A mysterious red armor soldier finds himself sent into the wasteland that was once known as Equestria. He doesn't last for very long as he leaves behind a gift for the first wastlander that helped him.
if this is basically human in advanced armor goes to FoE, dies giving his advanced armor to a pony and then never being seen again then i dont think a human tag is really appropriate.
I'm a person who liked almost every FoE fic or at least sees a reason for them, but I have to say I don't really see the point with your story. A human gets transported to Equestria, dies and gives something (his armor) away. What a pony would want with an human armor is beyond me, but it's the thought that counts. Not even asking why the suit can transform itself to be used by ponies. That's what I read in the description and it's pretty much everything that happens in this chapter.
Your story is marked as "incomplete", but you have to ask yourself: if the story is named "Gift from a Crimson Soldier" then how much real story can you do. Don't get me wrong, I have nothing against that title, but it should be at least somehow connected to the story's main point. And a human giving an extra-dimensional alien his armor for no real reason doesn't generate that much of an interesting story-line.
And speaking of story-line, that didn't really intrigue me, because of the fact that I have no idea what a "cannibone" is. Tried to google it, but I got nothing. Is there a backstory for those?
I would recommend keeping the human-tab for the exact same reason you pointed out.
Sorry if its a little confusing, but I guess that would be a mistake on my part. But I'll be getting the second chapter out. And hopefully it would make some sense. If not, well then I guess I wont do any FoE fics.
if this is basically human in advanced armor goes to FoE, dies giving his advanced armor to a pony and then never being seen again then i dont think a human tag is really appropriate.
4968317 I guess your right. But I'll leave the tag there since there is a human involved.
I'm a person who liked almost every FoE fic or at least sees a reason for them, but I have to say I don't really see the point with your story. A human gets transported to Equestria, dies and gives something (his armor) away. What a pony would want with an human armor is beyond me, but it's the thought that counts. Not even asking why the suit can transform itself to be used by ponies.
That's what I read in the description and it's pretty much everything that happens in this chapter.
Your story is marked as "incomplete", but you have to ask yourself: if the story is named "Gift from a Crimson Soldier" then how much real story can you do. Don't get me wrong, I have nothing against that title, but it should be at least somehow connected to the story's main point. And a human giving an extra-dimensional alien his armor for no real reason doesn't generate that much of an interesting story-line.
And speaking of story-line, that didn't really intrigue me, because of the fact that I have no idea what a "cannibone" is. Tried to google it, but I got nothing. Is there a backstory for those?
I would recommend keeping the human-tab for the exact same reason you pointed out.
Sorry if its a little confusing, but I guess that would be a mistake on my part. But I'll be getting the second chapter out. And hopefully it would make some sense. If not, well then I guess I wont do any FoE fics.