Twilight has been busy as of late with her recent duties as a Princess. Which, to be fair, she doesn't know entirely what they are, so she has to prepare for everything. As she shares a lunch with Rarity going over all of her recent work, she mentions that she'd like to take the train up to the Crystal Kingdom for a formal diplomatic visit instead of a royal coach since all that time alone with the guards near her with nowhere to escape to would freak her out. Rarity immediately suggests bringing Tom the Rock along as luggage at the last minute so the train is only method of travel they can arrange on such short notice to accommodate him. Also, Rarity is now going with Twilight on her trip.
It's all perfectly sensible. Really.
*Written to take place near the beginning of Season 4.
And so it begins...
Well this is off to a great and fun start. Love that whole rambling scene of Twilight and some of the lines were just brilliant.
Especially that derailing the Twilight Express line. That was golden.
I like where you are going with this,
4978022 I wanted to put in a line in which Twilight's thought process, at full power, was comparable to a mountain on a train, speeding down the tracks at 40 miles an hour. Baffling to observe, dangerous to see up close, difficult to change in its course, and capable of causing untold amounts of destruction if it crashes. This is why Rarity just let her talk.
The analogy, unfortunately, couldn't be used without interrupting the flow of the chapter, but I like to think of Twi in those terms, and it shows a bit in the way I write her parts.
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I figured that was the intended effect. And I enjoyed that. Twilight is just fun to write when in rant mode.
I am concerned about Rarity. She still has Tom?! Why? ..... What have they been doing?
.... she's going craaaazyyy.....
Also, this needs likes, LOOTS of likes and faves!
Rarity becomes a Super Saiyan
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That was good. So Tom x Crystal Heart? Even if it is a complete sham of a relationship- Rarity does have good points. And it rocks pretty hard.
MOAR LIKES! This needs MOAR LIKES!!!!
What isn't there to like about Rarity and her rockfriend, Tom. *Likes forever*
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Oh! You know? The usual *said coyly*. *Wink, wink, nudge, nudge*
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Re-reading this for the 3rd time. I don't know why you don't have more fics out. This one was amazingly done, both funny and adorable.
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Ah [Ah being a strong phonetic I gets treated much the same way as I does.]
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Ah is more of an I phonetic.
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[When doing dialects it's important to have consitency. Especially between Ah and I [one being thicker than the other]
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Sorry for not giving error fixes for AJ's southern accent. I'm usually more on my game. As for ya, instead of yah, well Ah, and it's derivitives [mah, and even the lowercase ah] is an I sound in phonetic writing of the southern dialect. So that'd make it a Yi[eye] sound.
Still awesome fic, and hotblooded Rares is Freaking awesome. If not epically destructive. The Diamond Dogs were lucky things didn't end up worse for them.
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Agreed. I don't know why this doesn't have hundreds yet.
What's the second at supposed to be?
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Honestly read this 3 times, and it always hits me in the feels. Although I wonder how I missed all the error fixes the first two times. I guess the fic is just that good. Although I don't know why this doesn't have more likes. It's a great, feel hitting fic.