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Artemis Stonecroft


I'm a creative writing student with a deep love of MLP. Really it helped me breakup with Doctor Who. My favourite character is Princess Luna and I've made a character based on her on deviantART.

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This is my stance on the MLP two-parter, 'A Canterlot Wedding'. In said episode Princess Luna made only three appearances and didn’t take part in the main conflict. Of course, after Luna’s character was introduced, Lauren Faust and co. wanted her to have more episodes to show her redemption, but Hasbro blocked it, believing that the kids wouldn’t want to see the villains (Obviously they didn’t see the pilot). A headcanon arose during AntonyC and Tommy Oliver’s review of the episode that Queen Chrysalis and Princess Luna were one and the same and the fan’s favourite princess was just f***ing with everypony. Although they denounced this as a joke (and a mind-f***), my personal belief was that Luna was either sleeping during the day or she wasn’t in Canterlot at the time – after all when she showed up to watch over Canterlot for the night she entered the shield dome, so maybe after Celestia raised the sun, Luna went to check somewhere in Equestria for the threat. However reviewer, Doctor Wolf, made a little change to his preference of the story which includes Luna.
This scene takes place after the Mane Six fail to reach the Elements of Harmony and are brought back before Chrysalis. Celestia is imprisoned in that cocoon thingy, and Princess Cadence is still failing to get Shining Armour out of his trance. The Cutie Mark Crusaders are also present as the changelings have caught them to get leverage. Spike tries to comfort the scared fillies, unaware of their fate.
AntonyC and Tommy Oliver's Review: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ao9teQKuEo8
Doctor Wolf's Analysis: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m4ZKIhO2rB4

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Very nice. I've always agreed with the idea of Luna being the Warrior to Celestia's Wizard. Plus this would explain Twilight having a chance to free Cadence without Chrysalis being there to stop her.

she knocked out some fangs.
Everypony winced, even Celestia. Thank heavens she never did anything like that as Nightmare Moon. She could buck a tree right out of the ground, thought Applejack. I wonder if she’s available for Applebuck Season.
Chrysalis immediately regained momentum and tasted blood right from the off. The infamous red fluid dripped from the now empty sockets in her gums. It was as if she was trying to hide a jelly donut in her mouth, but the jelly was giving her away. Granted, Pinkie Pie was the one thinking this – now she wanted a jelly donut

This is right where i gave up, you getting way too verbose in your description of everything and every bit seems to have a little aside to break up the flow.

She knocked out some fangs? how many has she got? some seems to imply shes got a ton of them. Some teeth would make sense but some fangs? she's only got two! Both fangs or her fangs would work better

Plus ; now that i think about it that was a really specifically accurate kick. Smashing all her front teeth in sure , but just knocking out those two teeth? I suppose if Chrysalis's mouth was wide open and she just caught the longest parts of them ?

Applejack is weirdly unconcerned with events and lets her mind wonder over to hiring out one of the princesses for manual labour.

Is blood infamous;"well known for some bad quality or deed or wicked; abominable"?

5060151 Yeah, I'm a tangent person. Sorry. :twilightsheepish:

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nah sorry if i came across a bit harsh ; being a curmudgeonly old Brony will do that to a guy. I like that you do your own art as opposed to stealing any old junk of deviant art. Keep writing and get as much constructive criticism as you can.

Yet another fic that treats changeling soldiers as unable to stand for shit on their own.

5060286 Luna uses a glamour (illusionary magic) against them which scares them. So they believe she is Nightmare Moon. Yeah, they were an obstacle to the Mane Six, but Luna is more powerful than them. Who knows she might have sent great fear through their minds - we never did know what abilities Nightmare Moon had, but the nightmare part leaves open a lot of interpretation

Luna!I like Luna. ,I like this story.

5060316 imho changelings are masters of illusionary magics.

luna mega evovled too! harmony moon!

In a way, Luna (My Favorite) would still win too if that did happened and she would wake up after the Magic Explosion, which we all know was caused by both Shining Armor (another one of My Favorites) and Princess Cadance, and heads over to the others. :twilightsmile:

Anyways, Awesome Job, Artemis Stonecroft! :twilightsmile::pinkiesmile::rainbowdetermined2:

5060316 Can I just say that for a mundie, you make great stories? :twilightsmile:

There's one thing I never got the show never said Luna was using dark magic as nightmare moon which is what most stories use as the reason why she was So powerful so shouldn't she still be able to be as powerful as nightmare

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