Rainbow Dash gets a wing cramp while flying over Sweet Apple Acres, and has to make a crash landing. Good thing Big Macintosh is there to help! But things get a bit more heated then expected: pegasus wings are very sensitive to the touch...
This was fantastic. Well in my opinion anyway there will always be people that will dislike something just because, but to say i liked this would be a MASSIVE understatement. Congratulations sir you have yourself a follower, a gold star, a thumbs up and also take a smattering of these for good measure 10/10
5002149 we'll see, but first I wanna finish my older story before getting too deep into a new one. I think I'll keep this a oneshot for the moment, but will but will likely expand it further later on... or maybe I'll write them at the same time, I just don't know...but anyhow i'm changing it's status to incomplete
5002529 Everyone wants more! Ok, ok fine, I can guarantee I'll write more, but I won't say when. I already had thoughts of continuing this even before I posted it, but the overwhelming support for it this has sealed the deal.
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There's no way such a masterpiece can ever be a one-shot. The way you defined their relationship at the end was beautiful, almost a "happily ever after!"
5005325 I think it went out of fashion a while back, but I'm glad there are still others who think it's an interesting theory. Though, I honestly wonder how one could stimulate a horn: It's basically a tusk with magical properties.
5005453 as far a i understand it yes it is a bone made of alicorn (go figure) and only become sensitive when in use, thus could be hit to interrupt spell casting, and hurt alot, or turn somepony on
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww yisss! A MacDash ship that is as innocent (well Big Mac is lol) as it is tantalizing! One chapter down and I'm already worried about finishing this whole thing before the next chapter is posted.
Haven’t read more than a few paragraphs, but… Holy run-on sentences, Batman! You tend to say too little via too many words, and almost every sentence has at least three clauses. As you write, step back and consider whether a period might not make more sense than yet another comma. Brevity is the soul of wit… even in clopfics.
Here’s an example:
Big Mac was right on top of Rainbow Dash’s laying form with only a couple hoof–steps distancing them when he finally felt calm enough to speak with any form of confidence, fearing that before his voice would have shaken.
The last clause (“fearing…”) is completely unnecessary. And while we’re here, you probably want either “prone form”, or “prostrate form”, or something. I’d do
Big Mac was only a couple of steps from the pegasus mare’s prone form before he finally felt calm enough to speak without his voice shaking.
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!
Um...thanks? lol
This was fantastic. Well in my opinion anyway there will always be people that will dislike something just because, but to say i liked this would be a MASSIVE understatement. Congratulations sir you have yourself a follower, a gold star, a thumbs up and also take a smattering of these for good measure 10/10
5001681 Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
You could continue this easily, and many more ponies would come to read it.
5002083 I'm strongly considering it, as I can see it has a good possibility for a storyline. Also, glad you like it.
I like it! I really apreciate if you write more! XD
5002149 we'll see, but first I wanna finish my older story before getting too deep into a new one. I think I'll keep this a oneshot for the moment, but will but will likely expand it further later on... or maybe I'll write them at the same time, I just don't know...but anyhow i'm changing it's status to incomplete
Oh please! Write more!
5002529 Everyone wants more! Ok, ok fine, I can guarantee I'll write more, but I won't say when. I already had thoughts of continuing this even before I posted it, but the overwhelming support for it this has sealed the deal.
Keep going, not enough Mac X Dash on this site!
I wouldn't mind to see more of this
5003621 More coming eventually!
5004719 I'm glad you liked it, and i'll be writing at least a bit more of this later.
I remember this old headcanon. The thing about wings, I mean.
5005321 Well, it seems to be a very popular belief among the fandom as well.
There's no way such a masterpiece can ever be a one-shot. The way you defined their relationship at the end was beautiful, almost a "happily ever after!"
5005345 Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked my more subtle approach.
5005325 I think it went out of fashion a while back, but I'm glad there are still others who think it's an interesting theory.
Though, I honestly wonder how one could stimulate a horn: It's basically a tusk with magical properties.
Make more ... this ship is so awesome and that fic was amazing! Hnnn I want more.
... Write more or Pinkie will come for you and you'd make shy cry
5005463 I already said I was gonna write some more! Also, thank you for your compliment!
5005453 as far a i understand it yes it is a bone made of alicorn (go figure) and only become sensitive when in use, thus could be hit to interrupt spell casting, and hurt alot, or turn somepony on
Okay, that was far cuter than I imagined it in my head X3
100 likes ~ Get pumped!
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww yisss! A MacDash ship that is as innocent (well Big Mac is lol) as it is tantalizing! One chapter down and I'm already worried about finishing this whole thing before the next chapter is posted.
I love it already, even if I am way late to the party.
I love this story already, it's so cute
Haven’t read more than a few paragraphs, but… Holy run-on sentences, Batman! You tend to say too little via too many words, and almost every sentence has at least three clauses. As you write, step back and consider whether a period might not make more sense than yet another comma. Brevity is the soul of wit… even in clopfics.
Here’s an example:
The last clause (“fearing…”) is completely unnecessary. And while we’re here, you probably want either “prone form”, or “prostrate form”, or something. I’d do