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Logic Flip


One, I'm a Denver native. Two, I love combining things that don't go together. Like toothpaste and Orange juice. Also my alias is Tsu Doh Nim

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With the defeat of Discord the Era of Chaos is over and a new age is ushered in Equestria along with the reveal of two beings whose power is beyond even that of the Tri-council. A council who was powerless before the enemy and in the eyes of it’s ponies.
All too soon the rumblings of discontent begin to shake at the foundations of the nation, the pain of it’s near destruction still raw as the many call for a change, a new rule under the Sun and Moon.
The time for celebration has come and gone. In the nation, particularly in the newly titled city of Everfree, the struggle for power has begun. With it, the formation of a new squad.
One to be the hoof of the Sisters. To be their shield and sword.
Praise the Sisters of the Sky. May their reign be eternal.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 8 )
Comment posted by OldSchoolCatholic deleted Oct 5th, 2014

Got your PM.

I'm going to have to say 'Sorry, but no.' at present time, though. I simply have too many stories of my own, and I'm not a big-time pre-reader.

However, I think you've got a good start here!

I'm more of an idea guy than a gramer one, but there seems to be the seeds of a good story here.

However, you've done a very, very common rookie mistake.

Use the groups.

There ARE stories that gets spotted on the front-page and still gets featured and stuff like that, but the easiest way to find at least the start of an audience is to advertise.

Might require some work and looking, but usually thinking over what themes and characters you intent to use, and doing a search for those will be a good start.

And I simply can't press enough how big a difference groups can make. Even if you only average one more favorite/reader per group added, that's still one more reader that can offer you feedback.

I took the liberty and added this to a few 'rookie' groups. Hopefully, you won't mind, and will see just how big a difference it can make.

Hope that wall of text helps! :twilightsmile:

Edit* For some reason, I'm not currently able to add this story to any groups. I'd argue you to try yourself, but here are a few I'd recommend

http://www.fimfiction.net/group/198512/the-shameless-selfpromotion-bureau
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/924/i-just-want-a-comment
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/428/rookies-on-the-rise
.http://www.fimfiction.net/group/200923/stalkers-incorporated

Good 'all-round' choices, those groups. Not the most focused, but you can add near any story to them.

This is the big one, though:

http://www.fimfiction.net/group/27/the-proofreader-group

It has a rule that you need to have been a memeber for at least a week to request help, but it might just be a good last resort.

Hope that helped!

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I may be the only person on this site to have a non-published story in a group. It may have been due to a glitch, or some bug that got patched. I also kinda hate it, but keep it around for my amusement.

Either way, you have to publish it first now. Still allowed to ask groups for help.
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/197236/overly-extensive-editors
Put up a post there, and eventually someone will be sent to help you out. They helped me.

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---Fixy
I like it. Similar "feel", I guess, with The Dusk Guard series. Cool characters, promise of cool worldbuilding, stuff like that.

Also, I like to suggest using [hr] for scene changes/scene breaks. It makes it a little easier to figure out, and doesn't cause borking on mobile mode.
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5108589 Thanks for pointing that out. It's embarrassing how I missed that.

Hey there LogicFlip, I'm that guy from class. It is a great start! Your representation of your original characters are interesting and the princesses are spot on. I am unfamiliar with the term barrel. when Can Do kicked High Kite. Is it a horse anatomy phrase? Also I did notice that you interchangeably used High and Kite to abbreviate High Kite, I think you should pick one. Can't wait to read more!

5116236 Thanks and yes, barrel is an anatomy phrase.

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