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The Incognito Brony
Elsewhere I'm Brony Incognito, but that name was taken here, so what're you going to do. Something of an oddball, but I do try to entertain. Hope you all enjoy the insanity I come up with.
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A small number of errors for a large, well written story.
Good work.
Excellent work, thumbs up. This was a good read.
a very pleasing story good job
Faved!
Good story, though it was a bit disappointing that AJ and BM didn't get it on.
Its not really an error but this one just made me think about that picture with a female macintosh :). (Macintosh shrugged and dug into her share.) Which would me this story even stranger. But I really liked the story.
Wow.... I am not sure what to say about this. I was expecting something... well... to clop too, but this is much more heartfelt then that, I got into the story a lot.
Loved it, though I might still avoid Heat and Desire, not a big fan of humans in Equestria, but do keep writing.
The whole thing pissed me off to be honest.
Good story, but pissed me off nonetheless.
Damn, Big Mac and AJ deserve a medal for that shit. Good story, sir, bravo.
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I can respect that, it's why I put it in separate. That, and HaD is somewhat dark. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the nod.
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Welcome to my headspace
So a burgundy aura or horn, I cant seem to think the any pony in Equestria since I consider twilight to be more purple. But i'm picking on details again.
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You're not wrong. The colour is a bit too red, really, but sounded good. Still, don't forget that Twilight's magic randomly changed colour between seasons.
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I can't think of much to say about this, but only because it was that good. Perfect pacing, and enough detail to keep it going, without drowning the story. Excellent work.
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No biggy, I hadn't noticed they aren't that strict with twilight her magic colour. Really I just wanted to know if AJ had an eye for twilight and telling twilight to lock her in her basement. Too keep herself from jumping on to twilight in her moment of weakness. But really they look so cute together:
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Their is room for a story their!
Thanks.
Well done. The entire point of this story was resisting desire and it definitely came across in spades, particularly in the scene with Applejack and the plastic horn. It was sad and violent, and there was no joy in it. Masterfully written. There's some pretty bad BM/AJ fics out there, and frankly I find them disgusting. This really did bring out the animal of the subject, and twisted it into something far more feral and sweaty. You certainly know how to write a heat-wave, if I may coin the phrase.
...whatever happened to Twilight, I wonder? We never did check in on her, for the entire story. I mean I know it was all about Big Mac and AJ, but after the cold opening I expected at least one scene with her, haha.
Well done. Cheers!
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Have to admit, I like the phrase.
As to Twilight, thought about it, but the only thing I could see having her do was trying to seduce the polygraph in the basement. Didn't really fit in, though I do plan to touch on it and the other bits of what went on later in the main story.
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Sorry, I somehow managed to miss this when it first came through.
Yes, that was the intent, pretty much on the head; which, I have to admit, makes me feel pretty good all told. As to a story on Twilight and Applejack? As much as I like the pairing, I don't think a story about what went on is in the cards. At least for a while. I plan to touch on it later in the main story, but the premise for Heat and Desire just doesn't allow for a start-to-finish happy relationship be the drive of a chapter.
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I think it wouldn't be to weird to touch on the subject later in a main story. Good luck!
This was a great story.
So, AJ didn't want to just meaninglessly fuck twi, but fucked Pinkie and rarity?
Also, where was fluttershy?
And most important thing.
I didn't understand, Rainbow dash is completely sterile? That's pretty damn sad!
Or is she one of those athletes that exercise so much that it freezes their cycles?
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Yep, boarded up inside her house to prevent herself from escaping, and yes, she's barren in this.
Glad you enjoyed!
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Saaaad
took me forever to finish but it was all around satisfying.
i knew when big mac was sniffin that he would have gotten a hoof to the brain. saw it coming with how
clever and stubborn AJ is.
I'm sorry, but what just happened?
No, really. Is this supposed to be sexy? Is it some weird social commentary or satire? I really don't get it. Help?
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It's an exploration of how a society would handle an annual, distinct heat (granted, written before I understood equine estrus) and the strength of family and will of Applejack and Macintosh. Because of the subject matter, there's sex in it.
And yeah, I know how pretentious it sounds to explain it that way.
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Pretentious clop is fine by me. I guess I have to look at it in the context of H & D in general.
