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Ah, the title alone makes me smile: excellent reference to Bonnie Tyler's amazing song "Total Eclipse of the Heart". Bravo.
I love it....... now i can't wait for the new chapter for "You Brighten My Day"
Commence read.
You say 2 decades in the description is 2000 years, but two decades is 20.
Something bad is going to happen in the near future, I can strongly feel it.
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I would say more, but I'm too sleepy...
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But still... Great work! =D
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And yes... I'm back! HA, HA, HA, HA! Oui, je suis de retour! =D
Ci si sente grande. =)
Once again Chrysalis shows her incompetence and stupidity. When is she ever gonna realize love doesn't fare well under a dictatorship. It is much more prevalent in times of peace. She is essentially gonna starve her changelings to death.
"No one hurts my familiar or friends" . Shouldn't that be family.
How does one stare profusely? Staring profusely.
But other that
Don't you just love it when you're an ancient being trying to resurrect your physical form through secrecy and subterfuge and a few anxious henchmen almost fuck it up? Worst part of my day I tell ya.
Great chapter, things are really picking up it's very exciting. Love how you decided to throw changelings into the mix there, should make for a lot of entertainment down the road. Looking forward to more!
Worth the wait for sure! This and Chapter nine felt perfectly seamed, picking up right where it left off. The continuity felt right, not like most others that just start up where the previous chapter left off. It's a hard feeling to describe exactly.
I'm also impatiently waiting for the scene where Celestia has to tell David, Luna or both at once, that David is tied into this much more than how it all looks.
pls releese chaptr elven nao.
The last scene here was also very nice and calming. A good contrast to the majority of this chapter, well done, pal. Can't wait for the next one!
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Don't read if ya haven't read the chapter :
Oh man, I thought that Ghastaloom was going to tell Chrysalis to somehow remove David or Luna from Canterlot, change into either of them and gradually seep out the magic or love out of her / him!
Just super...Your story is worth the wait .
The ending was really smooth.
Now Chrysalis...My 8th best pony
Will we see any more parts of her in future story?
Will David be in training with the other guards or with Luna in the up coming uprising? (war)
Will ever Luna...(You know what I will save my questions)for later.
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A minor typo, one that I've already rectified.
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Ah, allow me to explain, you may have mixed up the facts. It's been 2,000 years since humans last lived in Equestria. Before that, they spent a period of 20 years living with the ponies. I hope that helps clear up any misunderstanding.
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Typo in the notice of a typo fix?
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Another typo rears it's ugly head! But I have swiftly taken care of it! To answer your question, to state profusely, means to stare intently or in excess. Like Fluttershy in "The Stare Master". Hope that helps.
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A good question, but I can assure you, I have this story planned, the portal will be referenced again, but not necessarily in the way you might be hoping. For now, that's all I'm going to say.
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Thank you. Originally when I started writing this, I had no plans for involving Queen Chrysalis, but seeing her popularity, and I can honestly say I like her character, I got to thinking, hmmm, maybe I can work her into this and throw in a whole bunch of fun and unpredictable plot twists. Glad you enjoyed it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter myself. It should be another good one, to say the least. The story is going to start getting even better! And a certain moon princess said that there will be a strong hint of romance in the air, next chapter.
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You know without saying a word, and having added Chrysalis to the mix leaves a wide door of possibilities open, and I'm going to love seeing who guesses correctly and who over-thinks things. Though you did have an interesting thought there, but that's not what I have planned, at least not for now. Hmmm, am I kidding or just trying to throw you off. I'm terrible aren't, I? Regardless, things will be getting far better with the next chapter! In fact I may have to ask my followers to risk Type 6 Diabetes and read my Trixie fic, for a plot element that will tie into this story.
Oh yes, glad you enjoyed this chapter and liked the calming scene at the end. I like to balance adventure with romance to keep things in check. Oh, and I'll be working on chapter eleven along with chapter six of my Tia story, so it won't be quite as long a wait this time.
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I was hoping you'd find it worth the wait. And thankfully you won't have to wait as long for the next chapter. I will be starting it shortly. I'm really getting into this. Plus one of many parts I've been looking forward to working on, in addition to the next love scene, will be happening in chapter 11. Oh and have no fear, Chrysalis will be back. I've got plans for her, just as I have for all the major players in this story! But as for your other question, I'm not saying a word. You'll have to wait and see how the story unfolds!
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Hmmm, I'm not seeing it, this time. You should check my comment a little harder. And think to give those that just got home from working night shift a little slack.
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Yes, but what if she employes her forgotten power?
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Ah, your gifs say plenty and as we all know, a picture is worth 1,000 words! Glad you liked it! Oh and welcome back!
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You and me both. I'm getting some terrible vibes here. *shudders* Well, we'll find out soon enough, won't we.
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Have no fear, chapter 6 will be worked on along with chapter 11 of this story!
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Thank you, this story and it's title came to me as I thought about the lyrics of that song. The title made me smile when I thought of it. And I also liked how the word "Eclipse" can have a double meaning.
2052221 I've been thinking about it. It makes sense. And not becsuse ive been drinking for hours.
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It's all good my friend, so no worries. And I knew I'd miss a few typos. So far you and Avid Reader have found a total of two. At least I got them fixed already. Phew.
