A side story to The Empire of the Smoky Skies
based on the song "Lament for a Toy Factory" by Dr. Steel.
All Case Closed, defense attorney, wants to do is interrogate the defendant in regards to a case of Arson and Murder in the first degree. Now, that would be simple if the pony he was interrogating wasn't literally off his rocker.
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No image, sadly :<
Caution: Dark themes. You have been warned.
EDIT: decided not to make a second chapter, and instead integrate some of the second chapter ideas within Smokey Skies at some later point. Cheers, Snipes
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Dislike within 5 minutes of approval? I doubt that was staff, so could whoever downvoted at least tell me why? Sheesh :/
First of all, I really liked the atmosphere of this story. Pretty grim, and I like it. However, some elements might be a little misplaced here and there. For example, do you think that cigarettes really exist in Equestria? This might just be me, but I don't think it really fits.
4890961 keep in mind that this is a sidestory to an AU I'm working on, Empire of the Smoky Skies. I completely understand where you're coming from with the cigarettes, (I doubt they even have alcohol some times) but in the AU this is apart of, Cigarettes are pretty tame :3
4890989 Alrighty, I'll keep that in mind. Another note: Keep practicing, that's how you'll get better!
saw the title and thought to myself,if some sonovabitch was actually crazy enough to do pony doctor steel i would love them forever. gonna read this when i get home.
And toy soldier reporting in. To the great doctors vision. All hail Doctor Steel.
4891471 I'll admit, I had a friend show me the good doctor for the first time, and I liek Industrial tone. Was going to post the basic story as a side story anyway, but then saw no one had anything related to Doctor Steel, and felt like changing that mistake.
Gasoline filled super-soakers will be distributed once the doctor finishes building the army T)
4891074 agreed! The more you practice, the better you get.
Also, didn't they say you need liek 10,000 hours to become a master of something?
...it's not like I have 3.2k on Company of Heroes 1 or anything...
i very much hope circut makes a fabulously wierd return. faving and waiting with interest.
4891965 Actually, I don't know about that. I think it depends on the person or something.
4892067 huh. Worth looking into :3
4892021 well, to get thrown into jail, he had to get caught, right? :3
SO! I had this Brilliant idea! I decided to come to Fim:Fiction and search a name, a very particular name of a certain Musician! Dr. Steel... And This!!! THIS IS BRILLIANT!!! I am so glad that i found this!! AND YOU!!!!
I do have some criticisms now after reading the short story... You used the term hands instead of hooves all bot one occurrence.