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discordneal14


I am a gifted author who's one of the biggest Discord fans in the U.S.

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When Applebloom, Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle are given a map to Tirek's long-lost treasure, they go on a voyage to find the treasure. The only problem is, no one knew of the true greed within the crew.

This story is inspired by the book, Treasure Island.

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A couple of days and already, I get over 50 views, 6 likes, and 0 dislikes. To that, I say... :pinkiehappy:

Isn't Discord all-seeing and all-hearing?

5017665 Not exactly the same. I won't be having Pipsqueak or Captain Feathersword in this story, and I don't see anywhere in your story that references Tirek.

5017735 Not that I seen. As far as I can tell in the show, Discord is attracted to conflict and changes in the magical balance. It doesn't necesserily mean that he sees all and hears all.

Comment posted by Probably Minion deleted Sep 18th, 2014

5020205 I meant it's similar because this story and my story both are about the CMC on a treasure hunt. :twilightsheepish:

5021822 Oh, well I bet plenty of fans wrote fictions on the subject.

We got Team CMC, Team DDs, and Team Sugar Lumps.

Pirates have always been pretty awesome. It took awhile but I finally feel the introductions and the setup for the rest of the plot is now well connected. Keep at it. :twilightsmile:

The name of the ship 'SS Gale' should be 'S.S. Gale'. Seems trivial I know but, without it, it just reads like a hiss.

In earlier chapter when you had the 'Sugar Lumps' (I like that! Smart name for the two!) following the CMC who were being followed by the Diamond Dogs, "What THEY didn't know what that they were being watched also." needs a "was" of the ones that made me hiccup during my read.

Nice adventure setup. Hardly see anyone use the Diamond Dogs, a missed opportunity within the show itself, too. Gotta love the determination and spunk DT brings to the table. They have magic and brawn, she has the plan. Or so she believes, being unaware of the monkey wrench next door.

Famous last words, Trixie?

Even if Scootaloo can fly, Sweetie Belle's weight would......

I bet that Tirek created the Leech River equivalent to his absorbing powers.

5112591 More will be on that river later in the story. Just wait.

(screaming) BIGFOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

5128951 I like screaming random stuff.

Tirek is batting a lost cause.

The CMC will have a grand tale to tell to the Mane 7.

5142270 Mane 7? Don't you mean, Mane 6?

5144193 Spike's a part of this team.

In the sentence with daring do giving the key, it say daring do not Trixie. That needs fixed.

“Heeeeere's Trixie,” Trixie shouted.

The Shining. Brilliant. :twilightsmile:
(What I did there... see it?) :facehoof:

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