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I thought the rose in the picture was Octy's mouth so like she was screaming as she danced with Twilight

Before I read it, I need to ask you something; is this cover art your art?

you had me on "Strapons and Light Domination" the TwixOcti is just the cherry on top :moustache:

Nothing really, just curious ^^

It has begun, that was so hot. :heart:

I liked it... kinda, dood. Insert stupid thing where Twilight should have topped Octavia with a small dash of Butthurt Prinny here, dood. :twilightblush:

Twilight's hair in the cover art . . .

No words. Also, for some reason, I started to think of someone doing a Sparta remix of a girl going through an orgasm when I saw Octavia.

. . .

Yeah, not one of my best ideas.

this was fantastically sexy. It could use more anal, but then again, everything could use more anal. I just have to make do with what I have.

Wow... That was so hot! This story had pretty much all my favorite things in it - lesbians, domination, and panties. You can never have too much panty play in a fic (sucks that it's so rare)! I think this is my new favorite clopfic from you!

Just one comment - in the paragraph starting "Heh, I should think so…", there's a missing paragraph break.

I have such a massive boner right now... and I can't just remove the laptop to take care of things...

It would be rude to jerk off in front of my roommate and his girlfriend :twilightblush:

That pic is SO adorable

This... is going to be one hell of a ride. :rainbowkiss:

4895475 Thanks for catching that. :heart:

I'd say this story was worth the wait, it certainly was the best thing I've read so far tonight :pinkiehappy:

I predicted this, soon it will get featured, for all those virgin horse fuckers to read

...completed with a tiny white bow in the front...

This line made me say, "D'awww."

I got here a little late and I’d love to hear you play a little bit more.

Extra space.

She wrapped her end of the leash around her left fore leg and gave it a gentle tug, steering Twilight towards the bed.

She flicked her tail up and away, slowly pulled her panties down her legs, then flicked them across Octavia’s fore legs.

She curled her fore legs up to her chest and kept her hind legs spread wide.

Octavia wrapped a leg around Twilight’s fore legs and pinned them to her soft chest.

"Foreleg(s)" is one word.

“Stick your cute little ass up in the air, pet… Since you’ve been so good, I’m gonna make you cum for me…”

“Thank you, mistress… I promise to be a good pet…” Twilight moaned as she followed her mistress’ order.

Two characters' dialogue in one paragraph.

I”m gonna fuck that tight little cunt of yours till you cum all over my thick cock, pet…”

Quotation mark used as an apostrophe.

She let go over the chain and grabbed Twilight’s flank with her hooves, pulled back, then rammed the dildo back inside her.

"Of," probably.

Suddenly, Mistress yanked on her leash, pulling her downwards, and before she knew it Twilight found herself in a highly passionate kiss.

Missing comma.

This was quite arousing. Probably because of the novelty of the pairing. Not many Twitavia's... Octilight's? out there. Please take this Twilight ahegao as a reward.:twilightoops: Also a take a favorite and a like. You deserve at least that much.

KBO.:twilightsmile:

4895845 Thanks for catching those bud! :twilightblush:

Very nice. Very well done. I didn't think I'd like it at first, then I did :pinkiehappy:

4895931 That's what a lot of people say when they read my stories lol

4895947 To be fair, You do quite a few good stories that are a little hit or miss.

Boner,

Wat R U Doin?

Boner,

Stahp.

Whoa, whoa, whoa, whoa... Lois this is not my batman cup.

Now this, this is amazing, please moaaaar :rainbowwild:

I'm seriously tempted to turn this into a full multi-chapter story if it does well. ^^

Something tells me that is definitely going to happen. Can't wait.

Meh:eeyup: Can't do it. :unsuresweetie:

I always feel bad being the 70th person to like a story.

4895324

a Sparta remix of a girl going through an orgasm when I saw Octavia

Oh my fucking GOD this needs to happen. It needs to happen in that sort of way where something needs to not happen so much that it goes full circle and happens anyway.

This idea is that good.

~HM892

TwiTavia... another pairing you never expect to work. And then it goes and works. Great job, I'd love some more chapters. :pinkiehappy:

If this story gets 150+ likes, you must make another chapter.

Mad

I liked it, but I wish it were more romantic. The pairing works better than expected and I'd like to see it but then again it might just be because I'm a diehard asexual aromantic.

I very much enjoyed reading this story and I'm fairly certain I have a new OTP as a result of this. :twilightsmile:

4895324

Twilight's hair in the cover art . . .

No words.

I believe the words you are looking for are "Dandy's pompadour."

Yes.

Just... yes.

god yes!!! Finally, its good to see a good clop make it into the feature box. please make multi-chapter.

This... this. I like this. :trixieshiftleft:

I was waiting for someone to write Twivia...:pinkiecrazy::heart:~ Worth the wait.

You did it, you glorious bastard you! Been waiting for this since you made that blog post. Now I've gotta go read, to hell with sleep!

Twitavia lovin it glad to see someones including panties for a change but needs a lot more romance not just S&M its nice to see tavi as the dom for a change instead of Vinyl

damn just damn i love dominatrix with my wife (note im a lesbian) i get destroyed allot but this is unique i might try this:heart:

4895556 What, your laptop doesn't have a shaped bottom for that purpose?

This was quite a read. :heart:

A good read.
I give it five derpies ( :derpytongue2: :derpytongue2: :derpytongue2: :derpytongue2: :derpytongue2: )

You should its a great stroy

Oh look, it got featured.... I KNEW THAT THIS WOULD HAPPEN!

I'm seriously tempted to turn this into a full multi-chapter story

do it do it do it please please please I have been waiting for TwiTavia for soso long.

Ship it


SHIP IT LIKE FEDEX.

4897937
Because of your avatar I've read it in Maud's voice... :rainbowlaugh:

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