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Oorah Marine. Semper fidelis, semper Para. In my mind Jack sounds like Marcus Fenix from Gears of War. Filter sounds like Tiny Tina from Borderlands 2.
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FEATURED AGAIN YOU GLORIOUS BASTARD
tbh you deserve it though, great story :D
7746841 I hadn't even noticed! I've got a ways to go until I reach where I was a couple months ago, but I'm happy new people are coming in.
I am loving this story. Being a former active duty marine myself, I can relate to a lot of the shit that goes on in Jack's mind and train of thought. Stay frosty you glorious bastard you. OORAH!!!
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Yeah, keep at it though :P
I'm really enjoying this fic and I dont want to see it lost in the depths of haitus FimFic stories...
This reminds me of X-com far more than it should...
*slams a mag into his rifle*
LET'S DO THIS
The door joke has not passed unnoticed xD
Hey this last two chapters are very good. I used to get bored reading about battles and military, but you got me hooked
7747352 I find it's a good combination of pacing and conservative details that make battles readable. A lot of writers tend to fall back on the 'and then' method in combat, which makes for awful writing.
7747132 Vigilo Confido
7747468 that makes a lot of sense. Now that you mention it you are right. Keeping the reader pow moving makes it more dynamic and entertaining
7749096 A good story lives and dies on its pacing. I've gone as far as downloading text to speech programs to read things back to me.
7751443 The main reason why he isn't using his rifle is that it has a tendency to overheat when he goes full auto, and he has had an inordinate amount of reasons to go full auto. Thus, he's using machineguns.
And hear I thought that shit was kind off win Jack bernt down a warehouse..
7749245 Yes....yes I did. I'm sorry I have problems.
7752369 plot filler idea!
Jack shows the new members of jsog how hard he expects them to fight (as well as tactiks new ways to "deal" with the enimy exsetra exsetra) with video ade from his pda. Thus giving you the ability to have a few chapters that have a lot of world and caricature building without forcing to mutch stuf down ower throats the last 2-3 chapters wer horificly AWSOM but a tad overwhelming.also ud git the chance for Jack to be treated with a bit more respect once they see the shit that has (how he would say) fuckd him running ..... Plus a little Hart to ...uh..whatever the fuck Jack has from sun ass and Moon ass.
Me and Jack have alot i n comin especially how we fight ...FUCK aqurasy it's a chain gun nit a sniper rifle just shoot fucking everything!
7754104 I have a tendency to skip over small details, simply because they just get explained away in my mind. Covering the plugs is more of a suggestion as opposed to a requirement. If you're taking a dip in a lake, cover them; in purified water, you dont have to. Clean water getting into the plugs will just be unpleasant, as opposed to risking infection.
7754982 That's actually easy to explain. The titanium itself is resistant, but Jack is not. It doesn't create a field of resistance, and as the wranglers were focusing on his body, and not his plugs, they could hold him down easily.
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Ok I can see that. I thought that if the magic touched te plugs then the whole thin would fizzle, so when they were grabbing his arms/body it would've fizzled at least once.
Though it would have changed the outcome lol.
7755305 Not quite, Jack isn't that lucky.
7756441 They simply have a far superior military industry, akin to the US's. With the plans and hard work already done, all they had to do was put it together. It's also how they built a fleet in such a short time span, while it took the Equestrians a year and a half to get one and a half ships. I'm actually penning that currently with the next chapter
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Don't get me wrong, I get that since it's a full total war scenario, the griffons far outmatch the equestrians in sheer production capacity, but even then there's a lot of time they'd need to spend to build their dreadnaut, and to then manage to outgun a ship built by equestrian and Terran hands?
The prince only took control a few days prior, so they wouldn't be able to use petyr's expertise even if they didn't hand him over to forge, which means they somehow got superior artillery cannons without any plans for them, and then construct a ship capable of fielding them, all in less time then it would take Jack to move in his helicarrier from one side of equestria to another....
It doesn't seem feasible. Hell, even if prince jackass got home from his exposition and immediately took control of a production facility capable of constructing such a ship, that's still barely a month of construction time, with only the last handful of days having the entire night of the empire behind it.
Plus his mask would have to come in contact with everyone he subjugated, and I'm fairly certain he's not giving his mask up to a subordinate, so he has to fly across the whole empire speaking to every person on a practically individual level.
Which makes me think either A) Emperor Willhelm had a dreadnaut under construction already and didn't say a word (unlikely considering the treaty) or
B) the griffons magicked up materials and what not to build the fucker.
Because the logistic costs alone... They don't have motorized vehicles capable of lifting heavy loads. They are stuck with wagons and sky carriages, which we all know cannot hold more than a ton. Not even three-quarters of a ton..
