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Crackers


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Pinkie is forced to go to Colgate - the new dentist in town - to get her teeth checked out. Unfortunately for Colgate, Pinkie is her first customer in Ponyville - she wasn't really counting on looking at the teeth of someone like that.

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Needs some editing, I saw a few spelling errors.
Overall, though, an enjoyably cute, funny, and above all believable story.

This certainly made me chuckle.

Compliments on the story.

Maybe she shouldn't have left her own her eon, though.

:twilightoops: I still can't figure out what you meant.

:rainbowlaugh: Those poor earth ponies!

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*her own

I was writing on my iPad, sorry, will correct it when I'm back from school. My proof reader hasn't checked this out yet.

It is not that bad, but i donĀ“t like the ending, it started great but if she is a dentist, she already have to know how everypony can do that i think.

Poor Pinkie Pie. But it was a very cute story, I enjoyed it. This site's amount of Colgate (or Minuette) stories is criminally low, so it's nice to see a good one pop up!

You'd think that of all the earth ponies, Pinkie would be the one able to defy logic and use a toothbrush just fine...

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Thank you!

It was originally going to be Applejack, but I really can't get her accent right. :twilightblush:

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I guess. I don't really write to clear things like that up - mostly because it comes out in mumble-jumble and it's not understandable.

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That would have been fun too, but I guess Pinkie makes more sense anyways, what with all the sweets. :pinkiehappy:

Good story but I'm disappointed Colgate would give up so easily. She reminds me more of the type that would persevere and do whatever it takes to teach Pinkie how to brush.

One would assume that there are special toothbrushes that nonunicorns are able to use.

An interesting story, but there's a problem.

If Pinkie can hold kitchen utensils and tie strings on balloons, she can probably hold a toothbrush.
The fandom has been trying for years to figure out how ponies hold things in their hooves, but somehow they do, and the only answer so far has been, "very well indeed!"

Still, Colgate is a dentist, and part of being a dentist is cleaning a patient's teeth. If Pinkie had to come to her office every day for a five-minute cleaning, all the better for a steady income-producing customer.

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