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Spike moves on from his attempts for Rarity to notice his affection for her and travels to the Griffon Kingdom, where Gilda is seen drinking alone at a table. So, to make her feel better, Spike decides to talk to her where they hit it off.
Rarity and her friends decide to spy on him, to see if this relationship is not a ploy.
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Ooh! Love this ship! Gonna read this first chance I get!
this is good but it has so much wasted potential.
This could really use more detail.
I really enjoyed this. Great job.
Oh...?
I love it and the moment that the requests are back on could we expect a sequel?
4845306 Good question. But, no sequel.
Good story. It was funny.
4845319 OR another story about these two for later.
4845569 Hmm, I don't know...maybe.
I barely got a chance to edit the first two paragraphs....
I was gonna give some advice but you never asked me any questions or anything....
Obstinate refusal to ask for help doesn't really give you any reason to put my name on this.
4845585 I'm so sorry, I thought you were too tired. So I finished the story, I'll give you credit for editing though.
4845598
I was waiting until you had it written out to edit it. I do need to sleep though. And you never asked me anything, you never asked, Hey does this work? Is this a good idea?
You just wrote what you wanted without specifying what kind of help you wanted, what I was supposed to be doing, or anything really.
I'd honestly prefer if you pulled my name off this, because I really didn't do anything.
4845606 Okay, I will. Maybe I should be more specific when I ask for your help again.
Nice premise, but needs a LOT more detail, sounds really, really, rushed....
4845572 I'll let you finish up until then.
4847209 Well okay then, but there won't be a sequel.
The shipping idea was good, spike and gild a? Never done I like that idea. The story however wasn't very good, everything is breezed through, characters actions or deviations from what we know are poorly explained at best or just never explained at all. Spike getting sent to meet the king leaves and is back (without ever meeting with him?) In a dozen sentences. No interior monolog us or character development at all. This reads more like a story board of some kind that will act as a blue print for a story your gonna write.
4847303 At least you're honest. I did this to test the waters of romance, unfortunately, I didn't do what was expected.
4847312
I'm brutally honest. Hey if you want to write a story all the power too you, if you want to write a great story your gonna need to put a lot of time into it and get a few pre readers that will force you to re write it a dozen times.
4847518 I usually get an editor for my stories, I never had a prereader for my stories.
4847530 editors keeps you from making alot of mistakes but I find pre readers really help keep your story in the right direction, the input from others keeps you from making something only you or someone exactly like you will want to read. If you stop listening to your fans/audience you end up with a lot of jar jar bink's and whiny aniken's.
4847559 I'll make sure to get a pre reader next time around.
4847303 Dracoian Soul did, I can't spell his name.
I Love It
The idea was good.
Characterization was more or less good.
The execution, though...
The plot looked kinda like Pinkie Pie jumping on a pogostick under the influence of caffeine, in that it jumped all over the place. It jumped from encounter at bar to reencounter at ponyville (very little in between). It was also missing several activities/first dates between Spike and Gilda that would have resulted in a mutual attraction. On the whole it seemed outta nowhere.
But you are playing with a ship that I've only seen a few times on this site. If this wasn't already set to 'complete' status, then I'd be kinda wanting to jump into the next chapter..
way to hurried up, could not start to enjoy it, it was to fast paced, and the words where so mashed up that the flow of the story was chopped off, you need to use more commas, and try to explain things a little bit more
Spike and Gilda do have something in common: Mates for life kind of deal.
More?
5082995 There is no more, sorry.
condensing a 10-12k long story into only 3k? Of course it's gonna end up hurting it... such a shame, because it had a lot of potential and a great story-line... maybe even a line or two about Spike apologizing to Gilda about how Ponyville doesn't have any good carnivorous restaurants, and in response to her query of "and how would you know anything about that", he'd simply say that dragons can eat and digest literally anything they can fit into their mouths, and their teeth make sure whatever's too big doesn't stay that way for long, so he had the inclination to try some a actually loved it, but the social bla bla bla... I'm just rambling at this point
5316562 I figured it would, I rushed it pretty badly.
I really enjoyed reading this, but the way you ended this story, I feel incomplete. Please consider writing a sequel to this story. I feel that there is more to tell.
6417420 I have to agree with Star. the ending just seemed a little forced. the rest of it was great though. keep up the good work.
It was good just rushed