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Cerulean Swirl


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Twilight Sparkle, a magnificent alicorn and now a joint ruler of Equestria, watches quietly as her closest friends all die around her, one by one. However, the more she watches each death occur, one fact nags at the back of her mind: what if her friends deaths aren't just accidents? More occur, then the letters come. They all bear one repeating request. Give up the throne, or watch more ponies close to her die. That is, if Twilight can find the murderer first.
-Inspired by the movie Nonstop.
*I did not put the real murderer in the list of characters in this story. The character tag will be added at the end of the story, to prevent spoilers.*
-Coverart is courtesy of MetaDragonArt on DeviantArt. Thank you!

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 112 )

All of her friends are dead. Wonderful.

i like this story

Overall, I like your style! One small problem that occurred over and over: "it's" is not possessive. "It's" stands for "it is" and I had to remind myself that you didn't actually mean it this way. Over and over. You can see how this detracted from the reading experience, yes? "Its" is the possessive form.
In the same vein you used "who's" toward the end, which stands for "who is". "Whose" is the word you want.
Other than that, I liked the first chapter!

After reading the first chapter, I must say I'm hooked. You've got me on this one and I will read more tommorow. Great so far!

It's kinda weird how you keep calling Applejack a 'couch dweller' even when she's not on the couch anymore.

4849169 Good idea. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Thanks, Lunar!

Methinks somepony's in for a world of extreme hurt when Twilight finally catches them.:twilightangry2:

As for who the murderer is, I call

Blueblood.

4849608 OH YEAH. It's gonna be gooooooddddddddd :pinkiehappy:
Hmm. Are you right or are you wrong? :ajsmug: You'll just have to seeeeeeeee

4849699 Yep, it is! Can't wait to see whoever it is get their just desserts!:ajsmug:

As to that, I have no clue, really; that was just basically my own gut-hunch. That's why I put it in a spoiler box.:ajbemused::applejackunsure:

And yes, I will.:ajsmug:

As will we all.:raritywink:

4849718 Don't worry. They will. Oh yes. :pinkiehappy:
Well, it's a good hunch, I'll give you that. But we'll have to see just how good. And nice spoiler box, by the way. :pinkiesmile:
Exactly. :pinkiehappy:

4849932 I kinda figured that they would.

And I can't wait to see what sort of pain that Twilight dishes out to the filth!:rainbowdetermined2:

Well, thank you. And yeah, we will. Like I said, though, it was just a guess. That's why I put it in the spoiler box in the first place.:raritywink:

And thank you!:pinkiehappy:

Yup.

4849951 I don't think you'll be disappointed. I have a good idea of how. :scootangel:
Nice! :pinkiehappy:
You're welcome! Anytime. :twilightsmile:

4849955 Ooooo, can't wait to see that one then!:pinkiehappy:

Popcorn, anypony?:ajsmug:

:pinkiehappy::raritywink:

Cool.:twilightsmile:

4850006 :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Yay! Always nice to have a fan.
Naturally. Have some, won't you? *hands bag over*
:pinkiehappy:

4850013 Yep.:twilightsmile:

Yep. And thank you.:twilightsmile:

*takes some from the bag, passes it back and begins munching happily*

4850094 Yeppers :pinkiehappy:
You're welcome!!
Yay Popcorn!!! :pinkiehappy:

4850717 Indeed.:pinkiehappy:

:pinkiehappy:

Yep, popcorn!

I figure that it'll be nice when the "show" where Twilight deals with her friends' murderer takes place.:raritywink:

Btw, if I don't respond to you after you've replied this next time, we've gone out to eat dinner (supper?), so I'll be incommunicado for a bit.

I'll hollar at ya when we get back.

Well, IF you've replied to me by then, of course.

4850898 :pinkiehappy:
Yeah, definitely.
Well, if you need me, I'll be working on the next chapter! :pinkiehappy:

Nice start there.
But why do I think of System of a down when I read the last line?
[youtube=http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=ta60vyWdS5Q]
oh that's why.
Think that song would be fitting for U since it kills from the shadows.

Dragon:moustache:

4850914 Cool.:ajsmug:

And that's cool to know. Can't wait to read it!

Okay, now I think we're leaving.

Laters, taters.:twilightsmile:

4850941
No problem. This one last word just rustled the playlist in my head and put that song on play. I thought it fitting and tada.

Dragon:moustache:

4851085 :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Your vision is always appreciated.

I am so hooked on this story now! The suspense in finding out who U is is killing me! Can't wait for the next chapter.

4851292 :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: I'm glad! Next chapter is coming very soon, so....yeah.

