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ocalhoun


I am not contained between my hat and my boots.

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Dear Princess Celestia, this is easy!


Join Twilight Sparkle and her friends as they easily defeat every challenge thrown at them with their awesome friendship powers.


Based on this story:
My Little Pony: Friendship is Overpowered (Equestria Girls)
My Little Pony: Friendship is Overpowered (Season 5)

Chapters (26)
Comments ( 699 )

It's my goal to be caught up on these by the time season 5 begins.
Then, I'll try to publish one after every new episode. :twilightsmile:

You should rename this. The easy way out on every single episode.

She even managed to help out her friends with bunny censuses, stunt setups, and muffin baking in the meantime.

You glorious bastard.

Some of these are going to be quite funny. Over the top like this makes for good light comedy.

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That's going to happen a lot with these. :pinkiehappy:

5025763
You're probably right. I should be writing... not constantly refreshing this page.

5025769
Pretty much! ^.^

5025793
That's my favorite thing to be called! :rainbowwild:
:heart: You flatterer, you.

5025800
I certainly hope so! ^.^

5025803
:ajsmug:

This series is basicly MLP without the morals. This pleases us.

And nopony learned anything. Ever.

This is marked incomplete. If it is actually complete, let me know, otherwise it will be removed from the COMPLETED Story Compendium.

Already featured, and it just came out?!:derpyderp2:

+1 for the story. -1 for this chapter.:pinkiesick:

Comment posted by Sauron deleted Sep 19th, 2014

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:heart::twilightsmile:

5025874
Good, good. ^.^

5025875
It's better that way. ^.^

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Oh, yeah, sorry about that confusion.
It is complete, with all chapters written and ready to go...
But I'll be posting it one chapter per day.
I just leave it as 'incomplete' until the last chapter to avoid anyone getting confused and thinking that there won't be any more chapters.
I don't know if that counts or not... feel free to remove it until all the chapters are posted if you want.

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*checks*
:rainbowhuh:
It has had an amazingly quick popularity curve... but I don't see it in the feature box yet, even with mature turned off.

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I couldn't ask for a better reaction! :rainbowlaugh:

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Eh, yeah.
Some people are not going to like the way I did some chapters. It's inevitable.
I hope you can enjoy most of them, though! :twilightsmile:

5025954
:rainbowlaugh:
The image didn't load for me... but then I saw the file name.
:rainbowkiss:

This seems familiar :ajsmug:

Like that story (which isn't very good, I don't know what the author was thinking), this story doesn't really deviate from the show enough to be noticeable. I guess that's sort of the point, but it just feels really boring, not necessarily funny.

Ocalhoun...

*slow clapping*

This. Is. Awesome. :pinkiehappy:

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I just hope how you treat Gilda doesn't make me upset. I hated that episode as it made no sense to me.

If you don't reply to this comment, I'll give you a like or a favorite.

Just reply to this comment, stating your choice, it's one or the other.

5026063
Wait, you did that, too? :rainbowlaugh:
I thought you had forgotten about it, so I set out to do it myself.
Whoops. :facehoof:
Oh well, hopefully it will be enjoyable anyway.
...and I'm sure some of the episodes, at least, will be very different. :twilightsmile:
Some are harder to subvert than others.

5026069
Thanks! :twilightsmile:

5026074
*Trying to remember how I treated Gilda*
It's a little better than in the show, actually, I think.

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I reply to everyone, no exceptions, not even for bribes. :twilightsmile:
And besides, if you're going to like/fave, I want it to be on the story's merits, not because of some gimmick.

5026063
*looks more closely at yours*
Well, at least we did it in considerably different ways.
In mine, everypony is OP, not just Twilight... and I'm doing every episode. :twilightsmile:

I can't help but think of this as I read your story.

Anyway, I got a few laughs from it, so have an upvote. :twilightsmile:

5026124 DAMMIT! You saw through my trap!

I was jesting, I wouldn't grade a story based on it's comment section. Just wanted to see to what extent your one rule would go.

The results were rather complete. Thank you for the details! It sure will be handy when I'll use your identity to take control of half of Europe!

5026124 Eh, I don't doubt there will be some deviation, but the main reason that I stopped reading Letters from a Disgruntled Friendship Student was because literally every chapter used the same joke and it quickly lost its novelty.

After reading the first two chapters of this I had a flashback to why I stopped reading that story :derpytongue2:

With OPony, I actually intentionally stopped doing every episode perfectly in order because it became so mind numbing following such a rigid blueprint.

5026063 agreed. first chapter was kind of funny, this one, not so much. I'll read a few more and see if it gets any better.

OK, if you want a critique, here we go:

Basically, you took the existing script and just removed all of the obstacles from the episodes. Considering the fact that conflict is that which a story revolves around (yes, even comedies), this makes for an incredibly boring and woefully short story, with no real originality, and no reason to continue reading, other than the fact that it might get better.
That being said, the writing is decent and there are no gaping grammatical or spelling errors.

TL;DR - You have the skill to write a decent story, but the story itself is flawed.

5025875 My little Pony: Applejack Edition

(Spoiler, the S5 season finale is a three-episode cider party in which Applejack drinks cider. lots of cider.)

5025874 Is there a way I can give you a thumbs up and a thumbs down at the same time?:applejackunsure:

This was boring.:ajsleepy: Try to make the next chapter better, please?

5027006 In what way? Was there supposed to be a funny joke?

S0XEXX: The ones with Twilight - Powerful spell that the canon plot needed her to forget she had. The end.

This story is like the short version of Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality where the main character can use established intelligence and knowledge in the cannon story. Since the title is Overpowered I'm cool with the Daos X Machina

Spike stared into the pool. "How do we use six ponies to defeat Nightmare Moon?"

I could see this story going in a whole other direction with this kind of statement and a few party cannons.

.......Wouldn't there be some kinda security measures against this kinda thing? I mean it's essentially a free pass into the castle so they would be probably have dealt with a few ponies trying to do this.

I agree that using the fact that it is really that simple and could easily be resolved but it seems to be rushed if you want the story to be simple for the heroes focus on characters.

This story has no flow no morals and if you wanted this to be simplified you should of had her go to Celestia right away. Also and this is coming from a poor editor, you have no flow or indication of character change. I am genuinly interested in this but it would really benefit from an edit and better pacing.

While this chapter is awful and it is no getting past that it is too short and Applejack doesn't learn anything or do anything wrong. There is potential with this premise so I suggest you go back and rewrite these with a timeline and a word limit.

GMD

You sir, (or mam) are a genious. Here is MY seal of approval!

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If you looked at the picture, you just got skurred.

5027189 Were you reading the same chapter as me? Applebuck Season had two sentences, neither of them funny in the slightest.:rainbowdetermined2:

This is almost exactly how I became a brony: Finish the two-parter opening, become instantly hooked, wait with baited breath for next instalments. Now I'm getting all sentimental...

What you've just done there is write the most hilarious paragraph in the English language. Bravo! :pinkiehappy:

Well... that was... something.

Honestly, this strikes me as something which is funnier in concept than execution. "What if all of the episodes ended instantly due to the use of soft magic?" is a funny idea, but in practice, reading the stories isn't actually all that interesting, even as short as they are.

5027628 What I find funny is that, without a moral lesson to stretch out the situation, It's hilarious how easily resolvable most of these problems can be, if it's all carried out the right way.

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