Prologue - Dear Princess Celestia, help me!
Prologue
Spectrum Shine
It was just another day in the New Castle of Twilight Sparkle, the other Elements of Harmony were busy. Rainbow Dash was trying to do a test in the Wonderbolts, Rarity had to complete orders for Sapphire Shores, Applejack was busy with the farm, Fluttershy was watching Rainbow in her test and Pinkie was probably making cakes. That meant she would be alone till night, and even with Spike in the castle, Twilight knew he would not give attention to her. The new edition of his favorite comic book had just been released, and Spike would not miss the chance to read the special that the publisher of the comic had made.
And what would be best to do in this situation? Reading of course!
In her new castle, the princess of friendship had gained a huge library in one of her castle’s rooms. Princess Celestia said that even with the loss of her beloved library, Twilight could have an even greater collection of books in this castle. So she gave the giant library that, according to her, had over a thousand books.
And Twilight had read six hundred, by her own accounts, in just one week. And she could not wait to read the rest. And she would have continued to read if she had not heard the noise of lively beats on the large copper doors of the castle.
Twilight let out one of her famous grunts and went to answer the door. When she answered the door, she was greeted by an excited pink-haired woman smiling with a pie in the hands.
"Hey Twi-Twi!"
“Pinkie? What you doing here?”
“I brought a surprise for you!” She stretched her arms, almost putting the pie in the Twilight’s face. The princess blinked a few times, not understanding why Pinkie was there to give her a pie, but she concluded that Pinkie was just being Pinkie.
“Uh… thanks, I think?” she said with a confused smile, taking the pie from the hands of her friend, “Is there anything more Pinkie? I have some other things to…”
“OH YES!” Pinkie exclaimed, making Twilight give a small little jump in fright. She remembered something very important.
“I brought this pie and I have a super-duper-special thing to tell you Twi-Twi! It is soooo important! Like, that I have wanted to tell you it for months! But you are always in middle of these books and silly princess things, then Tirek came to here, then we saved Equestria, then I could not tell you, and now I’m here telling this and you…” Twilight Sparkle just stood there looking at the girl who would not stop talking for a second. Calm down Twilight, you'll read, it must be something important and you should…
“PRINCESS TWILIGHT SPARKLE!” The tall girl’s thoughts were interrupted by a great shout which probably echoed everywhere. It was Princess Luna, logically. Upon hearing this, Pinkie stopped talking and looked back with wide eyes. Luna came flying alone and without any guard. Pinkie shouted "Nightmare Moon!" and jumped in a bush that was next to the castle. Twilight already, dug her nails into the pie dish not to drop it of so much fright. First Pinkie and Luna now? What were the chances of that happening in a day?
“Pr-Princess Luna?” asked, seeing the starry haired woman with a purple dress landed in front of Twilight, facing her with her teal eyes.
“We have come here for… I mean, sorry for that, I am used to talking like that, like you know, Twilight Sparkle. I am here to tell you a important notice, that I was not able to tell you in previous months… I want to tell that… That… Uh…” She began to nervously stutter and Twilight sighed, looking to the side to see the head come out of the bush, staring intently at Luna with a suspicious face. Luna cleared her throat, blushing, “I want to take you for a…”
“Lulu!” Luna's eyes widened, without even looking back she knew who this sarcastic and playful voice belonged to. Discord…
“Discord?” Twilight asked, taking her eyes the older man sitting on a pink cloud , 'driving' it with a steering wheel until he got close to Twilight and getting a little above the studious girl. “What are you doing here? Don't you have something to do in Canterlot or somewhere?”
“Oh Twilight!” He came down from the cloud, going to the ground and throwing the steering wheel in his hands in a corner, causing a small explosion. The Lord of Chaos moved toward her, leaning his face close to her’s, “You know Twilight, sometimes, even I don’t know what I’m going to do! Ummm… Like this!” Discord used his magic to turn into a bird like a vulture, Twilight frowned along with Luna and both of them heard Pinkie laughing when he perched on top of the head of the studious girl.
“Discord! Get out here now!” she cried, blushing.
“Ok, ok! You don’t need to be that serious!” He exclaimed, coming to the ground and becoming human again, "Oh well, and I have something to say Twilight! Ummm… What was it?" Discord stroked his beard, “Oh yes, I was coming there to say if you accept, well, of course you will, I’m the Lord of Chaos and all Disharmony. But, I need to ask if you will go out with me on a…”
“Sparkle!” two shouts called at the same time. And there was only two people in Equestria that would call her like this. Trixie and Sunset Shimmer. This is not good, they do not get along...
