"Help. Help! Please? Help? There's— there's a horrible cloud of smoke. It's headed this way and—" Fluttershy shrieked as Rainbow Dash moved in beside her.
Rainbow stopped her bouncing when she looked where Fluttershy was pointing. "There is a huge black cloud! Hold on, I'll get—" Rainbow turned to leave, but then froze, blinking. "...Twilight?"
"Listen up! Smoke is spreading over all of Equestria." All the ponies around gasped at Twilight's pronouncement. "But don't worry, I've just received a letter from Princess Celestia informing me that it is not coming from a fire."
Fluttershy sighed. "Oh thank goodness."
"It's coming from a dragon."
The crowd gasped again.
Twilight smiled, doing her best to reassure them. "Don't worry, though. I'll take care of it. Just keep calm, everypony." With that, she vanished in a blink of violet light.
She reappeared in front of the dragon's cave. "Okay, big boy." She walked inside. "Time for you to go."
Inside the dragon slept peacefully, firmly ensconced on his mountain of gold.
A tiny bit of strain actually entered Twilight's face as she prepared a massive teleport spell.
A moment later, the dragon vanished in an enormous flash, safely sent off to the dragon wastelands where he belonged.
"Phew, that was a big one." Twilight wiped a little sweat off her brow, then looked at the golden hoard. "Now... what to do with all this?" She smiled to herself. "It would be a shame to just leave it sitting around, and the library could use some extra funds for renovations."
Jeez, and I thought RARITY was selfish in this episode...
And...Twilight steals Fluttershy's moment of awesome. Great.
5038633
Huh... I wasn't aware of that limitation.
At any rate, I'm saying Twi could overcome it by being overpowered.
5038832
Sounds like fun.
5038920
Indeed.
(This isn't meant to be a great work of literature. It began as just sort of a mental exercise I did sometimes while watching the episodes... and since I'm a writer... it ended up here.)
5038931
Fair enough.
5039564
This is true.
Though I did write one story that redeems her.
5040146
Thanks!
5040380
Perfect! Division of labor.
Hehe. The simplest solution is usually the best solution!
Thieflight Sparkle
5040402
Heh. Why not, though?
I'm sure she shared some with Rarity.
5040406
Eh, had to be done, I guess.
Or, well, I guess I could have had Fluttershy fly up there and do her thing right from the moment she saw the smoke...
Oh well. I'll leave that one to anyone who decides they can do this same thing, but better.
5040422
Oh, it's not stealing... More like 'salvage'.
5040420
Sometimes it is.
Extra space.
Throwing non pony things (and blue Twilight) out of town is what they do best. Why can they not be friends?
KBO.
5040415 I still think she is awful. I may like a particular author's perception of her, but that doesn't change the fact that originally, she was a grade A bitch.
I too would've been tempted to have brought all of that treasure and get myself my own castle.
Those renovations surely included a defence mechanism to protect the tree from giant bolts of energy... Just in case, though...
And now she's stealing.
Man, this version of Twilight is turning into more of a jerk with each chapter.
It's most likely that the characters are more inproved then before!
Awesome Job, Ocalhoun!
Twilight the Mary Sue
5040529
I've gotten addicted to those now.
5040652
Is true.
5040673
Who wouldn't?
5041049
Of course.
Heh, I think I'll use that when I finally get to season 4.
5041359
Power corrupts.
Overpower overcorrupts.
5041389
What?
5041746
As opposed to...
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5042075 I mean Improved. Also, i'm talking about how everypony, most likely Twilight (Most Favorite), is 100% sure of what there supposed to do in a situation and finish it in no time!, now you get it?
I was actually considering doing a series strikingly similar to this.
Kudos for beating me to the punch.
5042123
Yep!
5042238
To be fair, I sort of came up with this idea together with Cleverpun while I was editing one of his stories.
Little did I know, he actually did it, too, long before me.
5036072 Sounds kinky
5042597
I also find this one funny. It's quite random though, and... it's kinda like yours with Twilight being OP, but she and everyone knows and hates her for it.
Twilight is OP, pls nerf
5042707
Just like Twilight!
5042937
So... what you're saying is... you're a dick?
5043088
heh, that would be a fun premise
5043516
It would!
(And actually, I'm unsure of what happened to all that gold in the canon version of events, too.)
5043723
A glutton for punishment, I see.
5043756
Even this was pretty tedious to write, and it required an absolute minimum of effort per episode.
5040406
Tats. This isn't a deep, sequential story. It doesn't matter if characters get eclipsed. Fluttershy had her moment in canon, and unless we saw her like... throwing the dragon over the horizon or something that we'd reserve for Applejack, then you can't really get more overpowered than using the Stare. How would you make it 'stronger'? "I am completely hypnotizing you. I am now hypnotizing you more than you were already hypnotized...?" Fluttershy was already OP in that episode. Time for a different take on it, you know?
it seems the creator favours twilight so they are buffing her while nerfing every of character who can stand a chance against her.... like most MMOs
Well this certainly isn't... literary genius... but it is fun... Okay fine it makes me smile, so I'm just gonna give it a gold star so I can keep an eye n things.
I'll see you at the next chapter.
Short, contrived, and makes very real sense, yet fun enough to make up for it. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
5044136
How would I make it more OP?
Fluttershy flies up, puts the dragon over her knee, and spanks it for being a bad boy and spreading smoke over Equestria. Then she orders him to pack up his things and go home, and he does so while crying. Then she comforts him a little, saying he didn't know any better but still needed to learn. Then he flies off. Then she flies back to Ponyville, sees everyone ready to celebrate her heroism, and faints due to her fear of crowds.
It's about time Twilight got some kind of compensation!
In episode where SPike went on adventure to talk with other dragons and learn more about himself, Twilight had huge troubles to teleport herself alongside with three of her friends, and once she did it, she was exausted. I am more than sure that even alicorn Twilight from season 4 finale with power of all princesses wouldn't be able to do it.
To be honest, I was expecting Twilight to write letter back to the princess saying:
"Than you for warning us, sadly, I must refuse your request to deal with this dragon. First of, I am an unicorn without any combat experience, more or less knowledge about grown up dragons outside of few books I read. My friends also never encountered dragon before. Trying to convince him to leave or facing it in battle would result in the dragon eating us all before burning Ponyville to the ground. You on the other side, Princess, are a powerful alicorn with over milenium years of experience, surely you and your sister are more capaibe to deal with such beast and posses knowledge about them. My other advice is to send an group of experts in dealing wtih dragons, surely royal guards or school for gifted unicorns have specialists in that field. Finaly, I and my friends are element bearers of harmony, surely if one of us will be eaten by a dragon, elements would become useless against any thousand years old evil that may appear sooner or later, surely our lives are to valiuable to risk to deal with a dragon. Also, my appologise for using word 'surely' repetively in this letter. Your Faithful Student, Twilight Sparkle."
And after sending this letter, one hour later Celestia and Luna would negotiate with the dragon and most likely kick his ass in cool combat. Surely the princesses deserve some badass screen time. Surely it will be more interesting than doing paper work all day while their powers is wasted.
well said.
In this one fluttershy should have fus ro dah on the dragon. But this one will do.
This one made me lol...
I prefer the friendship is witchcraft approach :
"And then there was so much dragon blood we just slid down the mountain! "
We'll, there goes part of Fluttershy's confidence
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Given the running theme of this story, I'm sure she'll manage anyway.