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Wandering Pigeon


I came here to eat breadcrumbs and indiscriminately shit on cars. And I'm all out of breadcrumbs...

Comments ( 33 )

You're missing the "Sex" tag.

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Do I need a sex tag if there wasn't any actual sex in the story?

A sweet little fic, and Rarity was perfectly in character throughout. :raritystarry:

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Thanks for the feedback. I was kinda nervous about writing her. :duck:

5268203 Oh, I thought there was due to the suggestive nature and the mature tag.

5268203 No you don't, although apparently diapers are somehow considered "Sexual" now for some reason. I understand they're a fetish to some people. But that shouldn't automatically warrant a sex tag.

Oh well, I'm not a moderator, so I have no say in such a thing.

*Comes at the promise of Aloe and Lotus Sexy Fun Times.
THis is gonna be-
*See's the Diaper Warning*
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5268203
I'm not a moderator, but I believe you do if there are any sexual references, even if there is no sex. But I'm curious as to what warranted the Mature rating if it has no sex or gore. Language?

5268240 It's a fetish story, that's why.

5268209 I can see why. I think I can safely say that Rarity is the hardest pony to write in these types of stories. Simply because, it's the exact opposite of something she would enjoy at first glance.

Rarity was pretty much in character. However, there's a few minor spelling mistakes (bowls where bowels would be the correct word was one that stuck out at me).

The alternate ending got pretty dark though with the duo kidnapping Rarity; I'm not exactly a fan of that.

Diapers are a big turn off to 99% of users here.

You must be the 1%.

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Fetish as in sexual fetish? Because then it deserves a sex tag.
If it's just fetish as in "abnormal fascination with something", I don't think it warrants a Mature rating. You write a fic about how Derpy is absorbed with Muffins, I don't think it warrants Mature.

5268275 Thanks for the corrections. And yeah, the alternate ending was pretty dark, but it was just an alternate ending. I hope you at least enjoyed the other parts of the story.

5268286 Well considering that I guess it warrants a sex tag. Thanks for letting me know.


5268280 Why yes, yes I am.

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I begrudgingly read through the story (Actually, I skimmed most of the middle).

Being called cutie by a mare who just touched her privates caused Rarity’s already red face to become a bright shade of crimson, along with her ears.

This alone probably justifies the sex tag. Combined with the rest, and the sex tag is a good idea, even though there is no sex.

5268280
Guardian, how did you even end up here? Stop adding these fics to Knights, part of me dies inside each time this happens.

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It's my job, man. As founder of Knights, I must be obligated to read shitty stories

Actually wasn't as bad as I assumed it would be from the up/down ratio. But nothing was really out of character here, and the introduction to the relaxation was great. Not the first time I've seen a story with this, but an all right interpretation.

5268482 I would debate the point that having diapers in a story doesn't automatically make them shit, but it is your opinion after all. Also, not sure if the pun was intentional or not, but I still find it funny. :rainbowlaugh:


5268518 Thanks for the feedback. :twilightsmile:

5268280 you would be suprised if you knew the truth. And researched it before mouthing up. :)

I like it! A few little grammar mistakes, but nothing too serious.

you have an alt ending made but it's still incomplete?....

5279429 Nope, I'm just an idiot who can't remember to change the story status. :rainbowwild:

5283067 Good. I don't think there needs to be more of this, especially considering what kind of roads the alternative ending could lead to.

Hmm interesting but... seems to be rushed and too short... I was thinking her sister aloe would soon intervene and help Rarity out or something. But its just me I kinda liked the regular then this ending

I think the dark tag would be appropriate for this.

A character being forced into a situation where they're completely powerless to stop another person from doing whatever they want to them, all the while horrified by everything happening to them and under threat of blackmail in which their social standing (and subsequently their entire career) would be ruined.

This is actually pretty horrifying.

The spa seems a key place for special 'relaxation' techniques. This story added a bit more in how it showed how Lotus may have been long holding onto a dream of being a mother and was willing to do whatever it took to make it happen.