Luna, Discord, Pinkie and Twi’s attention now towards the two old enemies of Sparkle. Twilight shook her head at Trixie hiding and then showing up and throwing a powder bomb to the ground, appearing in behind a small flower stall. Meanwhile, Sunset was walking, but stopped just to look at Trixie when she realized that she had been there for the same thing. Well, probably. They were there for Twilight. Both looked at each other challengingly. but Sunset was smarter, and with a snap of fingers was right in front of Twilight with a coquettish smile, but she then looked back and gave a slight chuckle to Trixie, who had just flipped her the bird.
Sunset coughed, turning her attention to the princess, “Twilight! Could we talk for a second?”
“No! The Great and Powerful Trixie is way more powerful than you! And she will not allow you to be the first to talk with Sparkle, you listen well!” Trixie, still a little afraid of someone seeing it because of her past deeds, came walking with a determined grimace and pointing a finger directly at Sunset.
“Nope dope! I was the here first! I even brought the pie for her!” Pinkie jumped into the middle of the small circle formed around Twilight.
“But I, as the Princess of the Night, I have a right to be the first one to say what’s on their mind! And we bet that it is far more important!” Luna shouted at Pinkie, going back to the royal we, and almost slipping into the Royal Canterlot Voice.
“Tsk, tsk, tsk! Was a foolish thought!” Everybody looked where the voice came and then they looked up, Discord was a bird again, now hovering above them.
“I’m of course the most important here! Look into my angel face and say otherwise!” He landed on the ground and turned into a human, but he had an angelic aura surrounding him, a golden halo hovering above his head and sported a pair of angel wings on his back.
"See?” Discord smiled, trying to look as innocent as possible.
“Oh yeah, so it’ll be like that?” Sunset asked, her eyes narrowing.
All the others looked at her and looked at each other, not caring more for the presence of Twilight, that this moment just watched everything with a slight frown and raised eyebrows. Was heard a slight groan that came from Sunset, and it was just enough for everyone threw themselves on top of one another, attacking each other. Twilight let out a soft "Oh no..." and a sigh looking at the scene, not knowing what to do. Discord was irritating Luna, becoming a bird and pecking her. Luna was waving and fighting off Discord, forgetting her magic. Trixie used her almost useless magic against Sunset, irritating her more than harming, Pinkie, somehow, got out her party cannon and using it with effect against everyone in the free for all and some how avoiding the others’ attacks, while Sunset used her powerful magic against Trixie, who was using her worthless magic to dodge it and irritate Shimmer to end.
“ENOUGH!” The Princess of Friendship finally said.
“Everyone, calm down and say to what you want, please!” Everyone recomposed themselves, looking at the ground in shame, then looking at her, sadly sighing as they saw her stern gaze at them. Strangely, they said all together at the same time:
"I just want to say I love you!" Everyones’ eyes widened, including Twilight, who was now blushing. Everyone was quiet until Sunset broke the silence.
“What in all burning Hell?!” This started a series of much less physically violent verbal battles between Twilight’s admirers .
After observing them again, Twilight, half colored by the fact that they are actually fighting over her, sighed, and without wanting to, shouted, “ENOUGH!” and everyone stopped, once again.
“What does that mean? How can this be true? You guys... Had thousands of opportunities to come here to confess to me and all have to do it right now? How do you explain this to me?”
“Destiny” Luna answered.
“Coincidence” that was Sunset and Trixie.
“It is logical that this is the fault of Celestia, blame her, it's always her fault!” Discord said, always playful, making Twi roll her eyes.
“Witchcraft!” Pinkie screamed.
Twilight sigh with all the answers, the odds of this happening were almost zero. She rubbed her temples for a moment, closing her eyes and thinking, then opened her eyes again with a smile, but then coughed and began, “Ok guys, I… I love you all, but as friends, but…” everyone gave out a depressed sigh in a defeated manner, their love unrequited.
“I said ‘but’ guys, don’t get sad yet. Well… I will allow each of you to take me on a date and try to conquer my heart. I know this may sound cliche or something, but it's the only way. Whoever I find to be the most special to me will get me as their girlfriend. I just hope I get this right.” She murmured in the end of her profound speech.