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You're too much, pal. I can see it now: You, hovering over the comments on this page whilst we all ponder and argue over who's going to do what and when. Meanwhile, you kick back in your chair and rub your hands together menacingly with a huge grin.
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That's not a nice thing to do!
Hmm, I have had your Trixie fic in my Watch later folder for quite a while, I should probably start that up, huh? Especially if we'll benefit from it in regards to this story. Yours, along with countless other Trixie fics, I've kept on hold to help me when I get started on mine eventually. Perhaps this can inspire a few ideas in me.
2054431 I just hope Twi doesn't ruin it for the two lovebirds.
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Don't worry my friend. I was only teasing you. I won't be doing anything so cruel. I do honestly enjoy reading the comments with my readers' theories and what they think may or may not happen.
And yes my Trixie fic holds some key events that will link into this story, very soon actually. I'll admit it's not one of my all-time best stories, but it is a heartwarming one, at least I think so.
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It's very flattering to hear you say you look up to me. I only hope I can continue to share great stories and improve, so I am worthy of such admiration.
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Oh, what makes you think Twilight would ruin it?
2054546 OCD and a lack of self control.
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Twilight does seem to have OCD. Well, we'll just have to see what happens, won't we.
2054580 Eeyup.
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It's quite all right. I enjoy reading your foreshadowing.
YES! FINALLY, A NEW CHAPTER! EXCELLENT JOB!!
YEA GO LUNA!!... An again u cease to amaze me jaydex this chapter was ..... AWESOME!!!!!.....
Can't wait till u do the next chapter please keep up the good work u do on all ur stories :)
Very nice!
Just one small complaint...
You don't need more than one exclamation mark to denote an exclamation. It's really not needed.
I do have to say I'm glad I gave this story a chance. Truth be told I'm not one for reading romance but I have to say it's actually a very enticing book for me. It's a nice change of scenery for me so here have a moustache
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I'm glad you are liking it. After 10 chapters this story is just starting to really heat up. I'm hoping people will be like..."Wow!" till I get through what I've got planned for this.
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I can only imagine what happens later down the road. You definitely have the skill and characteristics, not to mention the story so far to prove it, of an outstanding writer. I didn't know what to think about this story when I heard about it, but am muy muy glad that I gave it a chance (not of Spanish descent). So yea, take the moustache You know you want it...
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Okay, I'll gladly take the moustache then. And don't worry, I haven't forgotten about this story. I will be updating it before too long. I just have to see to a few projects, like before.
A decade is 10 years not 1000. 1000 years is millennium!
2465729 Just how quickly things seemed to progress from when they meet to declaring their feelings for each other. I realise it's been a number of days since her accident so that could mean something else.
And I do mean to reference the first episode with Robin.
2546659 And that pleases me, it really does.
And now I am well and truly caught up in time to wait for the eleventh chapter of this thrilling tale of love and the other stuff.
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A little predictable, no? And for that matter how did you make it hidden?
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So you say he doesn't amaze you and then you contradict that by being amazed?
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Of course it is, haha.
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2567187 Indeed so.
It works!
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Hiya buddy!
I've been wondering how these work! Sweet!
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Haha, you dork.
How've ya been, pal?
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Yeah I guess I amma dork!
I've been okay, how about you, it's been ages.
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I know, palie... Work's really been tearing into me lately. I didn't get as much sleep as I wanted so I'm just browsing here until I have to go in or I get those few hours of sleep that probably won't change to much. Blehhh
I've been so behind on everything lately, so much to read and catch up on here. Sadly, this is the start of my work week.
's okay though. Glad you're on to chat with!
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If you've so busy, I shouldn't tell you I've been chatting with people online. I wouldn't want to keep you from sleeping. Just glad to know you're doing okay, even if work has you bogged down too. I know my job has been endlessly trying anymore. If you want to send a PM later, when you have chance, feel free. Probably shouldn't use the comments of Luna's story to chat. Good hearing from you.
You need work with your comma placement. Sometimes you forget to add them, other times you add them when they're not needed.
Fixing the little spelling errors would do you a lot of good too.
One thing I don't like about this is when the only word they speak is a name. I honestly don't think someone would just say a name and not get a reaction. It's like you forgot to add a line there and left the name as a placeholder.
Also, if Luna's bones were cracking, then how was she perfectly fine afterwards?
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First off - Millennium - a period of 1000 years.
Secondly - As for millennia - it's the plural of millennium. It's all there in the dictionary.com entry I linked above. I'd appreciate it if you make sure you know your facts before you go accusing someone of being wrong, when clearly they aren't!
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Anytime.
"forced to banish all humans forever"
Shame that we originate on earth. Further shame that we'd have simply NUKED you! Even more of a shame that, in mythology, a human wizard (or hero) could probably have single-handedly wiped out your country (princesses and elements included).
As such, I'm pretty sure Luna is either wrong or lying. More likely their father tried to conquer humans out of either fear ('cus we're apex predators and they're...ponies) or greed. We would have simply left or something, most likely. Especially if we already had a way to and from Earth (our homeworld) making it convenient.