No dream is worth the shit that Dust just had happen to him. He is now labeled the campus whore. I know nothing is going to happen to the asshole that did this to him. In trying to keep his dream alive, he just destroyed any chance of it happening.

I figured this was where it was going. I was not disappointed.

Hm... I can see a few ways it can go, but I hope not with 'and Dust was too wumpy to do anything, didn't tell anyone, no one cared etc'. In fact, if done properly, he can fuck up this unicorn so hard.... both within and without a law.

Umm.
Trigger warning: Rape.
This chapter makes me feel very uncomfortable for enjoying the last ones. I never wished death so hard on anyone before.

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Flagged as Resolved

Except for the double-space thing. A comma is required before a too/as well/also in that context, and I went to school back when a double space was the rule. Since there still isn't a hard and fast "wrong" answer to that, I'm sticking with what I know and like.

Thanks for the proofing, I appreciate it.

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I absolutely understand. I was almost physically ill while writing it.

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I'm so shaken up I'm writing something of a one-shot to vent now. Hope you don't mind.

.....ok, I get that the worst should be assumed from the title, but..... damn. This chapter seriously needs a trigger warning. Really. I mean, for what it is, it's not a BAD chapter. It's objective is shock and empathy, and it does that quite well. But even with this theme, and that, despite the contents, this IS a story driven fic, this is a bit much to just walk into.

Seriously. Good job and good chapter, but if you're going to be working with this kind of thing, and it isn't obvious from the start.....

Trigger warning in the chapter title. As soon as possible.

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Fair enough. Change made.

5006631 I'm with you on that one, jeez that fucker needs to die.
(I even forgot his name, that's how much I hate him.)

I'd find his room and stick a red-hot poker up his rear end in his sleep, after that I'd ripe his eyes from their sockets and leave him to rot...

Well written chapter though, good job author.

5008358 your too kind id slowly impale 10 red hot needles through his cock constantly before finally ripping his guts out with my bare hooves and force feed him them before aring his throat out

5009061 You would show promise as a member of the inquisition. I'll put in a good word for you.

5009072 Thank you my friend i have a bad temper.... Probably why im in therapy hehehe

High Society is an asshole.I just wish I could beat the living crap of that guy's face
Anyways,good call on the trigger warning.It really helps people know what they're getting into before actually reading the chapter and speaking of chapters,nice job on this one

5016664 Yeah I agree wit everything you just said. This story is so deep... It tells a tragedy kinda

Ouch.

Sorry if it seems excessive to comment on every chapter but it's an engaging story. I feel a bit sick to my stomach now. I also want to just cuddle Dust until the pain goes away.

You are an excellent writer.

That... hurt, ouch.

Well written, certainly, but still... darn.

Now, where's that 4th-wallbreaker when you need it? A certain Society needs a good beating... or 30.

I summon my army to slap the shit out of HS