Somepony's going to be very dead by the time this is all over. Twilight, in her promise to Applejack, will see to that.

Whether they know it or not, U signed their death warrant the minute they started this.

And I hope Twi makes the filth's demise just as slow and painful as equinely possible.

4851917 Ya got that right!
Question is, will ponies on here think that the murderer deserves this pain? Just something to chew on.
And yes, U knows what U is getting into.
Don't worry. The murderer will be punished.

Story is great, but I'm seeing a lot of lavender unicorn syndrome here.

I am wonder if U is working alone or with allies in the nobility. Especially the nobility who went from first in line after Celestia dies to forth, assuming the throne will reliquinsh to the next princessess over the next noble.

4852528 Thank you!

Can't speak for them, but I sure do! Every bit of it! This...person...is killing ponies that Twilight loves just to get her to abdicate in his or her favor.:twilightangry2:

Oh, they deserve it, alright!:twilightangry2:

Okay, good.:twilightsmile:

Again, good. Can't wait to see it.:ajsmug::rainbowkiss::twilightsmile:

4853035 That's a good point. That's kinda why I suggested the individual that I did in that spoiler box that I did.:raritywink:

(And I'm not sayin' who it was. On further reflection on my, my suggestion might be rather obvious, given the way Equestrian politics (and her so-called "nobility") work.:facehoof:

Wow, the Royal Guards really are completely useless, aren't they. :ajbemused:

4855084 :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: I'm so glad that you like the story! An author always likes to hear that their work is appreciated. :twilightsmile:

4856324 As Big Mac would say, "Eeyup".

4856618 I really do! It's getting really intriguing and interesting now!:pinkiehappy:

And yes, we definitely do.:ajsmug:

I just thought of something: I know that U has been knocking off everypony near and dear to Twilight, but surely this nutcase isn't stupid enough to try and kill Celestia or Luna?! They control the sun and the moon, for Pete's sake!

Even U isn't stupid enough to mess with that!!!

Is he/she?

4857397 I don't know. Is he/she?
Maybe yes, maybe no.

4857330 And it shall continue. Keep yourself posted. :pinkiehappy:

4857795 Oh, I hope not. Equestria (and probably the whole world) would be pretty much royally (pardon the pun) screwed if either one of those two were killed.

And that's interesting.

4857806 Good to know.

And I shall, trust me.

Weird thing when I tried to access this chapter, though. When I hope my favorites to check the updates, I noticed that, when it came to this fic, when I checked the chapter list, all it showed was Chpters 1 through 3. But, when I clicked on the link to Chapter 3, I noticed that the number box for Chapter 4 was there. So I clicked on it and read the chapter.

Then, when I clicked on the story title again, it showed Chapter 4 in the chapter menu where it wasn't there before I read the chapter.

Weird, huh?

Oh, well, it's okay now, and that's really all that matters, huh?

Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter! Will Twilight actually abdicate, despite her promise to Applejack? Or will she not, and U continue their kill-spree against her and her loved ones?

Guess we'll have to stay tuned and find out.

I have an idea.

What if it was Twilight itself that was killing them (craziness or multiple personality?)

4868790 Good guess.
Are you right? Or are you wrong?
You'll just have to see. :pinkiehappy:

Anyway, do tell the princesses to be careful. We wouldn't want them to be alone somewhere, would we?

As I said earlier, surely U isn't stupid enough to kill the two ponies who control the sun and the moon?!:applejackconfused::applejackunsure::ajbemused:

Is he/she?:applejackunsure:

4882060 I dunno. You tell me. :pinkiecrazy:
How far would you go for royalty?

4882065 how about the fact going fater them is bsaically no different than going after two dragons........ yeah.

4882065 Not so far that I'd basically doom the whole danged world by killing the only two ponies who cause the sun and the moon to shine, that's for danged sure!:twilightangry2:

Oh, I hope that U finally, finally gets what's coming to him/her! I know that you've said they would, but all this suspense is killing me!:twilightoops:

(Not literally, of course, but you get my drift.:raritywink:)

And U mocks Twilight about her mistake with Roseluck. That means U is always near and can see what she is doing. A guard maybe? Or... dun dun duuuun... herself? You know, because it is U. :trollestia:

Dragon:moustache:

4882178 You are exactly correct. :pinkiecrazy:

4884114 Hmm. Very intriguing.
Are you right? Or are you wrong?
You'll just have to see. :pinkiehappy:

4882193 Precisely. :pinkiehappy:
In due time, in due time. A few more things have to happen first, but...then you'll see.

4887008 Okay, that's good enough for me.

Although I'm a bit nervous about what's going to happen to those Twilight loves that are still alive.

But, as you said, we'll see.

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