-Story 1 of the Fallout: Equestria - Lonely Freak Trilogy-
A contract. Thats all it was. All it was ever meant to be. Paid enough bits to last me a hundred lifetimes as long as I get HER out of the way. Damn though....She is tough! You wouldn't believe it unless you were there. Strangely, that isn't where my story begins!
[DATE: ??/??/???? [A.N.M.M.]]
[TIME: 20:47:11]
[LOCATION: LOCATING...ERROR?!...]
[ATTEMPTS AT OUTBOUND COMMUNICATION/TRACKING/DATING SYSTEMS BLOCKED BY O.I.A. FACILITY PROTOCOL UNDER ARTICLE 3, PARAGRAPH C6]
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A revamped version of my first story, so please be generous when tearing me to shreds.
(Credit goes to Kkat for making such an awesome universe/fic and Somber for the best story ever: AKA Project Horizons)
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Interesting. I actually want to see who these ponies are and what they do. I'll see where it goes.
470180 I think that's what he was getting at.
oh this just screams for blackjack's attentions
SCOOTALOO WENT ON A DATE?!?! HOW OLD IS SHE?!?!?!
NEED MOOOOOOAAAAAAARRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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So don't worry!
Haha well she's an adult around this time
Glad you guys are interested, if you have any criticisms do tell me xD
hmmm
The sun was high in the sky, making shadows mirror whatever they were hiding under.
I like that phrase ^
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Tis a nice phrase....I think that has given me an idea strangely enough
that last part
Not too shabby I must say good sir.
Needs a 'lil work on punctuation and grammar here and there, but hey, it's much much MUCH better than some of the stuff on here!
Not usually a fallout-crossover reader, but meh, felt like it. Gotta say though i'm interested in where this is going, and although i haven't read horizons (which has lead to a bit of confusion on some parts, but i don't mind) it does seem well rounded.
One thing though, your... 'form'.... is slightly off. Not in a bad way, but the sentences seem a little... rushed. It's as if Lucian doesn't have the need to breathe or somesuch.
Gonna track to see where this goes, and keep up the good work
Hopefully the quality of writing shall improve somewhat in these next chapters. Found meself an editor-thingy!
Oh and be wary, there might be some ye olde mind buckery coming up.
Ooooohh, you sneaky cupcake you! Hiding the cliffhangar ending from me like that!
Thanks for the mention, and she is NOT a chicken!!!
yay another one and you snuck go-fish in there I suppose it is a reference to another story if not that is an unusual protocol to have care to elaborate? looks like I can't recall/... some kind of enhancment for sure I wonder what kind of hybrids you are making
556115 Well I had to think of something to keep Lycium from moving and so I thought maybe the chairs in a top-secret facility are like in those classic spy films?
But for a reason as to why such a chair like that was there, it was that if a scientist was going out of control or suspected of betrayal they could be bound quite easily....or something along those lines.
And yes. It is a reference but you're gonna have to read PH to find it
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Boy, don't make me grab my shotgun and go Chicken hunting
557185 Bitch, please! *brandishes Lasgun* IN THE EMPRAH'S NAME! NO SCOOTALOO SHALL DIE TODAY! CHAAARGE!!!
Tell you what though, chicken or not, 'Scootaloo's parents' was bloody brilliant XD
Ironic you say i need to read ph to get it since i stay current...,
Well, what's Blackjacks real name
A good read, indeed. However, I'm finding it difficult to wrap my head around the Corrupt MoT Executives handing the guy over to the Royal Guard. Why? Because they hired him, and that memory remains in his head. Which means Ministry of Morale could pull it out and suddenly the government has indubitable evidence of their guilt.