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The Accursed One


>tfw you realise you're a generic white girl

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"It's always easier to take something than to work for it..." - Alexandra Bracken
Xerox is a changeling thief that lives in a cave outside Ponyville with a few other thieves. They steal what they need, fence it, and then steal some more. All of them, that is, except Xerox. His ability to break into safes and locks leaves nothing to be desired, but he always manages to botch every heist. Of course, all until his little guild's leader has had enough...

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 5 )

Wow. very well written and descriptive!

Pacing is right on and I felt as if I were watching a movie while reading it, so Detail is also checked on this.

I'm getting a feel for the main character, which is good it is a first chappie so I won't delve into that as much- though as a changeling it has multiple Character development points to hit on.

Will you delve into alter egos development as well or simply use it as a place holder while the true identity gets developed?

So exciting just thinking about it!

You my friend have earned a Fav, a Hoof Up and my attention for this fic.

Let us see how this turns out.

Great Job!- and expect a review from me every chapter and a Final Rating when it ends.

Final Rating comes with a 1 out of 10 Rating., A Final Judgement and a Joke at the end!:twilightsmile:


I just spotlighted your fic in my blog- hope you don't mind.

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Night Breeze is Xerox's go-to disguise for being near ponies so he doesn't get jailed for being a changeling. Mostly he uses it for scouting out possible targets during the daytime and when he gets sent to buy supplies. But more of that in later chapters of course, don't want to give too much away!

Thanks for the nice review and signal boost by the way. :twilightsmile:

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