Awesome!

This coming from a guy who doesn't read the prologues. You went into detail had a great backstory, perfect.

I'm also a guy who tell others stories my way.
Like um...

When the The Hellhound kills the rogue alpha manticore. He looks towards the fillies and warns them not to tell anybody about this.

Then scoots becomes a smart Alek and says "he said anybody not Anypony so it's ok" (add dumb person voice)

Sweetie doesn't like the idea and says how anybody applies to all species, apple bloom calls her a dictionary and sides with Scoots.

I can't think of anything else, this being a prologue and all, by what I think is mid way to your story I add/change my remixed story and see how yours goes and see if I'm as good as the writer.

I use this as practice for my stories, you should try it.

Sorry for the rambling.

Good story would continue reading 9.99/10 (because nothing is perfect)

I find it a little weird that he's jumping in to save the fillies when he has most definitely seen it hundreds of times by now since he's been there ever since
before ponies became the dominant species of the planet. let say for roughly 1500-2000 years and that's probably short by a quite a few
centuries.basically your saying that no one has wondered into that forest and died or almost died in over 2000 year....But let's say he hasn't been in the
forest for those 2000 years lets say he wandered that entire time(albeit unlikely considering the fact he said he had collected all human history, technology,art,music, misc.) There is practically no way he didn't see a lot of dead ponies so why is he saving them this time? ....... Well this is me just saying it was really dumb way to force the story so you can progress it in this fashion...It might have been better if they stumbled upon the entrance then (put whatever here) and then The Elements or Celestia and Luna show up or somthing like that

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Im enjoying it, don't over think it the story.

He's a not fallout equestria writer, h'es the average Joe like the rest of us

Oh dam, I feel bad for him, last one of his species and your immortal, WITH all the horrors of war, im suprised he hasn't gone insane yet

Could use a solid proofread and I am really on the fence about the character, but I'll like/watch it for now. Whether or not I'll keep up will depend on how it fleshes out...we'll see.

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HALO REFERENCE FTW

Just reminding you that the manticore from the show was a baby. So is 3times bigger meant to be just an adult version? Cuz 3times bigger than an adult would make it practically tower over the trees lol

Nice start so far.

I like it!

4905638 of course it's a fucking halo reference it's a crossover for god sake

Nice start, I'll keep reading.