• Member Since 29th Mar, 2012
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LucidTech


Tired always.

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Comments ( 2 )

It's very... choppy for lack of a better word. You really need to work on how smoothly the story flows because right now it feels like I'm driving down an old pothole filled dirt road. It makes it very confusing even for the most intelligent.

It's a very interesting idea. Maybe you should try some non fanfiction. I think that would be neat.

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