The Amulet of Sorrow

When a mysterious pony extracts all laughter from a Cheese Party, including Cheese Sandwich himself, two ponies find themselves seeking help from the Element of Laughter to stop the Amulet of Sorrow. Will they find her in time, to save Equestria from this dark force? Or will they all submit to the sorrow he is spreading?

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Elric of Melnipony

Elric of Melnipony #1 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

When a mysterious pony drenches all laughter from a Cheese Party

"I do not think it means what you think it means." -- Inigo Montoya
drench - To soak, to make very wet.
- To cause to drink; especially, to dose with medicine by force.

Civviq Writer

Civviq Writer #2 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

5025693 Shoot.
Well, first I had 'suck', buuut...
Do you have any better ideas?

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Civviq Writer #3 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

5025693 I hope 'extracted' is a bit better...

scoots2

scoots2 #4 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

5026076 "Extracted" is better, but I think what happened is that you confused the words "to drench" and "to drain."
On the whole, though, despite some errors, I'm enjoying the idea and waiting to see how you develop it.

Civviq Writer

Civviq Writer #5 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

5026247 Ah, so that went wrong..

Thanks anyway!

Sonata_Dusk

Sonata_Dusk #6 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

I like the story but am confused on the flashback was it cheese pov

Civviq Writer

Civviq Writer #7 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

5026724 Yes, it was!

Sonata_Dusk

Sonata_Dusk #8 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·

5026755 oh! I get it know thanks

Summer Dancer

Summer Dancer #9 · Sep 19th, 2014 · 1 · ·

MOAR!!!!!

Drifting Heart

Drifting Heart #10 · Sep 20th, 2014 · · ·

Is English your second language or something? Because I never seen anyone use drench like that I know you changed it I was just curious. Other then a few word crimes here and there i say MOAR!!

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