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Snowleopardkitten

Snowleopardkitten #1 · Apr 23rd, 2015 · · · Introduction ·

Pretty short first chapter, but it's good.

GrimBrony

GrimBrony #2 · Apr 28th, 2015 · · · Chapter-1: Into 'The Land Of No Return' ·

Im still kinda new to writing so I did the best I could

Ksfn

Ksfn #3 · Jun 8th, 2015 · 2 · · Chapter-1: Into 'The Land Of No Return' ·

Is your coverart just a re-colored version of Blackjack? Do you have the artists permission to do that?

Dice Warwick

Dice Warwick #4 · Sep 14th, 2015 · · · Chapter Two: Wasteland (Preview) ·

If you were to take another shot at this, I suggest making a more closed in story, with a simple plot and motivation. Use that to practice your skills, and develop a feeling for the wasteland. Something simple like the main character hunting a pony, or being hunted by a pony. Nothing all that epic, but you need a real big story to do epic, and there are a lot of readers who are looking for more personal story's they could relate too.