This story takes place before and ends after "Magical Mystery Cure" (somehow).
It revolves around Twilight Sparkle, one day she feels a little odd, and that odity becomes pain, that pain escalates untill the purple unicorn needs to see the doctor. Starts off after she knows about her mysterious disease.
The whole thing happens in Ponyville, and a brief travel to Canterlot to visit her family just in case it is her last.
Special thanks to my editor : Derpy Defense Force
This story is just an experiment on writing, i had a personal experience about this subject (a sick person, who doesn't tell their friends, and tries to still be there for them and his/her family) .
I decided to put an oc there, but don't worry there is no romance in here, it would be bad taste to just match any cannon character i like with my oc ... this is not that kind of story
Hurray im the first follower cant wait for the next chapter i like stories like this
That cover image just makes me want to hug Twilight and make sure she feels better.
This was a good story, I hope Twilight will be okay.
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Thanks for the follow :D ... this story is almost complete i just have to translate it to english and fix a few things, but the main plot is already made.
In 3-4 days i'll publish the second chapter
A good idea but the writing needs some serious work. Use quotation marks properly to show people are talking
"Like this" Do Not do this to show people are talking. It dose not work.
The idea has potential, but as it is this story is really going to struggle to gain any sort of serious attention unless some major changes are made. There are simply far too many errors. You need to proof read your work.
EDIT: so apparently English is not your native language. That's fair enough but still. Get someone to proof read this for you. The story needs it, badly.
4859075 the quotation marks are easy to change. i saw a writting guide here, i'm gonna check it out.
Thanks for the tips, i apreciate it. If you ever see another one of my fics, i can take hard criticism.
4860591 No problem mate. Good luck.
With all of the tons of info available on the internet about the show, it troubles me that you can't be bothered to spell or capitalize the episode title "Magical Mystery Cure" properly in the description. And I'm baffled by the fact that later on you spell "mysterious" correctly. If you got it right one time, why not the other?
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Corrected and, i guess i got distracted, i was even checking episodes so i don't know why i made the mistake on that episode's name
Aaaaaaagggggg cliff hanger
the idea has promise, but the writing is terrible.
Im not being mean or rude, i'm just being honest. Compared to any of the good story's on this site, this one dose not even come close. Most people who find this story probably will not read past teh first chapter unless major changes are made.
4926654 I agree with NebulaNyx on this. Very good idea, but lacks the proper grammar to keep readers from turning away. Try looking into getting an editor. It'll help your story tremendously in the long run.
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Thanks, i know i still have way to go.
I recently got an editor and he's working on the story,
As soon i heard from him i'll update it.