Sweetie Belle achieved much while still stuck in her teenage-prime years, a label wanted the voice that could resonate to the masses, and she brought that. But with fame and fortune, comes impurity and corruption. If you let it overwhelm you, though.
And with any sort of recognition or fame comes with fans, money, and eventually...stress.
Anxiety and fear travels in her mind, and the idea of dealing with a crowd just annoys her. Can she deal with the fans of tonight, or will this be the time she cracks in front of the public eye...
Chapters (1)
The last sentence of your short description is wibblywobbly. I suggest changing it.
But with fans, comes with stress, and stress comes with fans.
-comes with stress comes with fans comes with stress...
It flows better if you hack off the reiteration. We're aware having fans make you famous, and fame is the central part of your fic.
Also "-fans, comes with stress,-" that with is totally extra.
"But with fans, comes more stress than Sweetie bargained for." / "-realized" etc flows better and informs the rreader before they touch the fic what it will be about.
5107441
What you mean?
5107135
Great, man. Thank you, I will make the change.
5108059
Okay, where am I in the wrong, here?
5108095
Oh okay, first though, it felt like I was being framed for something.
5108095
Well, uh, what did you think of the story?
5108129
Yeah, the lyrics part, they were meant to be dirty and off, because she decided to take a more rock-route. Though, I shall see to it that something is done. I did too find the lyrics somewhat distorted, but the emotion I was conveying pretty much heightened my mood to include something along the lines of lyrics. I'll read yours and take some advice from it.
Don't worry, I won't copy.
5108149
Think it would help if it wasn't a one-shot?
5108173
Alright, you make a fair point, man. I'll give it a shot, what the hell right? Okay, so here on out, this story is no longer a one-shot, but something more that can give the audience the feel they've expected from the beginning.