Some can say their life was changed forever, but only a few can say it was change forever twice. Midnight Locus is one such case.
When Spirit Vengeance is captured by the queen of the Crimson Hive under Manehattan and told to divulged ancient secrets that not even she is meant to know, she refuses and must be punished. Her punishment: being turned into a changeling, forgetting her life, and losing her self to the Crimson Hive. A flawless punishment, or so the Queen thought. That was the first time her life changed forever.
Only a year later, her life changed forever once more as four well-timed magic impacts changed her true form and severed her from her hive's Hivemind. Now known as Midnight Locus, she will try to find the answers to her questions with the help of those involved in her new life, old friends, and new friends while getting over the shyness and fearfulness that was from her being severed from the Hivemind. Her questions?
-Why was she turned into a changeling?
-What dark secrets did she know?
-Was her new life an accident, intentional, or something much more?
-What secrets do Celestia and Luna hold?
-How is she related to the Wonderbolts, The Tree of Harmony, and The elements of Harmony?
-What is the magic of friendship?
-What is the Crimson Hive planing to do?
and possibly above all
-What are these strange feelings she has towards one of the three ponies responsible for her new life?
Midnight will try to learn the answers to these questions as her, Scootaloo, Rainbow Dash, and Twilight Sparkle get tangled up in the web of lies, deceit, conspiracy, and secrecy that lead to the first time.
*WARNING: F/F paring (If you consider a shapeshifter to have a specified gender)
*This story is, technically, a rewrite of a story that I ended up deleting before getting it approved by the site because I felt it wasn't all that good
*I'm going to try to put more detail into this story than I usually do
*I'm also going to try to keep a stable personality with the main character, Midnight Locus. Again, something I'm not use to doing
*Constructive Criticism and comments are appreciated
*If you like/dislike the story then please tell me why in a comment so I can improve
*Tagged AU because of some differences in the past compared to the show and because there is no Spike
*The description and tags are subject to change as the story progresses
*Rated teen just in case
good story
5021496 thanks
That's a lot of questions.
5071687 yea, it is.
so how do you like the story so far?
5071782 haven't read it yet.
Check back tomorrow, its midnight and i have to sleep.
Goodnight, and goodluck!
5072042 It's midnight here as well, so okay.
The writing is a tad poorly done (it just shows that you are not an experienced writer), but the concept is interesting and the plot is quite gripping. I want to see where you go with this story.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
5088411 thanks for the review
It wasn't the best fic I read, but it was good. My main issues were just things that you did out of inexperience, but your headcannon is solid, your pacing is okay, and you don't seem to have any issues where the story contradicts itself. Good work.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
Thanks.
1. Too many flashbacks
2. Sonic rainboom is a fucking sonic boom. It has no healing effect like the rainbow laser of harmony.
3. Too many AU shits got thrown in together unorganically.
4. Midnight Locus.... really?