Summer Of One Thousand Glasses

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markul

markul #1 · Oct 7th, 2014 · · ·

U.
Wriet mer.
Also, nice grammar over there!

General Spritz

General Spritz #2 · Oct 7th, 2014 · · ·

Hmm...
Not quite a reference to another Rumblelee fic. I like how it's going so far, regardless.

Somewhere000

Somewhere000 #3 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

So far, this is getting interesting.
The only problem I do have is the constant spacing in between paragraphs. It's in places that don't need it. I suggest that you don't do that again, unless you want to transition through a short amount of time in this story.
But, overall, I'm liking this. I look forward to reading more.

Brony kaiju soldier

Brony kaiju soldier #4 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

You've got me intrigued and I can't wait to read more.

Sirius_Face

Sirius_Face #5 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

The spacing is a little odd, but I never noticed that when I read this on my phone.

The one thing that bothers me about this is that there's no real explanation for why Cheerilee is so emo. I don't know if this follows some prior story, or some event that I missed, but the lack of explanation for why Cheerilee isn't cheerful is really distracting. I kept expecting to see why she was so down, why she's drinking herself to the point that she needs to numb herself, and I hope something like that comes in future chapters.

Then there's Rumble. I take it he's not the colt we see in the show, but an older pony? He certainly comes off as such.

Overall, the writing style of this story makes me want to read more. There's good writing here, and I'll be tracking it to see what happens next.

Biker_Dash

Biker_Dash #6 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

I am definitely liking the style this is written in. You have my attention, and I wanna see more of this one.

LeafBug

LeafBug #7 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

5113408

there's no real explanation for why Cheerilee is so emo

Obviously it's a rather large point of interest. I think a better question would be why you expected the author to reveal everything—or anything, at that—in the 3k word first chapter.

Sirius_Face

Sirius_Face #8 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

5113860 I don't expect all answers to be given in the first chapter, but I suppose I expected clues and hints to warrant such a 180 in her character. The big point for me was that she doesn't try and hide anything once Rumble joins up with her. I know it's not the main conflict, but it sticks out in front of the main conflict. I'd be very interested to hear the direction the author wants to go with this.

Guy_Incognito

Guy_Incognito #9 · Oct 9th, 2014 · · ·

I don't usually read stories like this, but, I've got to say I thought it was absolutely great what you got done in a single chapter; the dialogue, especially, was exceptional.

Bravo.

Molesterino