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Princess Twilicorndog


Sorry I've been dead for a while. I have had absolutely no motivation, and whenever I did the resulting work sucked. I promise I'll try to be more active.

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I am the Goddess of the Night, Heir of the Moon. I bring the night, the stars, the moon. I was banished to my moon for a thousand years, or so they think. I am the younger sister to Celestia, but this is not truth either. I am known as Princess Luna, but I am so much more. I am the Creator of Equestria, of Earth. But none know, none may know, not even my "sister". This is my story.

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Comments ( 16 )

This is my second fic ever! I hope it's much better than the first. Constructive criticism is welcomed and appreciated!

The only good part that kept me wanting to finish qthis off was that Luna annihilated the humanss. Great part by the way. But everything else has a decent set so I will wait till the next chapter.

Excellent work of face. I approve. :rainbowkiss:

The only part that made me not want to track this story was the human annihilation, there is way too much misanthropy in this community and eventually you start getting sick of seeing it all the time. I don't want to assume that this story falls in that group though, since it could be an important plot device later on in the story. Also I've never seen the idea of Luna being some kind of elder god before, I like the originality so I'll track and see how this unfolds.

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Frankly, I agree, but humans won't be appearing, even by just a mention, very often. There's only one HiE story I really like, and besides, I dont think I could write a HiE story if I tried :twilightblush:

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Well i didn't mean bringing in a HiE subplot or w/e. I was thinking more like she feels guilty or thinks back upon the moment she killed so many men, women and children once and contemplates over it. She gets angry or something and says to Celestia "I've wiped out civilizations before you were even born, so do not mess with me because I am fucking awesome like that!". Nothing really large or distracting from the main plot but at least ties in that large event mentioned in the introduction to the rest of the story. It wouldn't make sense to just mention the annihilation of a species in your introduction and never touching upon the subject again.

Besides the humans getting annihilated part, it's good. A nice start.

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Bleh, no one likes that part. Now I'm going to use it to screw with you all! :rainbowwild:
Not really distracting from the topic, though.

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" Now I'm going to use it to screw with you all!"

NO! You monster, I'll never let you take away my sanity!
...if I had any left :pinkiecrazy:

"Please sir, can I have some more?"

Apart from Luna wiping out humans, I liked it. I might track if Luna feels bad for us...

Wow, this is the exact opposite of a story I'm working on, so I'd reeeaaally love to see where you take it, this is going to be fantastic, I can feel it in my follicles!

so, who's gonna be the first to find out that she's not exactly who she says she is? I assume it'll either be Celestia or Twilight.

11 years later and this is still a one shot "PICK IT UP PLEASE, I'VE LOVED STORIES LIKE THESE BUT I NEVER HAVE BEEN ABLE TO READ A FULLL DAMMM ONE!!!!!!!!"AGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGH

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