I'm just a otaku passing through. Watch out cause the flower print wereing Diamond Dog is here to be awesome
Lockpick is a treasure hunter. He has travailed all over Equestria looking for unimaginable riches. On his journey he finds something that will change his life forever. After meeting with the spirit named Torin he finds four other heroes who shares his destiny and will help him defeat the Deboth Army.
A treasure hunter, A farmer, A party animal, A guard, A magician, And an artist. What awaits this unlikely craw.
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interesting, hope to see another chapter soon
5013846 all in good time my friend
More please Kyoryuger was my favorite Sentai team.
5013861 true, good things come to those who wait as a wise man said
More please.
I'm not too nit picky, just want you to replace all the baes with base, other then that, it's fine. I'm kind of a grammar Nazi in a way
Did you mean to misspell the Sentry in Flash Sentry or was it an accident?
5149228 to be honest I always forget the last part of his name but I'll fix it
5149256 Your welcome.
I think you spelled Kyogre wrong
5165435 the Wiki spells it "Kyoryuger"
Flash is refering to Jyuken Sentai Gekiranger, I think.
The Gokaigers are coming.
A subtle allusion to Drive? I tip my hat to you.
5186355 ther is another kamen rider refrens in the story
Gokai Change! Gokai Red GOLD MODE! Gokaiger is WAY better than Super Mgeaforce
5282771 Amen to that
Can't wait to read the next chapter.
i'm just going to say is that, you need to get a spell check
5282771 Brohoof to
5282853 both of you guys.
I never actually watched any Kamen Rider series, so yeah. I was thinking about Gaim tho. So.... Is Gaim a future crossover?
5466232 I'm only going to say that On of the rangers will meat an armored rider.
I saw the references to Toqger and Doctor Who in this chapter.
This is just commenting on the first chapter, I plan on reading the rest in a bit. Quite a bit of typos here and there, but it's somewhat understandable as the kyoryuger words can sometimes get autocorrected. Other than that it's pretty good so far.
typos i Found
Gabutyra not Gabutata
Listen not Lisson
Creature not created
And pretty much from Lockpick's first change and down, it changed kyoryu into kyoryeru
5612205 thank you
zyuden sentai kyoryuger is one of my favorite sentai series.
Have you ever seen power rangers dino charge?
5622272 yes I have.
Isn't luckaryo a boy?
5636412 to be honest I flipped a coin to see what Luckaryo's gender was
5636468 Well, Luckaryo is described as a "he" throughout most of the show.
5622294 Well then maybe you can play that at the beginning of each chapter.
Yoooooooooooooooooooooouuuuuuuuuuu need an editor.
Badly. No matter how good of a story you have, bad grammar and spelling will deter ponies.
Thank you for doing that.
awesome next please
Hmm, I want to read this, but it hasn't been continued in 3 years, and my tracking list is already pretty long.
8840199
yeah I think your better off skiping this.
8840207
Umm, is this story that bad or are you just that out of ideas?
8840281
I took a brake fromwriting and when I went back I forgot what I was doing with this story
8840319
Ah, I see.
i am working on a displaced as wise god torin. which i think might turn out something, if I can keep my drive high