• Member Since 14th Nov, 2013
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exsnaggerwes


I ship it. No exceptions.

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A diehard brony finds the portal after an epic amount of research and makes it to the other side in one piece. His previous human friends don't seem to agree with his life decisions and try to pull him back before he makes a decision he'll regret.

A big thank you and shoutout to Phenrys and Sparky Brony for their pre-reads and encouragement. Check out their stories too!

Cover art by me!

Chapters (18)
Comments ( 91 )

You can use the (hr) thing instead of all those hyphens! It looks a lot cooler.

4967200 what's the (hr) thing? (sorry, I'm new at this.)

4967500 In the top toolbar, where you can see all the text formatting tools, the first button in the last group of buttons, the one that looks like a bunch of grey lines with a blue line going through the middle. It makes a line go across the page, known in HTML as a "hard return", hence the HR. It looks much nice than a bunch of hyphens.

Interesting work, I would certainly work on spacing the paragraphs, you need the spacing so the reader doesn't see big text walls which make it harder to read. Other than that, good work, great premise, and want to see more...

4967634 it was a problem I didn't notice until I copy/pasted from word to the text editor. It doesn't format line spacing. I intend to fix that soon.
Thank you for the favorite! :pinkiehappy:
senpai noticed me

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I suppose I should do the same, but I indent instead. Maybe I'll go back and fix it later.

I like what you've got going, or I never would have encouraged you, lol. I think this could turn into one heck of a great story!

And one minor thing, can't believe U forgot to mention this before... it's Cadance, not cadence. Sorry about that!

4967957 In the end, I'll probably do both. For now I fixed the spacing (I hope), and I thought I was going to struggle with limiting word count, but as I can now tell, that won't be much of a problem. My scenes seem to have the lengths I originally planned on.

4967971 Thanks! Luckily, that's only used once. *fixed*

Spacing = Very Good Thing!!!

Seriously, Great Job!!!!:pinkiehappy:

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Don't be afraid to go over on chapter length. Let the story tell you when it's time for a new chapter.

4969741 I originally planned that and then I realized that I was writing for hours on end and it just seemed like too much to fit in one chapter. When I finally reached the end of the first chapter I suspected that it was almost 5,000 words and wasn't bothered by that until I saw that it was only half of what I expected. I realized then that I can freely write as much detail as I want and still not be bothered by making a wall of text as a chapter. I really love writing, and I hate stopping at the end. Thankfully, it's still considered short! :yay: Which means that there's room for more if I decide to change it up. Expect more lengthy chapters coming up.

Why specifically turn into a pony? There are a lot of sentient beings in Equestria, and even here on Earth dolphins may be sentient. So why not a gryphon or a dragon? Is the universe supposed to store information of the main sentient race and their anatomy so that if a member of the main sentient race goes to another universe, he/she keeps being that way and not what they are supposed to be?

4971479 I considered both turning into a dragon, and staying human, and liked neither idea for the direction I wanted the story to go. One would be too difficult for me to understand how to write, as I've never seen a dragon's perspective in the show, and rarely in fanfiction.
And being a human could both be considered cheating or just make this story far cheesier than it needed to be.
I really love your ideas though, and that could make this far more interesting.
I actually have a reason for making Wes a pegasus though, but I guess being a griffon wouldn't have been much different.
also, griffons are made up of two creatures who can consume meat and even though horses can technically process meat, I didn't want Wes to like it. I wanted to add a downside to staying in equestria by forcing him to be a vegetarian.


4972088 Thanks for the response, and also for being the first one to give me a valid reason to accept the change, not some 'I want to be a pony in real life, so I'm a pony for no reason'! Seriously, too many people do that. All this need is to NOT have a forced or a 'We we're meant for each other' type of romance for this to be a great (and possibly featured) fanfiction!

4974538 Thank you, and to be honest Wes wasn't meant to be a pegasus. He was actually supposed to defeat Cipher and Snagem and purify pokemon who had the doors to their hearts artificially slammed shut, through the magic of friendship.

