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DerpyNate


I'm just a derp trying to get by in life. If you need editing help with your story, just PM me with a short description, and if I like the idea, I'll be game.

Comments ( 31 )

There are way too many of these.

5003401

Hey, thanks for commenting! I'm sorry that you didn't enjoy it, any suggestions as to how I could make it better?

5003450

Thanks for commenting! Hoped you liked it!

5003410 Don't take it personally. I'm just annoyed with the sheer volume of Fallout Equestria spin-offs all over the place. It's probably the most overdone sub-genre among MLP fanfics. If you really want to keep writing this though, I won't stop you.

5003533

I've seen quite a bit of Fallout: Equestria fics too, but in this I wanted to see if I could make something different from the rest- anyways, thanks so much for your input!

:derpytongue2:

I like the cover art! The Steel Ranger power armor always looked the best in that style. :rainbowkiss:

Wut? You leave us with a cliff hanger? Half of the population finding a wet surprise? Curses, now I have to see more. You sneak you. Did you make the cover art yourself? Why vault 34 (not related to the game)? Hodor? Hodor Hodor Hodor? *Several other comments that don't make a lick of sense? Random racist meme!!!
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Several phrases you shouldn't search but will anyway regardless of warnings:
-bluewaffle
-dirty Sanchez
-dye fantasy
-human centipede

I have officially make your day interesting. Why you ask? Meh.

I hope to see more of this Fo:E

5004130

FIrst off, best comment.

Secondly, thanks! -Starting on the next chapter tomorrow!

And yep, I made the cover art, you can check out my DeviantArt too if you want to see more! (Shameless plug of myself)

Also, it's Stable 34 cuz I was like:

"DUHHRRRR... WUT STABL ISNT TOOKEN?!?!"

*Scrolls down the Stable list on the FoE wiki*

"NO 34! SWEET! IT'S MINE!"

(It was originally 37, but I saw it was taken.)

Or something like that atleast.

Wow this is classic cult stuff here. Very nice though may I share some wisdom I was able to recieve. Work on the synapsis its well vague generic. Give it some flare. Other than that I like and will continue to read this. Good job

5005280

Hey, thanks so much for your input!

I had a hard time putting the description together because if I was too specific I would give out spoilers! (sad times)

However, I will definitely work on it! Thank you for pointing that out. :pinkiehappy:

5005864
Hey no prob. Keep up the good work. I look forward to what you got coming

The story really well written and formatted, some of the split up narration paragraphs could be fused to make bigger ones. Bigger paragraphs look a bit more professional in my eyes.

It's difficult for me to say that I like this story... but I appreciate it as a FoE story.:twilightblush:
There're never enough of those.

The only thing I don't really like is the the concept (not saying it's your fault in writing or anything, just the concept) of that religious leader /prophet being evil/mad for no reason apart from that he's a religious leader. With all due respect for criticism on religion, that's a bit... flat. Their leader kills innocent people just for the sake of it (aka Celestia send him a vision). Even in religious fanaticism, that's not how killing people is justified. If the would have done something wrong (like being fillyfoolers in your story) that would be at least somehow understandable, since they broke the "law". But I'm not aware of any kind of established religion that demands killing its own members. And I severely doubt any religion or organisation at all would survive if they would do that.
Just the ranting of a person who is annoyed (if I wouldn't be immune to frustration I would say I'm frustrated :scootangel:) by all that only half-thought religion critics who spawn every two meters with basically the only argument being "people who believe in something are stupid".

As I said, pretty well written, so I can give you at least a like.:twilightsmile:

5005978

Hey, thanks for commenting!

Anyways, there was a reason for the killing of half of the population, which I am not sure if I would have written later (but I probably should have included) .

There wouldn't have been enough supplies to last an entire Stable worth of ponies in the wasteland for that long, thus, Mendax had to accommodate.

Prophets (In stable 34 at least) claim they have visions right after the last Prophet has passed. (There have been multiple cases of multiple ponies claiming visions from Celestia at the same time when a Prophet dies)

I wasn't exactly going for the bashing religion angle on this, I was trying to go for the 'blindly following religion' angle.

If you had noticed, this religion has become so warped and corrupted that it only vaguely resembles the shadow of it's former self.

Anyways, thanks so much for taking the time to comment!

I really like this story even though it's one chapter. I would love to see if she meets a Steel Ranger along the way like the cover art. Love to see more.

5008271

Hey, thanks for your comment!

Oh, and don't worry, more is coming!

You might get your wish too!

:pinkiehappy:

HOLY CRAP. OMG. THAT. WAS. SPEC.TAC.U.LUR

(I can not spell for the life of me)

5031163

Omg, you make me blush.

:twilightblush:

Thanks for your comment!

Are you still writing this? Because I really want to know what happens next.::twilightblush:

5227938

I sure am! Thanks for letting me know that there is somebody out there!

Real life has been getting in the way, and writer's block has been wonderful.

I'm currently on the fourth draft of chapter 2.

Expect it sometime! Deadlines are for chumps!

Annnnd now my story seems like crap lol

I want to read more!!!

5005978

I'm sure this will be explained at a later point. He cant just show his whole hand in the first chapter. Why would we read the rest?

5289110

:D!

I am so glad you like it! The second chapter is oh so close to being finished. I've gotten my final editor to start taking a look at it, and i'm just working around her schedule.

fascist cult-like society

You mean like everything to do with Fallout Equestria?

5762123
Yeah, pretty much. I have a hard time writing a summary because I don't want to spoil a single thing. :/

Aww shucks, why you done have ta cancel the fic? Are ya planin on remaking it or just scraping the whole thing?

5964646
Fear not, there is a chance of it coming back, I am working on a side-project right now.

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