After Twilight leaves the human world, a familiar face comes around CHS searching for the source of weird energy readings. But when confronted by Sunset Shimmer, something arises that nobody is prepared for.
I'm a brony. That's about it. Write when I'm bored or have a REALLY good idea that just won't leave me alone.
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Nice job so far :)
Not bad so far, though the dialogue feels a bit dull and a few more details would be nice.
Also, a quick little note. Letters should be written in italics like this.
That being said: fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/127/1/3/thor_and_mlp_meme_for_fimfic_by_ponpheonix-d64fsvg.jpg
Alright, let's see. I'll withhold most of my judgement, but so far this seems like more of a prologue than a chapter one. If I were you, I would add whatever Chapter Two is to this chapter. This chapter was a bit short, although it did give some insight on that "Where's Sunset living?" plot hole.
Cant wait to see where this goes
Pretty good.
the last bit with pinkie is confusing at first. might i suggest making in clearer on what she's doing? i thought she was talking to Sunset at first. but that might have just been me.
nice so far
Not a bad start. Gonna keep an eye on this.
I really like this story
Clarafy. Celestia didn't know what would happen if all six went through the mirror. And then in RR Twilight didn't want the confusion of there being two of her friends. But let's face it. the fans want the Mane 6 and the Humane 6 to meet.
5377716 Correct. However, Twilight is smart and has probably done some research between the worlds. The mane 6 have to meet their human counterparts in the the third movie, if my theory is correct, which I won't spoil just yet
5378254 I'm guessing the same for 3. that or Human Twilight ends up in Equestria. either will be good. both would be great and lord help them having to Pinkie Pies in the same place