Therefore they'd need time to harvest, transport, process, transport, then utilize the materials, on top of designing an entire ship out of practically whole cloth, and then assembling said ship and testing it to make sure it doesn't fall from the sky.
It takes a U.S. Dry dock about 4 years to build a destroyer, one of the smaller ships in our naval fleet. That's with already having the blueprints and having access to wavy lifting machinery and highly skilled technicians and motorized transport of mass goods and access to steelworks around the country.
Oh I'm also a bit miffed at the fast time the equestrians could use to make sword and shield but whatever. Anyway, the griffons most definitely had more manpower then we could field because of the whole mask thing, but transporting materials would be the biggest problem for them. And if you tried to cut construction time by having each peice built somewhere else and sent to a central location, look how much trouble we have with that, even though we can literally send perfect copies of blueprints across the world immediately. We tried to build a fusion reactor, only to get each peice with a slightly different size! The griffons have to either hand transport each blueprint, after copying them, or they have to use their radios, which of course have the whole "telephone game" problem where one misheard word spells doom for the whole project.
I know I'm looking a bit too far into this, but I will not
stop, I will not rest until the one-nostrild man is brought to justiceerr... I will not bow down to hazy back plots! I will find all the plot holes and tear them open!7757210 Hah, the story is nothing but plot holes!
I'm still in the works trying to explain things in story appropriately, but it comes down that the griffons were already building the ships in their pre-existing naval yards, which do incorporate magic into construction methods. Way I figure, griffons live in a world full of magic, but with no means to naturally control it. So, that means they built something to control it. All they had to do was make some modifications to their existing facilities and naval vessels, and they had an armada. Even though Petyr wasn't directly involved in the building of the Imperial ships, they likely had a very large group of very smart people working off his magically copied blueprints. While I will admit the time is iffy, it checks out. I swear!
The griffons have always been more mechanically inclined compared to Equestria, which has such a lopsided tech tree it's not even funny. As per that, they would obviously have things like raw iron, steel, and other materials stockpiled or readily available, as well as the means to work them, as opposed to the Equestrians and their reliance on gold and magic and gems to solve all their problems. Think of the empire as a land of industrial pragmatists living next to a utopia.
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Hmmm...
I'm watching you....
I still dont trust you...
And I still don't trust the superior guns, though the superior numbers are understandable...
7758226 Never trust me. I've built my home from cliff hangers and plot holes. They're also less superior, and more FAWK HEUG
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Is dis da Ork! Strat - G?! They be using MOAR DAKKA?
But da dakka must be running outsa, right boss man?
Yes you are, Bones.
Put a fukkin sock on the door! Also, way to go Mythic.
I know JSOG was formed by a marine, but I really want to hear the ponies singing this considering they're effectively airborne.
This is a little late but ...is it just me or does Jack git mortality wonded every act as well as a scar of one kind or another like every chapter since the end of act one .
...also...
...FUCK YAH THAT WAS AWSOM!!!
7758299 the grifons guns or your cliffhangers...or yer mum
Hey now, that's crucial, her life could hang in the balance! That stallion's a hero! ...Anywho... Setting aside that Cloudsdale can move on its own somehow along with a few other minor nitpicks, these last couple chapters have been amazing. I've said it before, and others have mentioned it here, but your combat pacing has been excellent.
It's a little weird that the griffin forces went from muskets (on deserters, granted, but they were THAT far outa the loop?!) to... so much ordnance that Equestria's, I think only, two large ships had to cut and run after massive losses. Between that and the whole mind-control 'win' button... sounds reasonably like game over to me. But this isn't a 'real world' war scenario by any means, sooo we'll just see where that goes.
That gate sequence was hilarious, and I don't even get the reference. Seems familiar, but... Further to that, the Rangers scene in general was great stuff. I mean, I knew they'd react the way they did and it still got to me a bit. Nice work.
Please tell me his name is Bones.
The doctor beside him let out a plaintive groan. “How am I supposed to work with you people? I'm a doctor, not a miracle worker.”
I see what you did there.
Open the gate a little? Ah a man of culture I see.
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At this point the only real humor in Ballad are the shoddy references I manage to scrape together.
Fuck... This war will decrease population and stability for all. I wonder if the Dragon can be recruted? There basicly eatch a massiv tank/bomber on there own.
I guess the Royal Sisters will be rebuilding the better half of a half millenium after that war...
Equestria at War - game get real.
Simoh the griffon is 100% inspired by Simo Hayha also known as the White death, https://g.co/kgs/5rWBNU. He also has a Sabaton song made after Him called the white death, https://youtu.be/JRIfWazqIQ8. The song could be great if used in the story, Sadly I doubt it will and the story is already finished.