Sweetie Belle finally got what she wanted; to spend time with her sister Rarity. After the exciting--and exhausting--events of the Sisterhooves Social, Rarity takes her little sister somewhere to have a little chat with her.
Set right after the main conflict of Sisterhooves Social, but right before the letter.
Cover art belongs to d-ar, and is used with permission.
Gorgeous story.
I love the analogy, I really have to use that with my little sister (ok she's not my blood sister but she's half my age and we hang out so much that she may as well be my little sister.) The story had just enough detail, I felt like you were slowly coaxing me into a glorious world that I didn't want to leave.
Ten out of ten, liked faved and followed.
Beautifully written! I just love the sweet, slice of life sisterly bonding moment. Rarity's message about the flowers was so in character! One of the best slice of life bits I've read in ages. Simple, yet conveyed so much emotion. Thanks for posting!
A few typos here and there, but it's a cute story.
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Ah, the problem one has when one's editor is busy...
Would you mind pointing out where?
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Hope this helps.
Better to use "when".
I think you meant "much prettier" or "much more pretty", one of the two.
It should be "skidded", of course, plus you seem to have some extra spacing in the sentence.
Typed "she" instead of "the" there...
This could go a couple of ways: "for a moment" or "for a few moments".
You missed the S on "represents", and since the T is next to the R on standard keyboards, that probably explains what happened with "our memories".
You want "broke" here, but you don't know how much I appreciate seeing "loose" used properly. Seems to be a rarity online these days. (No pun intended.)
I do that sometimes, too; I wanna type one thing, but my fingers want something else...
This is one you might want to look up, 'cause I'm not sure about it. I think it should be "woven", but I could be wrong.
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It does, thank you so much! I'll correct them when I get home from class.
Found a couple more...
Probably "shook", am I right?
"As she spoke, she tied the stems..."
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Haha, shows how much I need my editor right? Thank you again
Glerk! *Is the sound of someone's blood being transmuted into sugar.*
"Think we should save him?"
"Probably."
Wow. This takes me back to a simpler, happier time. The analogy is fantastic, the whole sisterly love atmosphere is adorable.