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Thunderblast


I used to write horses with swords. Or horses with guns. Pick your poison.

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One thousand years ago, a guard serving under Luna's branch is devastated after witnessing her banishment to the moon. A year later, he finally comes out to express his emotions.

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Awwww poor Radiant Star.

This was pretty good. Good job:twilightsmile:.

5092277 Thank you :twilightsmile: I am glad you enjoyed it! :pinkiehappy:

Shocks #4 · Oct 4th, 2014 · · 1 ·

This was preety good. Though I think the scenes with NM and Celestia could use some work.

5093290 I'm glad you liked it :twilightsmile:

As for the NM and Celestia scene, please tell me what could use work.

(I made the scene where she's banished different from the show version on purpose, just so Radiant could be there when it happened if that's what you are referring to.)

I know that feeling. 'Tis an inescapable thing, that pain.

...Anyway, great work. Really inspiring stuff, I must say.

So sad and beautiful

Sad story, literally brought tears to my eyes. :fluttercry: And to think they will never see each other again...

I can see there's a hater here, considering the story now has 2 dislikes and every comment is downvoted. :rainbowlaugh:

My sole criticism is that this could stand to be a bit longer. You could probably have included more scenes with Radiant and Luna that fortified their relationship and showed how it progressed and strengthened rather than just one or two scenes.

5777400 True. I've had ideas for a sequel that takes place after Luna returns and it goes to her point of view, because obviously Radiant would be long gone by then. I haven't considered one though.

Damn.. this hit me in the feels in a way I didnt expect..

Ouch, poor guy. Really made me feel for him here.:fluttercry:

Can I say knowing he will die long before Luna will return and his last memory of her is she is consumed in darkness makes this even more a punch to the feels.

Regardless, good story overall :twilightsmile:

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I actually had a sequel in mind to this but from Luna's perspective after her return, sadly it never got put together and never will be.

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