The "Alternate Ending" makes me go deeper into thought on what Aloe and Lotus are like. we know they are the "Spa Ponies" but not really much else. Perhaps they are happy with their lives but Lotus wants more and has had a lot of trouble in getting the chance to raise her own foal? Even if temporarily I can see how finding a way through her craft to satiate this need would make a lot of sense.

There could be a lot thought on as a "Before the story" segment. Like how Aloe felt when Lotus went to learn the technique. Or how Aloe genuinely feels about aiding in what she knows is less a 'treatment' as it is a way of fulfilling Lots' own needs.

Definitely enjoy stories where you can think far beyond the confines of the tale. Nice work. :)

“Oh… I don’t know, Rarity,” Fluttershy mumbled. “I don’t think my animal friends would like me being away from them so much… and uh… it is kind of expensive just doing this weekly.”

You got me wondering how this would have turned out had Fluttershy been there.:rainbowwild:

“But Rarity, you’ve already been through all our treatments,” Aloe said. “There isn’t really anything else.”

You could always go back to something you've already done before you know.:unsuresweetie:

“Wait, don’t tell me,” Rarity said, her excitement building. “I want to be surprised.”

The spa twins probably should have gotten that in writing.:rainbowderp:

Aloe shut the door with a resounding thud as a confused Rarity finally started to realize she might be in trouble.

Your just getting that now?!:rainbowlaugh:

“D’aww,” Lotus gushed. “Aren’t you just a cutie?”

Yes she is.:heart:

Now, here she was, a grown mare of high standards reduced to wearing foal’s garments. Tears bloomed in her eyes.

Aww don't cry Rarity! :fluttershysad:

You're a beautiful foal.:raritystarry:

Rarity pouted huffily, causing Lotus to giggle with delight. "Okay, silly filly, why don't we finish getting you dressed up?"

Yes please!:pinkiecrazy:

She had to be imagining the thick, fluffy diaper around her waist, and the silky, delicate socks snaking up her forelegs right now, and the plush, comfortable onesie she was wearing. Oh Celestia, is some part of me actually enjoying this?

That's it Rarity. Get nice and comfortable in your new ensemble.:ajsmug:

"Oh, now don't be camera shy Rarity. I just want to remember your adorableness forever."

And who could blame her?:raritywink:

"I wanna pway dwess up," she decided.

Little Rarity really is just the cutest thing! :rainbowkiss:

"My pretty little princess," she squealed.

When the mare is right, she's right. Rarity really is a perfect little princess!:twilightsmile:

Five more outfits were tried on, each as frou-frou as the last.

As they should be for the most stylish filly around!:trollestia:

Lotus also had a wide assortment of foalish jewelry that she let Rarity try on, and even treated her as if she were royalty.

Aww! I wanted to soak in the reign of Princess Rarity!:fluttershysad:

Oh well, there's still plenty of good content here.:twilightsheepish:

Despite what Rarity tried to convince herself, she had fun. So much so that she was almost sad to be put back in a onesie. Almost.

Too bad. Rarity enjoying herself is the best part of the story.:pinkiehappy:

"A sleepy wittle foal like you needs her nap time." Lotus rubbed her nose against Rarity's cheek. "Yes she does, yes she does." Rarity couldn't help but giggle.

Daww! The little princess is happy!:yay:

"I love you too, sweetheart." She slipped the pacifier in Rarity's lips, and the suckling began. Lotus tucked in the covers, turned out the lights, and shut the door behind her.

Rarity snuggled her sheep happily. The last thing she heard before passing out was her own crinkly diaper.

Aww! Sleep tight, little Rare Bear!:pinkiesad2:

"I... don't think so. No offense darling. Like I said, I enjoyed some of it. But I think the whole experience gets tainted when I... um... do my business."

So what your saying Rarity, is while you can't stand the diapers, you'd be totally okay being a little sub otherwise?...:pinkiegasp:

I'd be down for that, not going to lie.:moustache:

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