I was excepting this to be a lot darker than it actually was, which was a nice surprise. It was still a tad dark; illegitimate children, loosing control of one's mind and body, and it just seems a tad sad that everyone is clopping around and Applejack can't get the mare of her dreams. IT also says something about relationships in Equestria, they seem to be more open than ours? Like Aegis Shield said, you really brought out the animal of the subject. Great work. Did you have the two foals in mind for Big Mac's kids? What did Big Mac mean when he mentioned Pinkie Pie when Applejack mentioned "you'll do 'em right and they'll be the prettiest in town". Did Pinkie and Big Mac get it on once or something?
Anyway, a good read, a nice expansion to the Heat and Desire universe and a touching family story where siblings almost fucked.
Greenthumbed!
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It's always interesting to see what's taken away from a story. On more open relationships than ours, the answer's yes and no. The idea was that that having a defined heat would likely have a system like this in place where mares have two weeks of socially acceptible and expected 'free love' as it were, and the stallions were either sent away or restrained. What happened to Macintosh here is actually important to the main story (seriously, the next chapter is still kicking my butt 5+ months later) as was a hint-drop in chapters 1, 2 and 3.
The idea was to examine what most would see as a sexual fantasy from the eyes of someone who lived it and seeing a kind of hell; though I've left out, to date, husbands resenting their wives for socially acceptible cheating during the time, Macintosh's thing is regretting the children he's had, but can't acknowledge due to the social requirements. It's unimportant to the story, but yes: One was a background character without a defined name, the other's Dinky. Ditzy and Carrot Top being a couple in this universe, though unstated.
Most of this is from a somewhat abandoned idea, so what the hell: a lot of this was actually set up for something else as well that I put aside for HaD's main story wherein Applejack tries to find willing mares to make good on her promise, but none of those she knows as being very open during the heat are willing to sleep with him, especially to 'cheat,' outside of the heat despite feeling terrible for Macintosh as it's just not done to be that open any other time; and AJ would eventually be court-ordered to stop asking due to indecency. It would have later been learned that every barren mare in town is married specifically because their husbands are allowed to stay home during those weeks and be able to trust their wives. Which is also why the hint toward Dash being barren was in there, though it doesn't connect to Macintosh.
And the bit with Pinkie was mostly just Mac poking fun at his sister, who he knows prefers mares, and him thinking she's got the best backside. Could have happened, but never had it in my head that it did.
1965019 Yeah, I could see how males could feel resentment and maybe even insecure about it all. Did Macintosh stud those children or where they from a moment of weakness? Speaking of which, if your headcannon has Dinky as one of his kids, then you should remove her as one of Wild Oats kids, unless they THINK she's Oats kid but secretly Macs, and that would be insane. Is the thing about Big Mac you're hinting has to do with Flourish?
So in this universe, it is preferred for stallions to marry barren mares since they don't suffer from the heat. Mares who want children make arrangements and 'get some' under the town hall? Sorry for all the questions, but this universe is really interesting and also a bit horrifying, (but more of that in the Heat and Desire comments),
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I'm sorry, you're right, I'm getting my universes mixed. It's been a while since I wrote this and I should have waited to pull out my notes. Ignore me.
Though, yes, the hint about Flourish is right and yes, it's considered normal for mare-couples to ask a stallion, or go in for stud service should they want children.
Edit: And yes, the intent was that the kids were a planned stud. The thing with the barren mares is more that stallions, later in life, realize that they don't like the setup they've been given and want to actually have a home. So, yes, since their wives then wouldn't go into heat they'd neither have to leave home nor have to worry about their wives cheating. Still have to be restrained, though. In the original, Mrs. Cake was going to be barren and I was debating having Pinkie being asked to surrogate, but the series passed me and rendered that one pretty moot.
This was quite enjoyable my good friend
isn't it the FEMALES that get into HEAT, and NOT the MALES?! they just get WILD if they SMELL a female in heat!
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Um, yes? Well, no, horses don't actually work that way, but that's beside the point.
The point was that Macintosh was going nuts because he was a few hundred yards away from an entire town of in-heat females, Applejack included, unable to get away from the smell and was going insane with the frustration.