“For realsies?” asked Pinkie lively.
“Yes, Pinkie, I’m serious. This starts tomorrow, this week each of you will take me on a date, and… Well, let’s see what happens!” Embarrassed she said, leaning back on the great doors of the castle and winding one of her loose strands of hair with her index finger, avoiding looking at her admirers.
“Well... I think you'd better go get ready for tomorrow, right? I mean, uh, you Pinkie is the first…”
“Really?! Woah!” the girl jumped in the air “Oh my gosh Twi-Twi, I’ll do cakes, especially for you! I have to go now for Sugarcube Corner. I’m sooooooo excited for tomorrow! You like…” she began, was always.
“Pinkie, we understand. Why won’t you go and make your…”
“Our!”
“Well okay. Why don’t you go and make our cakes?” asked Twilight, trying to calm her friend.
“Okie-Dokie-Lokie!” and then went bouncing to her home with a smile on her face.
“Er… And you guys back there, in this week, Luna will go second, Discord you will go third, Sunset as the fourth and Trixie as the last.” She explained slowly.
All admirers gave a slight smile, content with Twilight’s decision. After that, everyone ended up back where they came from, Luna went to Canterlot, Trixie and Sunset back to... Well, wherever they came from. And Discord to a place that he mentioned to Twilight, but really did not explain nor describe in an understandable way.
Twilight took a deep breath and entered her home, closing the door and ran to her room. Spike raised his eyebrows seeing her like that when she passed in front of his open door, but soon turned his attention back to the comics.
Twilight just jumped into bed, sighing, she stared at the ceiling and took a book with her magic. She knew the week would be more than long, and it would be crazy.
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Plot twist: Celestia loves Twilight too!
If it were me... I'd just be like B**** Be Gone!
Wow this is interesting why do I get a feeling that this is because of a spell or celestia? Oh well chat wait to see the rest.
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Me too Ditzy, I would run fast like "GONNA GO FAST!"
5107086 Apple looks like she is on a bad trip of acid...
I adore this! Please Continue!
This should get way more views than it does. Please continue!
If you don't I will cry
5107111 I sure will! The first chapter (the date with Pinkie) is being made! Hope you like the next!
Also: Don't cry! Here, for you:
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Interesting start.
You have my attention.
5107293 Thank you, I'll try not to disappoint you!
5107299 No problem! And I'm sure you'll do fine.
I feel a great sense of pride knowing that I edited this story.
Please point out any errors so that I may beat myself up over them.
I approve of this story. Proceed.
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Word of the wise, if you want to, you might want to give seperate endings to avoid pissing people off. But its your choice.
P.S. im rooting for Discord.
My only thought after reading the summary...
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She is probably out there, somewhere all alone with no one to love....Also Sombra, but that depends on the varying headcannon.
A small part of me hopes there is going to be a sideplot invloving one of these two and Spike/Main 6 member/Celestia/ANYONE!
Oh man, the art!
It demands that I read the story!
And it does sound quite interesting....
It's Official in her past life Twilight Sparkle was Ranma Saotome
Definitely Twinkie. It is the coolest of names, and I can't remember seeing it before. But when you think about it Twinkie is a fluffy cute ship.
Discolight is pretty awesome also, and when it's done right it is one of the deepest and most intriguing ships, but it would be hard to do it justice in a story that's already packed as this one.
You have my attention in this story.
You have my attention.
At first you had my curiosity, but know you have my attention.
5107474 Really? Can you use a kumquat?
Then Tirek came to here? What? How about... Then Tirek came along being a meanie pants?
Get rid of your first The. Also, you should change the second The to possibly A. Unless there's something special to call a pie The Pie. Unless Pinkie is talking to herself which she brought to Twilight to confess her love.
Redundant second I.
Right... For the second part I think you meant: A slight groan was heard and it was just enough for everyone to throw themselves on top of one another.
Que Space Jam music.
Irritate Shimmer to no end.
Sighed.
Twilight
These two couples aren't quite right
Now that you mention it... There's more Twinkie clop compared to pure romance for that ship. Though there is a fair bit of Twicord/Discolight. Also, please help tie up your editor so that they don't hurt themself
The story premise definitely has me interested, and the picture really drew me in, but all in all I have to say it needs a lot more editing and proofreading. There were several errors that seemed to have been overlooked, one example would be the sentence: "Was heard a slight groan, and it was just enough for everyone threw themselves on top of one another, attacking each other." I would like to see more of this, but just take a little time to read through this aloud to yourself and make sure everything sounds right. A little extra editing can go a long way.
