through the characters, and when I visit other parts of the history, such as the Revolution and prior, they will be through flashbacks and proper stories.