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ThatOneWriter


I dunno if I can be your favorite, but if you like my writing, that's pretty good in my book.

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After Diamond Tiara shares her first kiss with Rumble, the class becomes obsessed with first kisses. Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle just can’t see what all the fuss is about.

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A cute little bit of fluff. Woulda been nice to see a bit more from the friends... or the reaction from Rarity in the cover art.

Still, nice and light.

Interesting concept.

I have one question: Is there more to come from this, or did you mark it "incomplete" by mistake? :unsuresweetie:

I only ask because I think this is already fairly good if it's supposed to be a one-shot...

Anyway, thanks for writing! :scootangel:

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I had two choices for cover art, and this one was the more cleanly drawn of the two. Unfortunately, I was unable to crop Rarity out of the picture. I suppose I could have used GIMP, but hindsight is 20/20.

As for the reactions, I might do that in a sequel. It was kind of the point that nobody knew, though.

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Thanks!

5032651
Derp. I had it marked as incomplete while it was still just an idea, and I never changed it. As per usual, it's just a one-shot.

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Well, we all make mistakes from time to time.

For example, after I posted my previous comment, I went to check a couple of my notifications. As a result, I forgot to click the favorite button for this story... :twilightsheepish:

At least mistakes such as these can be corrected easily. :twilightsmile:

“I kind of did ask Dash. She just grinned and told me it was totally awesome, partly because her first kiss was with a close friend, so they were a little more comfortable with each other.”

“Really?” Sweetie Belle sat up. “Did she say who it was with?”

Shaking her head, Scootaloo said, “Nah. She just grinned and had this far-off look for a moment, then told me to make sure my first kiss is with someone awesome.”

I guess either Flutthershy, Applejack, or Twlight...
Just a hunch...

Comment posted by garener deleted Sep 21st, 2014

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Yea, there is that... but wouldn't she also kinda of hate it and regret it now because she and Gilda are no longer friends because of the argument... or is it just me thinking this? No idea, so, yeah.....

5032905 Then I am sure it is Fluttershy, since they have been friends since they were fillies. She isn't as close to anyone else on the Mane 6...

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5032914
I had a specific pony in mind, but I'll keep quiet on that. It's fun to watch people theorize!

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That is so true... also makes a lot of sense

Rainbow has known Fluttershy for awhile, Rainbow also thinks pegasi are "awesome", which most likely points to Fluttershy...

Yea, makes a lot of sense.

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Well, guessing is fun and all, but, if you are to never tell who it is... really no point to keep us guessing. So, can you tell us sometime in the future? Please?

5032969 Since ThatOneWriter just said he/she had a specific pony in mind, and was gonna watch us theorize...F IT ALL TWIDASH OTP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am sorry for saying that.

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leedle leedle lee

Yup, kinda wish it is Twidash (sort of- kind of- may be-may be not- who knows) :unsuresweetie:

5033097 Only time will tell. Hopefully.

This ship is just Tiarable! :trollestia:

Adorableness :scootangel::unsuresweetie: love Scootabelle.

Would love to see a sequel, to see where their relationship goes. Apple Bloom seemed a bit suspicious.

I woke up, checked my feed, and saw that you posted this story.

I immediately read it right afterwards. And it was awesome! I'm kind of interested in the story behind Diamond Tiara's now though, or a crack involving Button's inevitable harem.

:pinkiegasp: Rumble shipped with somepony else than Scootaloo, while she's herself shipped with somepony else ? What madness is this ?
And Applebloom is forever alone.
As for RD's first kiss, I'm gonna guess either Fluttershy or Gilda since she probably did it when she was a filly.
Plus, I'm not sure how you're supposed to kiss a freaking beak ?

This was adorable and very well written.
I award you with a cookie in your near future and possibly a nice bright sunny day :raritywink:

~Tobben

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Nah, it's Scooterrific. :scootangel:

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Aw, but I would've enjoyed a good shipping war. :trollestia:

Fine. I had FlutterDash in mind. I don't really ship it anymore, but I still have a headcanon of them being together at some point before the show.

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I kind of imagined DT just picking Rumble just so she could be first for that, so I don't think I'd come up with anything interesting for it. The Button Mash thing, though, I may do at some point. We'll see.

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It's ScootaBelle, the best kind of madness! Apple Bloom probably pairs off later, but I dunno. I don't know enough about their classmates to find someone to pair her with.

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I won't rule out a sequel, but currently I have no plans or ideas for a sequel. I always welcome spinoffs, though, if someone wants to do that.

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Ooh, cookie! My only weakness~

The sunny day looks to be delayed, though. It's been nothing but clouds and rain all weekend.

That was totally cute. Nice slice of pie that was. Those two being secret fillyfriends is pretty nostalgic. Good stuff.

