The story of a young man who during the events of the story, is on an expedition to find a mythical crystal that grants godly power to the person worthy of it. What he doesn't realize, is that this crystal has a quite different effect. Although, this isn't his only problem, along with discovering this crystal, he awakens a long forgotten evil in the land of Equestria, an evil that is hell bent on enslaving all of Equestria and putting an end to all joy and happiness. Will he be able to stop this evil he has unleashed? Or will he be destroyed by the evil he has set free and never return home?
Chapters (1)
Hey guys, feedback is always appreciated so if you could just leave me a comment it'd be great. Also, my friend told me the story seemed a bit rushed, is it?
A couple of typos, a bit rushed and lack of explanation in some parts doesn't do you good. What he finds is not explained to well and I honestly don't know what he is, is he human, is he a pony, griffin? The concept is common, not really over-used, you need a lot of improvement. Its not bad, but it isn't good either. :\
He takes in meeting a talking pony, dragon, and being transformed into a winged creature (you never specified) rather lightly.
I left certain things and descriptions out for Chapter 2. It's on the way