I shall return the favor... FIRST!

I liked how you turned what could have been boring, or a nasty joke, into a good portrayal of something most authors don't bother dealing with. I also loved how you used it as an excuse to expand our knowledge of Princess Luna's guard, as well as bat ponies in general.

You are doing quite well with your story. I am impressed.

4990940 Thank you, I'm flattered :yay:

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Just add long as you're not flattened!

Not even two days and already a date? Wes, you sly fox, you. Take him to a gay bar, Umbra!

5009543 Do you really think Wes has a chance with Umbra? :raritystarry:

5009594 Perhaps. Wes is likely an attractive enough stallion and has a good personality. A few quirks, but what stallion doesn't have his rough edges. And Umbra can teach Wes the joy of flight. A lovely bonding experience :raritywink:

5009677 quirks? Pray tell?
And to be honest, Wes's appearance is a reference to that pokehidden game

5009750 Mostly related to him being a new convert to the pony race, lacking a cutie mark, being very affectionate. And of course the innocent of Equestrian culture. Those dates would be cute.

Good story. Faved and liked.
Please don't ship Twi with Flash.

5010434 Thank you! :twilightsmile:
Twilight's love interest isn't among the things Wes really cares about, so the story won't follow such things even if they did happen. All that's said so far is that she did like human Flash.

GMD

So, I was looking around stories. When I find this, it seems quite promising. But... then I noticed the SEX and Romance thing. :raritydespair:

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I knew it! I admit without shame and remorse that I have played said game, and when the description of his look came about the pony on said game was instantly in my mind.

Well done sir, I am really enjoying this story.

5036332 don't get too excited, those aren't major in this.... well the sex isn't major.


5036553 I'm glad you enjoy that bit :ajsmug:

5036618 The sex tag is literally because of Twilight's asking personal questions. I don't plan on actually writing about sex happening in this story.

As for the romance, I'm sorry, but Wes was human once too. He has romantic desires, and he's probably going to pursue a relationship.

Huh that rose bush inalogy is really clever way to friend zone pinkie.

My OCD is making me correct you. The plural of pegasus should be pegasi.

That is all, you may now return to your regularly scheduled story.

5060035 :facehoof:
On the bright side, that's a very easy fix, and I'm glad you pointed it out to me before I started on the next chapter.
The bad news is that you just read my worst chapter :pinkiesick: and that was the only thing you pointed out so far lol.

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It's a slow chapter, not a bad one. I like how you characterized Twilight. I have to admit that our hero is a bit of a goob, but I'm sure that will resolve itself. I like the story so far.

Well this gave me a bit of food for thought with the possibility of contamiating normal white fluffy clouds seeings as they would be used for shade and asthetic reasons (nopony would like to sit under a brown or yellow cloud *yuck*), rainstorm clouds though I don't think it would matter much.

Stupid sexy dashie.

5072577 I gotta be honest here, that's a genuine reaction to the turn that chapter took. I'm expecting flame for this already lol.

Love that! Stupid sexy Dashie! Fun chapter, keep it up.

You my great sir have earned a follow and a favorite:twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

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1. Thank you so much for following! That makes 20!

2. :moustache: Now I have to do something special (and have something in the works, but it's only a small idea)

3. Have you read my other story? I'm much more proud of that than this one. :trollestia:

5075200 Oh good god you just had to remind me of that! It's going to be stuck in my head all day now





...stupid sexy flanders



...God damn it

You are updating too fast. I need to sit down and get caught up....

5076733 gee, that looks awfully familiar :rainbowlaugh:
I might slow down now that I have another short one to write.

I love this! I like how fast you update this(I'm a fast reader. I can read about 5,000 works in 15 to 30 min. depnding on how much I like it). Keep up the great work! :pinkiehappy:

Bleargh worshipping celestia really i rather go for the spagetti monster

He turned in to a pony!!? I'm done

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