• Published 16th Apr 2012
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It calls itself Nightmare - Slick Dash



Luna's diary entries from her final 13 days before she became the dreaded Nightmare Moon!

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Day 13

From the desk of the second princess of Equestria: Luna.

Day: 13

They are plotting against me! My own sister and the Stallion I thought loved me as much as I did him! I went to Tia’s chambers only a few moments ago, needing the loving touch of my sister. But when I got there, her door was ajar, and I could hear Strafe’s voice from within.

They were talking about me! Strafe said how “If she cannot raise the moon, then she isn’t the Luna we know.” How could he say that? I thought he loved me?! TIA AGREED! My own sister is stabbing me in the back, I feel terrible inside.

My insides feel like ice, ready to shatter at the slightest touch. I feel frail and more vulnerable than ever before in my life. How could they do this to me?

I feel Nightmare whispering to me now, she says I’m weak, but she can make me strong. All I need do, is give in to the thoughts and idea’s she offers me. Nightmare knows magic, far beyond that of Tia and I. It tells me with her as my guide, I’d never need worry about my sister’s betrayal again.

Can she take the pain away? What happens if I become the nightmare?
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From the desk of the second princess of Equestria: Luna.

Day: 13 cont.

I do not believe it wise to record my thoughts beyond this point. I do not wish this account to be a window into my fracturing mind.

Nightmare is whispering to me, telling me to make Strafe pay for his betrayal, and then my dear sweet sister. I’m going to speak to him now, and give him a chance at redeeming himself, to tell me he loves me and that he will help me!

If I do not make another entry in this journal... I don’t know what will have happened, Possibly, I gave in to the being inside me. Maybe I became the nightmare.

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Comments ( 22 )

Epic fic right there! :rainbowlaugh: a shame it ended so soon :( but it was moments of epicness while i read it :D

I love these kinds of fic! :rainbowkiss:

"and then my dear sweat sister."

I'm pretty sure, you mean "her dear sweet sister"

460808 hmmmm, sounds creepier if I kept it that way ;D
nah thanks il fix it now!

460853
Nice:pinkiehappy:

Great story by the way:twilightsmile:

One problem... TO F*CKING SHORT!!! i was sucked in, then it ended :fluttercry:

461073 It sucked you in? :twilightblush::yay::twilightblush: I wrote this in an hour long free period at school. I was just sharing it with people because the idea had been rolling round for aq couple days, I'm really glad you got into it even after all that!
I wanted it to be sad, that everybody knows the tale of what happened next. I wanted there to be an untold sadness about Strafe that people would feel bad for.
Sorry to rant, but you just made me really happy about my writting style thats been damaged a little by people outside this site with my other works :)

461083 glad you enjoyed it, 'n thnx for the watch too! :pinkiehappy:
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ignore this bit, notification whent screwey and told me you had when you didn't :P

Go forth, and prosper in all your diamond-finding adventures, my strangers! if you find diamonds in your journey, good for you! but if you find friends along the way, thats great for you!
ME^,^/]E\e_eMy non-brony friend.
but then, first i was all like:unsuresweetie:, but then i was all :rainbowlaugh:

Oh boy, it was pretty good but like someone commented a bit too short.
Perhaps, if you had mentioned the populaces opinion of her or the fact that she notices her talents are not being recognized by her subjects; it would have given her more reason to 'slip' into madness. While she thought she was betrayed by both her sister and her "lover", it would have been interesting to see her subjects reactions.

Would they shy away? Would they ignore her? Look on in pity?

Just some thoughts I had near the end, you can probably ignore my incessant ramblings.

Whatever the case, good job! I still enjoyed the fic even if I wanted more.:trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft:

Can't wait for the next one!:twilightsmile: If you need an idea let me know, I got something you can try.

~8chill

I would have re-responded sooner, but I had to go on a short journey(15 miles, gee whiz!), i wish to extend my hoof in friendship to you, Slick. and hope to see your work in the future. and you mine, if i ever make anything,that is =.=

461337 wouldn't mind at all :pinkiesmile: will give you a watch click to ensure i don't miss anything :derpytongue2:
461247 hmmmm, you are right, that would have made it a lot better actually! also, bout to post the next chapter for the long one I'm still doing :yay:

Actually, im a huge liar, i havent read it yet, well, i aint said i did, anyways, i just didnt have the time, so i pre-complimented it...sorris for lyin...:fluttershysad:
and you may be as such as this face is:ajbemused:...I would understand, but I am brainstorming an adventure of epic proportions for future things. among other junk. and my schedule is crazy right now, I'm literally running all around town...and this whole comment probably was completely unnecessary. but i decided to post it, for unknown reasons, and for probably more trouble than I need or want. but i shouldn't worry. i dont know why i am, and there goes the time, its 5:00, time to go

461565 hey, no worries! :pinkiesmile:

This was refreshing in a strage way. Not long enough to really suck me in, or make me get all emotional (haha actually thats really difficult) but thats ok. its defiantly a short story and accomplished everything a short story needs. Also I'm starting to brainstorm that partner fic we had in mind a few weeks back. I will PM you in the coming days.

610478 crap :ajbemused: thought id fixed all them! :derpytongue2:

Wow, Luna is one of my favorite ponies, and to many people don't like her because of the nightmare moon crap. I've always felt that it might of have had something to do with love.
Amazing fic. :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

768700 always heartwarming to see such a happy reaction to one of my stories! Thankyou for the time you took to read this! :pinkiehappy:

768975
Now I'm reading your fluttermac one! :yay::heart::eeyup:

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