A harem fic with Twilight as the protagonist?
Sure, why not.
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Lots of potential for hilarity, good luck!
Hmm. I have mixed feelings about this. I feel that you can work out a good story, you know exactly what you want to pass through in the narrative, and your characters are mostly acting just like they should, and have been all amusing in their own right. The prologue was a teaser of things to come, and it was very competent at that.
But this story doesn't quite read right...? It doesn't have a major, glaring mistake, more like some some logical and grammatical "bumps" in non-dialog paragraphs, which I'm reluctant to point out since you seem to have an editor already apparently, so... Probably not my place to say anything.
The story you're telling in and of itself is good, though, so props for that. Keep up the good work.
Probably should have said something about interference from other suitable partners. This could be a long one here with great potential. Several alternative endings would be in order to boot. For those who like each of the characters you have picked out. Or a all bit. That would be epic as well.
Saw this picture on Derpibooru yesterday and I see it as a cover on this story today. Perhaps destiny wants me to read this story. Put it in the later box.
It's official. Pinkie wins
. Sorry, you can't beat Twinkie! 
5108609 It'll survive a nuclear war!
just no
5108690 No it won't a common misconception in fact Twinkies go bad after 45 days; better off with a M.R.E.which can last up to 65 years if the package isnt damaged therefore...Twiluna for the win!
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Well, this seems lovely and silly. I'll be reading it for sure
When it comes to Discolight shipping, please, just please--have Discord be supppperrr seductive, fearless, and stupid at the same time. I support that Sunset Sparkle tho
Soooo much...
Having Sunset Shimmer in a humanized non-Equestria Girls fic opens questions. Did the events of Equestria Girls happen in a pony universe? Or maybe a breezie universe?
Twilight really should think more about her admirers. They have schedules of their own. They can't just drop everything to make time for her on a randomly assigned day.
Weee, I was waiting forever for a good fanfic based on that awesome art from megarexetera !
It was just screaming for a fanfic adaptation.
And looks like this is it. Can't wait to see where this is going.
Are you kidding me? This is so out of character I actually had to stop reading right there and then. It wasn't exactly a fantastic piece of literature before that, mind you, but wow. And then, you followed up with this:
Seriously? Sorry, but I'm stopping there.
5109346 Alright.
Ouch.... these comments are destroying expectations. D:
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Just... How do these things make it into the featured bar? I can understand the ones involving sex; people are weird like that. But this? I'm gonna just... I don't know, go cry in a corner or something.
Maybe I'll work on actually updating my story.
...
Yeah, no, too lazy. Fuck.
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Tuna*
...yeah, no. In my own personal collection I have almost that many. The average school library has tens of thousands of books(official Department of Education statistics says the national average is around 2,500 books per 100 students.) The Library of Congress, the largest library in history, has over 36 million books.
5109393 I would answer that but things might get complicated. Anyways, you sound a lot like soeone who just posted a comment on my story! Go figure!
Just saying. 
5108294 Thank you for pointing them out. Now If you'll excuse me, I have a date with a bludgeon.
Interesting idea!
5109554 No kumquat?
5109608 Maybe... just maybe.
And I just lost all interest.
You bastard!
I was gonna make a story with the exact same premise of Twilight wanting to be an independent woman, only to be harrased by her lovers. You know, subvert all the dumb harem tropes. 
Damn my workload.
Anyway, I will be watching this fic and am wishing you the best of luck.
Looks good so far.
Although if you really wanted to subvert the harem tropes and make this unique, I think Twilight would be her own independent woman.
Not all girls have to fall in love, right? If not, I'm rooting for Pinkie and Discord so Sunset and Trixie can maybe end up as a couple if they lose while Luna and Twilight is a bit overdone.
Besides, Pinkie and Discord are epitomes of chaos while Twilight is all uptight. Perfect pair(s).
Or, Twilight can just love them all.
This story looks interesting.
woah O_O
im SOO excited for this one :DD
i love that picture xD and now theres an fanfiction with it as thumbnail haha
it would have been SOO GOD DAMN HILARIOUS if Twilight just said : "Sry, im not gay" and Discord just " YEEESSS, GOT REEEKT"
very well :D
how do you decide in the end who really belongs to twilight?
do you decide random ?