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DemonBrightSpirit


I dream of a man whose hopes never end.

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Ponyville. That is where my fall from grace began. Twilight Sparkle and her insurmountable talent exposed me for the charlatan I was. After that inauspicious day, my shows were no longer a thunderous triumph of magic and trickery. They were a blighted sideshow—a mockery of the splendor they had once been.

In my desperation to retain the life I once held, I stooped lower and lower. I finally hit rock bottom on a remote rock farm. There, I assumed the life of some ordinary, mundane pony, hammering away at boulders until nothing but pebbles remained. It was beneath me, humiliating and degrading. The days dragged on, but my dignity fell no further. It was the bottom, the very bottom, where nothing could fall any lower.

If I had it to do over again, I would have clung to that humble bottom. I would have held on and never let go.

I made the worst mistake imaginable. In my desperate bid to claw my way back up to the graces I once knew, I put my faith in dark magic. While I may have found the bottom on that rock farm, that accursed amulet drug me even deeper, pulling me into the abyss of hell.


Thanks to RaylanKrios for pre-reading.

Submitted to Nonpareil Fiction's Early Autumn Contest.

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Comments ( 23 )

I didn't even notice at first, but Trixie's way of refering to herself keeps changing as she grows more insane. It was only when I noticed a stray capitcal on "Her" that I considered making a comment for a correction, but as I looked at the rest of the paragraph critically it suddenly struck me, this wasn't a typo, it was something Trixie had taken to, refering to herself as one would a god. Wonderful.

Towards the end she is back to the first person, but it seems this may only be in her lucid moments, and I don't doubt she'd fall back to the other speech pattern once it passes.

They way Trixie just keeps slipping and becoming more horrible, the things she does, just fantastic. I love this story, well done.

Oh gosh... I'm very nearly speechless. This story shows beautifully how Trixie thinks about the duel, and now I really want a sequel for this. It was so good!

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

5124369
Nope. I submitted a story there must've been at least four months ago. Still haven't heard word back and they only allow one submission at a time so... :unsuresweetie:

5124859 What story do you think you're waiting on? This is the only one I see in our queue.

5125162
Really? I could've sworn I never got word back on the last one I submitted. Inferno, I think.

5125430 I see a verdict sent from the fanfiction mailbox on July 23. They get forwarded to us separately, so it's possible they overlooked sending it on to you. If you can't find it, I'll bump them to resend it.

5125440
I can tell you that I never got it, though it could be that I simply misspelled my email address. I notice that the form is just about the only one I've ever seen that doesn't require a confirmation of the email address.

5125455 Email address is identical to the one you just submitted. If it's wrong, you won't get a reply confirming a submission. I'll poke ficbox to send it out again.

5125474
All right. I appreciate it. Thanks. :pinkiesmile:

JLB

Small nitpick - I am pretty sure Trixie can't technically lose her humanity. She doesn't have one. I'm pretty sure it's not a word that exists within Equestria. Find some other way to say it, perhaps.

5239180
Well now, look who's in the library! Suddenly I find myself wondering if my review of this story was too harsh.

Good stuff! :pinkiehappy:

Whao. The twins actually tried to kill Trixie?! 0-0 No offense, but Ponies seem hard wired against killing and against all out violence in general.

And Trixie doesn't even REALIZE they were trying to kill her! I know Trixie was being awful, but I didn't think after less than a day they'd already go for those sort of desperate measures.

And the whole 'don't remember while being mentally influenced' BS has become the ultimate turn off for me. It's not a freakin' law of physics!

I just found my new favourite darkfic.
This is Perfect.
If you haven't already, please submit this everywhere you can, like Equestria Daily and The Royal Guard for starters. It needs to be seen.
A side note: this puts far more perspective on me as the author of a series where Twilight has all four princesses' powers and the Amulet in her possession. Truly, she must be insurmountable.
Now shut up me, and take my fave!

5568333
I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. Though, I have already tried submitting it to EqD. It was rejected for something along the lines of just being a recap of the episode from Trixie's POV.

I can't even remember what I have and have not submitted to The Royal Guard.

5575761

just being a recap of the episode from Trixie's POV.

That's bull. You go so much more into why Trixie was corrupted, and her actual descent into such obscene Megalomania. You also added in "unseen" scenes like the Spa Twins and their foolish attempts to drown Trixie. This showed what a mind would go through as it becomes twisted without even realising. I can only shudder at the power Trixie could have had (could still have) if Twilight had not bested her with sleight of hoof tricks. I have chills thinking about it. Could she have defeated Celestia and Luna too?

This fic really needs more credit. I do think you should at least try The Royal Guard. You've written something that shows us a great many interesting points about both Trixie and the Amulet in a short, efficient use of words, without going too into being elaborate or fancy. The atmosphere is definitely there, and it works well. Very well.

:twilightsmile:

Good story. Just one thing:

It is only a matter of time before my humanity leaves me altogether, leaving nothing but a soulless monster of unimaginable power.

Um....Trixie? It already has. *holds up mirror*

Trixie: NOOOOO TRIXIE HAS BECOME A MINIATURE HORSE!

EQD is too damn picky i swear. Ive tried submitting fan art, but apparently its not good enough for them.
here's two i planned on submitting:http://thenorthremembers3.deviantart.com/art/The-Devil-s-Trick-616272301
http://thenorthremembers3.deviantart.com/art/Pony-Creed-Assassin-Dash-3-WIP-641020771

A story for a different time.

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