I wonder if Rumble ever got seconds, too? That is a cute ship. Who would Apple Bloom's first kiss be with? :applejackconfused:

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I kind of imagined DT just picking Rumble just so she could be first for that, so I don't think I'd come up with anything interesting for it. The Button Mash thing, though, I may do at some point. We'll see.

How would she even hear about the craze if she didn't have some sort of crush to begin with? Surely Diamond being able to pick any colt she wanted must of felt something? Even girls who pick others for their looks tend to feel something. Their young and it's supposed to be a big deal. Ha, she could even have just made it a big deal because she liked Rumble but maybe he didn't want a filly and wanted to slow things down and hurt DT's feelings? Maybe even going so far as to create the first kiss thing to hide the fact that she was let down by Rumble who just didn't feel or know what to feel at DT expressing her feelings all a sudden to him.

DT is pretty prideful. If ponies knew she got dumped they'd be talking about it for ages. But if she took control of the situation and talked about how SHE felt about the first kiss and hype it up, drop a thing about the two maybe taking time apart or felt they were rushing a bit (who knows) then she saves face and Rumble's indecisiveness just leaves DT feeling hurt inside despite the ruse.

Eh, DT just throwing away a kiss when they don't even let other foals near them just feels boring and lazy. All ponies deserve a good story, and I vote Button x Twist for first kiss.

I agree with them all until the last half. I really don't see what's so special about first kisses either :unsuresweetie:. Anyways, this was cute and a fun read through it all :twilightsmile:

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I tend to pair off RumbleBloom whenever I write ScootaBelle, but in this particular case, I'm not really sure. Avoiding my tendency to pair up Spoon and Tiara kind of messed things up.

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Their ages are ambiguous, of course, but my thought process was that they were at the age when they'd start getting curious about romance. Diamond Tiara strikes me as the sort who stays on top by dictating what the trends are crazes are, so once the first crush situation entered the picture, Tiara made sure she was the first to have their first kiss. It was a little sloppy of me to not update on what happened to their relationship, but I think they end up like a celebrity couple. A big fuss is made about them, they're made more popular over it, and then they fall apart a year or so later (or maybe even less. They're young teens, after all.) I didn't give much thought to how much Tiara has matured in this timeline, but she probably breaks it off first, as you said.


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Thanks for reading! Glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

This was a cool story, never had my first kiss though.. I'm 14, is that weird?
But it was a cool story,

Greeting Lightning Spark

PS: I have no idea how I should end a letter in English, (was this right) because I'm Dutch..

5040342 Um...
I'm 20 and still never had a first kiss :twilightblush:
I've been saving it for a really special young lady who I have yet to find yet :facehoof:

5040342
Nah, being 14 and not having a first kiss or a girlfriend/boyfriend isn't that odd, at least in America. I doubt that things are much different in your country.

P.S. The only thing you did wrong was using a greeting at the end, rather than something like "Sincerely", "Signed", etc. That's not really necessary in a comment, though. It's a bit informal.


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Nothing wrong with that. I know people who've never dated anyone at all, at least as of our graduation from high school. I don't really think it's anything to worry over. And as I kind of expressed in the story, first kisses are really more of a milestone than anything. They tend to be awkward, because you have no idea what you're doing. (It may not be that bad, though, because if you're an adult, odds are that your date has dating experience, and that sort of helps things.)

5040601 okay, no greetings, I just randomly think of that cause it kinda looks te same as 'groetjes' (kinda) and that's a Dutch thing to end a letter, and I know I shouldn't really use it in comments, but its fun!

Sincerely Lightning Spark

PS: thanks for the advise!

5040497 well, that's good to know, thanks, you'll find the one!

Sincerly, Lightning Spark

PS: you're older than me..

5040669 Thank you, and I am sure you will too :twilightsmile:

5040680 I would send a smiley back, but I am on my phone so..
I'm gonna see if i know one smiley name out of my head! Uuh..
:TwilightSmile:


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Yes!

You've gotta love editing!

My vote for RD's first is, of course, Flutters. I just love the idea of them having a fillyhood fling in their past. :twilightblush:

This was cute and enjoyable. I'd read more of it. :pinkiehappy:

Cutest thing I have ever read. Ever. :unsuresweetie::scootangel:

Tee hee, what a cute story, Adorable! :twilightsheepish:

Mad

Hnng! dies of cuteness induced heart attack.

5042655 There was a vote? Who's the other option?

That was such a fun story!

These little dorks are so cute. Did you know that the average person has about 10 kisses per week?

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#SinglePringle4Lyfe

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10 a week? I mean, I guess that's not that much, but I apparently need to step up my game.

6761786 #Single4Life!

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