Applejack wishes to do something without her friends for once how about go up a mountain that royalty fobids
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Applejack wishes to do something without her friends for once how about go up a mountain that royalty fobids
I like this ;D
Pretty good so far, however, Applejack is one word, not Apple Jack.
And if this line isn't a sin, I don't know what is.
Not bad, I'll keep reading.
Well, I liked this chapter, it was far from bad, but even further from average.
This is by far my favorite part.
Applejack would nev-
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Wait... what? She just, like, gave her soul like that. K.
*Groan*... second time today. Today is going to long.
Judging Fics by Their Covers: My Impression of Your Description
Part 6 of 9999: Corrupted Writing
You know, this is the first one of these reviews where the title was good and the story wasn't "Alicorn OC" level cliche. This could actually be good.
Now let's talk about what's bad:
The description is too short. It's only one sentence, and not a long one at that.
The chapters are too short. They're only 500 words. Many have said this before, and I say it now: 1000 words minimum. I recommend at least 2000 words a chapter. (I've broken this rule.)
Grammar: Your description is a run-on sentence with bad grammar and no punctuation.
"Fobids" is not a word.
Characterization: Applejack doesn't act like Applejack. She doesn't seem like the character in the show.
Impression: 32/2563
4973839 don't tell me to do that if you broke the rule then
5480229 Hey, everyone can be a hypocrite now and again. I used to do the same thing myself.
5480299 k...
5487600 I take it you draw?
5487609 yup i do cover art
5487610 Digital or hand?
5487611 hand http://www.fimfiction.net/story/240442/becoming-the-myth
5487630 fimfiction-static.net/images/story_images/228091.png?1418017992
Could you do a hand-drawn rendition of this image, please? I'll provide more details in PM.
5487661 yea?
5487663 :D