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TurboTheGameGuy


I'll die with the herd. psn: turbogamer110 Discord is TurboTheHouseBug#8926

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WARNING! This is an OC story, proceed at your own risk!
Turbo has always been a loner. So it wasn't uncommon for Mist to see his little brother alone. But there's been a change in his loathsome behavior he's spending too much time alone in his room but something big has happened, after opening up his bedroom door to check on him. He notices, Turbo's window opened, and a letter that said "dear Mist, by the time you read this I'll be long gone, you didn't know this, but I need to find something, something important. Whatever you do, don't try to stop me, I need to do this myself. Goodbye brother, I'll see you again." Now Mist Dasher is out to find Turbo, as Turbo is out to find his romance.
OcxOC (straight ship)
First story since I had writer's block, so please be nice if it's not that great
On Hiatus until I decide what to do with this fic

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 23 )

Cover art needed?
If so, you can ask me!
Still, amazing so far!

5262773 well, I'm not exactly expecting this to be a success but alright.

5262776 thanks! I'm not exactly expecting this story to fly over well, but I'll try to finish it

5262869 I think it'll be a winner! It looks pretty good! And even if it isn't, it's still another pretty good story

Have a compulsory like! I'ma add this to my favourites and read it later, too tired right now to read anything else, just got done writing some of own fic.
So...my opinion, coming to comments near you!

This is an example of a self insert wish fulfillment story done right, even if it has short chapters.

5263093 The beginning chapters are mean to be short, thanks though!

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Also, I kind of have to be nice to friends and such, El is keeping a close eye at me.

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Alright.....
I have a feeling this is going to be hard. I'm up for it! :yay:

5263134 And this is just a practice write anyway, I'm writing this due to the fact that I haven't written anything in forever because writer's block, so I'm not expecting this to be a success

I see that there is a lack of the punctuation and dialogue in this chapter, you really have to to work on that. But good start on the story Turbo, hope u can improve your punctuation and dialogue a little more. On a scale of 1-10, I'd give this a rating of 8. But hope you can improve sooner or later.

With best,
Sango

Just Work on your punctuation like what Sango said, and you'll do good but awesome story!

5262928 Maybe I am...Maybe I aren't...
Who knows?:pinkiecrazy:

this is good, please don't cancel it

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